All Comments on 'Seed the Mother'

Good story line, but better if you have the mother seduced by the son in some manner. Definitely the impregnation thing is a huge turn on. Have him get her drunk, or slip her a roofie, or even tie her up against her will, forcibly taking her, and forcing her to take his child. Keeping her in the bedroom until she can't get an abortion. She slowly comes to grips with her feelings and in the end, promises to give him as many children as he wants.

gizz in my mom. jizz in my mom. spunk in my mom. cum in my sweet cunny dearest son.

By: Teddy

Needs editing. The incorrect words threw the whole story off for me.

Do us a favor and go play with your marbles instead of putting out this infect junk.

Repeat,

Dumb.

Making your mom pregnant I got my mom and my aunt which is moms sister and two of my sisters two of my aunts daugthers pregnant. We all live in same house plus I have my friends come over we gangbang them bareback too.

It is apparent that English is not your primary language. For this reason, it would be a great help to you, if you hooked up with an editor who could help you navigate the strange waters. There are people right on this web site who would be glad to help you. Do not give up! When a famous Russian ballerina was asked how she got so good. Her response was practica, practica, practica. Do not give up dig down a little deeper. There is very little which cannot be accomplished by hard work. Go get em.

I'm so tired of the aggressive mother. There was no seduction, no blackmail, things that make a story hot. And the son is too old! Give us something different. Oh, and yeah, about that grammar problem....

I'm considering giving you some stars, but not sure how many yet. If I do it would only be for your story line as the rest is utter CRAP !!!!! as your gist of the English lingo is way off. So get some help, also the story is to bloody short.

I did honestly considered giving 5 stars. However it was rather short and you did not explain how they started fucking each other in the first place. A mother and son does not naturally start to fuck each other once the son gets a certain age. Several things must happen to introduce that possibility first. But once the Jeannie is out of the bottle though. And I am sure the father/husband did not catch them on their first fuck. I am sure they tried to keep that fact hidden for a while so the question is how did he find out, when did he find out, and what did he do after he found out. In creative writing always ask and answer who, what, when, where, how, and sometimes why.

Short but I enjoyed it

Very sweet mother&son love

"I shoot my cum deep inside her, as I held her tight". A son breeding a place where he gets generated and lived there during nine months is bizarre, but hot. Pay no attention to those who criticize you for writing a short story. This is a place for short stories, not novels with endless chapters. It means you have the power of synthesis. Say what is necessary without wasting time on insignificant details. Go ahead.

Nearly all of the good authors have left Lit, including me. I won't use the username that I authored stories under despite having one of the highest combined scores for authors. In fact, many people believed I died lol, as I stopped writing stories here and went to other venues and media sources where I use a part of my real name as my author name.

There is too much nasty criticism of new authors and insufficient constructive criticism. Not everyone is an English Major but many have some terrific stories and are great storytellers, but they lack the "normality" of having writing skills.

These authors should be encouraged rather than criticized, but we don't get that because this is Lit where cowards are allowed to comment anonymously.

I always found it ironic that a newer author could have an excellent story to tell but grammatically, had some if not several issues, and they were absolutely railed for it.

But I, as an established author, who also struggled with writing skills but occasionally had people willing to help edit my work, under that username, I could write an absolute piece of garbage and be rewarded with 5 Stars and glowing comments.

Because of these reasons and several others here at Lit, new authors and many of the established great authors, have left for greener pastures.

So, what are we left with???

Mid-talent (at best) authors who once again, are praised for writing literal garbage stories because they are "established". There are many who can be named and most of them are found writing in the LW category, but I won't bother to name them, we all know who they are LOL.