All Comments on 'Brother Sister Just Wanna Pt. 03'
by jlc123
- 10 Comments
Stop. Just stop.
You are obviously clueless as to how long a paragraph should be and what the rules are for that. You also seem oblivious to the concept of setting dialogue apart by putting it in quotation marks. It makes your shit too painful to read.
Give up, at least until you grow up.
Maybe do some switching after they move in together.
Yes please continue, as now you have introduced another sister-brother into this story, who for money problems will share an apartment together and go further by swapping girlfriend-boyfriends. This adds a HOT element to this story. Now is the time for you to add a good physical description including boobs and cocks etc. to this story.
You can really get a lot out of this 2 way sex and paired off brother-sister couples. Can be really HOT. So, please continue.
Yes I will continue, my writing skills are not the best but I have always longed for a story like this and no one has ever written one like it. I will continue as long there are favorited hearts on the continued story. I have said before that if someone wants to rewrite the story with better Grammer skills contact me and I will give you credit for the editor edition. This story is for all that need this story just just a good story. If you want to rewrite the story it night be best to wait for it's completion as I am really not sure where this will end up. I need to think about the theme for a while before I write the next part.
New chapters may not continue. Seems a change in submission management may have taken place. Having problems getting part 4 & 5 submitted.
Would love to see additional chapters
NO!!!! DO NOT CONTINUE!!!! SERIOUSLY! This is without any doubt the absolute WORST story ever.