All Comments on 'The Dinner Invitation'
by Pugger13
- 30 Comments
Great story. Seems like there is room for a multi part continuation here. Whether or not it happens, I hope you keep writing and submitting more stories. Well done and thank you.
Well done - good use of the language and in painting a mental picture of the story. Keep writing.
She is a cheater. If she wasn't happy there is a thing called divorce after which she can do what she likes. The neighbour is a piece of slime and a predator who deserves some retribution.
No justification for her behaviour in this story.
Thank you. I'm glad and relieved that someone has enjoyed it because this was my first ever attempt at writing a story, and I was a bit nervous.
I do have a continuation in the works. I almost have the rough draft completed, and then I'll have to go through it and make the necessary changes, etc.. It's a bit longer than this one since it covers a larger timeframe.
Thanks again for the positive review and comments.
5 Stars, it's hard to believe this is your first story, you're a talented, gifted writer, please continue making me and the others in your audience happy. Hopefully, chapter 2 will follow soon.
This is terrible 1star sorry you wasted 10 minutes of your life writing this
Nice story. But I can see it now. Next chapter, her husband catches them fucking, and plans his revenge on both of them.
First few paragraphs
Real estate agents don’t “switch” to part time. They work as little or as much as they want to ALL the time. Tired of reading about who are either over the top assholes or dumbasses. Do I really want to read one more?
Obviously her marriage is in deep trouble. If this asshole cared for her and her children he wouldn't be the agent of breaking up their home. Once she's divorced he can be her man for as long as they both want. Right now he's just another selfish short-sighted asshole who can't see past his dick or care past his next orgasm. I suspect the husband is already fucking around on this bimbo, so the whole fucking group of losers deserve all the suffering that comes their way. Except for the children. As usual it is the kids who really get fucked over. Sad.
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Thanks for the effort.
Anonymous certainly has an incredible lack of taste. I enjoyed reading this first effort. I still have yet to find a single tale written by anonymous. If anonymous has put words together where are they? I enjoyed the start from this new author. Age makes a difference in attitude and insight. He may be older but he is not a creep. If you lose a spouse too early in life you have a much different perspective. In his situation it fits he would still be able to respond to and be able to do the job. Good on you. I hope you prevail in your journey and write for your enjoyment as well as your audience.
If you do write another, first work on your dialogue. People just don't talk like that!
The sex was good, and getting what she needed that her husband wasn't giving her was good, but the dialogue sucked. The ownership bullshit detracted from the story
Started off with great promise, but the quick degeneration into very graphic dialogue just lacked realism. That's not really how people behave in those kind of encounters. Lighten up. It was plenty sexy before you went there...
Ok until…tongue fucking her asshole. I hope she enjoyed tasting her own feces when he later kissed her.
Loved it. Also loved the verbal was sooo hot despite others negative comments. Loved it.
Well written in my mind and a decent story. I've got no problem with the attraction, but it's still cheating. File for divorce and then have at it. Love, and lust, will wait and open the door for a guilt free relationship going forward.