All Comments on 'The Garden Shed Ch. 10'
by jasperspen
- 18 Comments
I've been following this series religiously - definitely my favorite stories on Literotica, and I think this may be my favorite episode so far. Wow!
Even after so many chapters still a good read. I can so much relate to first sexual encounters in the 70s, tho a little later in the 70s than this story.
This is a great story, totally believable & well written. I cannot wait for the next episode to appear, hopefully Mum will have some photo's taken soon & heaven knows where that will lead. Keep up the good work, well done.
You are a great story teller and I am anxious to read more of your chapters and stories. This story I found more exciting in the first half of the chapters. It has now become more of an adult sexual relationship. Still a great story as all of yours are but I see this story possibly ending up where they go off and live like a couple as they have drifted away from the family for the most part.
Simply outstanding. 5 stars isn't enough. I love "Sue" and where she was heading - then, you abruptly end. I sincerely hope that there are more installments to come, as this was a great series. I just want to complement you for resisting the temptation that (for my tastes) far too many authors fall into - namely, turning hesitant family members into raging nymphomaniacs that engage in endless "dirty talk" while having sex. "More" is not always better and you balanced playful but enticing banter with people just discovering different aspects of their interests. I also am glad that Sue developed a risk-taking, exhibitionist & voyeur side - but seems content to keep things on a more realistic scale (if incest can be said to be on the "realistic" end of the scale!).
It was very enjoyable, well written, well paced and had enough variation to keep me reading until I got to the last chapter. Reminds me a lot of times I spent with my sister though we never got this far, more’s the pity.
One suggestion though, have you considered using an editor to help you by reviewing your story before it is published? It would still be your story and your work but you could have some feedback to help you, for example, if the story is set in the past there is no need to mention differences with today’s technologies or getting muddled up with Sunday shopping because those did not open in the timeframe of this story.
If you are interested please let me know as I would be happy to help you, I do some reviewing for other authors on Literotica.
Well done and please keep writing
Great story and great series! I think I remember a story or two where you teased some anal action and would love to see that explored!
Like the previous 9 absolutely invigorating, which brought back some lovely memories from the early sixties.
Superb story, seemed so natural. Certainly got me hard though i had to read in chapters as written, due to not being alone. Is there a chapter 11? Feel it ended rather bluntly. Great work anyway. Thank you.
Good premise continued.
But sex is so automatic. No real nervousness. Not much foreplay.
Disappointing. Three stars.
I Just realised I didn't vote or comment on this the first time I read it, as I may not comment but I always vote on the stars. So here goes Brill 5 stars.
I've loved all the chapters so far. If I had a sister like Sue, I'd be sneaking into her bedroom every night. We could fuck and suck the night away. Now, I need to cum so bad, I'm going to read this chapter again.
What a delightfully, deliciously,dirty girl your lovely sister Sue is, I remember those days, our naivety our exploration of self and others around us. And you write of it so beautifully, with tenderness, I'm sure you must be a professional in your other world but thanks for sharing your stories, you will know this is not the first time I have read them. Your sister Sue must have been a good friend and maybe still is.