All Comments on 'Zip-Tie Fiend'
by switchboy257
- 22 Comments
You should be locked away in a room where the light comes in stripes.
I thought of a similar scenario using handcuffs and superglue. Thououghly enjoyed the story.
What a cool and original concept. Total delicious mayhem!
Reminds me of the Joker in Batman only with an X-Rated twist!
I will remember this story for a long time!
Very cool!
The concept is very erotic. Humiliation without physical violence. The possibilities are endless. The only quibble i have with it is, is that it is what is sometimes called a "laundry list" story. I think it could have been much more erotic if you zeroed in on a few of the situations, providing more detail. For instance, that's a hot fantasy about the guy spread-eagled in the gym. It could have been hotter, though, if you had given more physical description (good-looking, football player, maybe he had a little dick) and picked out some of the girls (maybe one was the cheer leader he had the hots for) and their responses. The best stories eventually come down to the telling details, characterization, etc. Otherwise you have synopsis. However, the narrator as a character is very well developed. Good idea.
A great story line, though I do agree with the first poster in that you should have broken up your submission into separate chapters. But other than that, an excellent bit of prose.
Had great potential, but follows a predictable pattern of escalation. Also tends to bog down about halfway through. The writing is well done.
Like others said, this is original. But my favourite bit is the one where anne is tied up and you have exposed her thick, brown pubic hair. A woman's pubic hair is so sexual, almost forbidden. Its the most secret, private hair on her body and to have it exposed to eyes that should not see this must be so deliciously humiliating. This sexual hair is only what a husband should see. Certainly not strangers. Certainly not her daddy. Please, more.
I would have LOVED your story if u add more incest in it....or maybe a similar story that is all about incest, it's such a taboo isn't it....you get a 4 from me but your story wasn't all that great
...but sexy in a disturbing way. You might have gone into a bit more detail about the frenetic and reluctant acts the couples got into while tied. Maybe descriptions of their gyrations to escape turning into love humping. But still, you hit that fine creepy/hot note.
I hope that there's a part two coming for this, If the story was a bit longer describing each incident in more detail and perhaps giving the point of view of those helpless too it wouldn't hurt
Literotica spends so much time worrying about underage characters showing up in stories, but allows underage authors free reign throughout the site. switchboy257 should be zip tied to a chair and not allowed to write again until he turns 18, probably another four years at least. This story has all the excitement any oversexed eighth grader could hope for!