All Comments on 'The Locker Pt. 08'

Alas! The tale ends as all tales must, but everything balances out and all parties concerned have received their just rewards. Now let us all join in the enjoyment of the sorrows and lamentations of poor lonely Steve, because of his inability to control his impulses, his egocentric selfishness, and let's be honest here, his being a general grade A, world class all around jackass. He will never truly find the woman for him because he will inevitably drive her away.

And on a more serious note. Steve is fictional, but there are real Steves running around not being able to balance fantasy and real life, and they are the ones who end up hurting people if not killing them. Consent of both parties is necessary in all aspects of fetish life and once consent is withdrawn, the game stops.

In other words, don't be a Steve.

Neosteeled

I agree don't be a steve

I would have loved for him to get a taste of his own medicine and gotten locked up and given the same treatment he was willing to dish out

then maybe he would have learned to communication skills to express his fantasies with his partner and then know hoe embarrassing it can be to have the vibrations start in a meeting or in front of a sales pitch and then the shock

what's good for the goose is not always good for the gander

Truly brilliant writing and what a fitting end to a magnificent story. I have loved this from the very first words and been captivated by your writing skills. I do Love how you have ended it with the right Belts on the right Ladies controlled by Caring Loving Keyholders Perfect.

I enjoyed your story very much Thank you!

First time commenting a story here, but this series really called for it.

Well written with a capturing story line (pun very much intended) that didn't lose focus, and didn't go too far. A bit predictable at some places, surprising at others.

Quite nice balance between fiction and possible reality.

Thanks for writing it, and thanks for sharing it.

By halfway through page 4 of this chapter I'm afraid I had to skip to page 6 to find out if Cindy would be okay. I wanted to finish reading the story but Steve's abusive behavior got pretty hard to read. I still feel kind of emotional about it.

I have to acknowledge that part of my response is because some of it hits kind of close to home. I'm in a relationship where I've given up an element of control and I struggle with how my partner uses that control. Sometimes it's okay, sometimes it's not great. It's a shared kink, but sometimes it gets too close to that fuzzy area where I don't know if it's an okay thing. So Cindy's plight felt familiar at an emotional level.

It might be worth putting in more of a warning at the beginning of this chapter. Reading an acknowledgement from the author that, yes, Steve is being abusive, and no, it's not a good thing, and yes, it will turn out okay... would have helped how those parts of the story were landing. As it was, I was almost afraid to keep reading because I was afraid I, as a reader, was being implicitly asked to agree that this situation was okay and sexy.

On the whole I enjoyed the story but I wish it could have been a *good* relationship between Cindy and Steve. I wish the belt and other *mutually* enjoyed fetishes could have been explored without the deeply uncomfortable feeling of Steve bullying Cindy past her limits and changing her into his dream doll instead of him loving her as she was.

It's strange, because I have read nonconsensual dollification stories and kind of even enjoyed them, but that's because I knew what I was in for. The framing of this story was such, however, that I couldn't suspend that much disbelief, so there was no other way to frame Steve's behavior than as abuse.

It's a good story and you're a good writer, and I intend to explore what else you've written. But I, at least, would have benefitted with the psychological safety valve of an acknowledgement of just how problematic Steve's behavior was.

Maybe what I've learned here is how sensitive I have become to matters of informed, enthusiastic consent. Literature that explores fantasies—as contrasted to reality—which I truly do recognize this story to be, is good, and has its place, and this story was skillfully done. The resolution here might simply be that I need to recognize dubious consent in erotica as a 'limit' of mine, unless I'm expecting it and in the mood for it. :-)

I appreciate all of your comments. I do apologize for Steve. Robin tried to warn Cindy (as well as you, the reader) that he had an evil side. I'm afraid in all of my stories, one of the main characters is dominant, often overly dominant, while the other is somewhat, or largely submissive. That's just me...

I do believe that Cindy enjoyed herself, up to a point, and then she escaped to, hopefully, a better place with Robin.

I enjoy writing erotica, and I intend to continue with other stories and themes. I sincerely hope everyone enjoys my fiction - and please always keep in mind that these stories are fiction (and not some road map for evil).

amazing series loved all of it even how it ended. Please tell me there is going to be a second one following the two girls in their new relationship

Alas, I have no plans to continue this series, or start a new one involving the two heroines. Not sure there is much more I could do with this theme....

Loved the ending, would have loved to see where their games together took them. Thanks for writing

it would be neat if somehow steve could somehow guess robins password and take over both of them

FANTASTIC FANFUCKINGTASTIC!!

Thank you so much for this fantasy. It was so much fun. I feel like I know these girls.

This was 8 great chapters, love it all. Idk agree with the other Anonymous commenter another chapter where Steve took back control of both their chastity belt and continued his fetish with two lesbians this time, just wishful thinking..

To me this is one of the finest stories I have read on Literitica, ever, I saw all sorts of ways it could end - ,maybe the girls could have got Steve locked and shocked - but your way is best of all IMO.

Loved it, spent most of the day reading it from beginning to end. Although, in my mind, Cindy and Robin find some way to gain control of Steve and teach him how to be a good dominant, and not just an abusive horndog.

Pretty good story.

How about an alternate ending, or extending this one, so that Steve is put in a belt and "enjoys" what the girls have been through?

Robin should probably not continue telling Steve or his potential partners that he's a good man when he repeatedly behaves the way he does. He's controlling and abusive and doesn't really seem to consider women autonomous individuals.

Loved this and the concept of the belt Steve never learnt from his 1st mistake and would love to read another chapter or two of how the ladies have managed to enjoy their belts and what new adventures they took