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Click here"OH YEAH! FUCK BRANDON! JUST LIKE THAT!" Lauren screams a few minutes later as her orgasm rumbles full speed ahead and I pound her mercilessly.
"I'm... there... too... Sis..." I pant, thrusting my hips as I slam my cock home, shooting deep inside her contracted cunt. "Oh fuck!" I moan as I jerkily deposit my load into her pulsating pussy. Collapsing on her soft breasts, my lips find hers but we're both breathing too hard to do much kissing.
"You really don't want to fuck dad, huh?" I ask when my breathing is under control. I'm lying on top of her, my cock still buried in her warm tunnel.
"I don't know," she says quietly.
"You love him," I say, ticking off reasons on my fingers. "He's caring and mom says he's good in bed," I add. "And you love to fuck, what's the problem?"
"Jesus, Brandon!" Lauren says, pushing me off of her. "You're such a guy!"
"You didn't seem to mind that a few minutes ago," I laugh, rolling onto my side next to her.
"I wish I could talk to Kristina about this," she says, eyeing me cautiously.
"We should probably loop in her in sooner rather than later," I admit. "She's going to find out eventually."
"Really?" Lauren asks, excitedly. "I can tell her?"
"Sure, why don't you two come over for dinner tomorrow night and we'll tell her together?"
"Okaaaay..." she draws it out like it really isn't okay.
"You want to tell her yourself?" I ask, shrugging my shoulders. "Be my guest, I was just offering." I hide my disappointment at not getting to see Kristina's reaction.
"But I still want to tell her here," Lauren quickly adds. "We'll get here early and I can tell her just before you get home."
"That works for me," I answer as I lean in for a long, passionate kiss.
"I should probably get home," Lauren says, breaking the kiss and rolling over to get off my bed.
"Yeah. I hope you liked your ice cream," I joke as I pull on my underwear.
"It was the best!" she laughs. "Thanks, Brandon."
We don't even bring it up on the way home or when I kiss her goodnight in the driveway. "See you tomorrow!" she says giving me a little wave just before she goes in the house.
When I arrive home the next day, I find Kristina and Lauren engaged in what appears to be post-coital cuddling on my bed. Their lovely bodies intertwined with each other stirs my cock to life before I get two steps into the room.
"You guys started without me!" I exclaim as my eyes roam over their naked flesh.
"We couldn't wait," Kristina says, disengaging from my sister's embrace and smiling at me. "Lauren was just telling me about your mommy fetish," she says, moving towards the edge of the bed.
"What?" I yell.
"Kristina!" Lauren says at almost the same time. "I was not!" Kristina laughs as she tugs at my belt.
"Okay, that might not have been exactly how she put it," Kristina smiles as I quickly remove my clothes. "But you admit you want mommy to come over and play, right?" she asks.
"Yeah, I guess I so," I answer as I pull down my briefs and kick them aside. "Did she tell you her dilemma?" I ask.
"Yes," Lauren answers for her. "She thinks I should do it."
"You do?" I ask, somewhat surprised.
"Of course, I'm new to this but I can't imagine having too many dicks lined up wanting to fuck you." Lauren shakes her head as Kristina continues her discourse.
"Seriously," Kristina says, leaning up on her knees and getting very animated. "Think of how convenient it will be to have your dad right there to fuck you whenever you want. You get horny after dinner? Bam! He's right there. You wake up horny in the morning? Just jump in the shower with daddy. Can't sleep? What better way to relax than..."
"Okay! I get it!" Lauren interrupts her, looking at me for support but Kristina grabs my dick before I have a chance to respond to Kristina's unexpected foray into daily horniness.
"Speaking of horny..." Kristina lets the sentence trail off as she bends her head down to lick my semi-erect cock.
"Would you fuck your dad?" I ask Kristina as her tongue swirls around my cockhead and flits across the sensitive underside.
"Which one?" she asks, coyly just before sliding her lips down the length of my shaft.
"That's right!" I say excitedly, looking at Lauren. "Kristina could be just as reciprocal for me and mom as you are!"
"This isn't funny, Brandon!" Lauren says as she watches Kristina suck me off.
"Well, she could..." I say quietly but not really thinking it's a possibility. "Nah, that wouldn't sit so well with the Andrews would it?" I laugh.
"Probably not," Kristina says, taking a breath. "Will you fuck me, Brandon?" she asks, scooting back on the bed.
"We haven't decided what I'm going to do about dad yet!" Lauren says but she rolls over to make room for her half sister to lie down next to her.
"Well, you know my opinion," Kristina says, pulling her knees up and spreading her creamy thighs for me.
"Mine, too," I answer while aligning my cock between Kristina's glossy pussy lips. Lauren scoots closer and starts caressing Kristina's breasts as I slide my cock into her anxious pussy.
"A bedtime fuck does sound nice," Lauren says quietly, obviously giving the idea more consideration.
"Hmm mmm," Kristina answers as she wraps her legs around me and digs her heels into my ass cheeks.
"I wonder if mom would let us sleep together?" Lauren muses as she tweaks Kristina's nipples. I'm building up my rhythm as Lauren sucks one of Kristina's taut nipples into her mouth.
"She would if she's over here sleeping with me," I answer. "It's all reciprocal, remember?"
"Don't get distracted!" Kristina admonishes me playfully. "I've got a receptacle for your reciprocal right here!" she laughs.
Lauren and I get down to business and give Kristina a long, slow, tantalizing fuck. With Lauren's hands and mouth on her top half and my cock and fingers stimulating her bottom half we tortuously incite her passions. Repeatedly ignoring her pleas, we take Kristina right to the edge of bliss before backing off, incessantly moving her to ever-higher levels of arousal. Without a word between us, my sister and I intuitively know how far the other wants to go each time. Finally, by mutual unspoken consent, we push her all the way through, culminating in an incendiary, bed-shaking orgasm and transforming her pleas into a scream of pleasure.
"OH LAUREN! PLEASE! PLEASE! BRANDON! THIS TIME! PLEASE YESSSSSS! OH FUUUUUK YEEEESSSSSSS!" Kristina, curses her way thorough her release, her body shaking uncontrollably through the most intense orgasm I have ever witnessed. Lauren is looking on in awe as Kristina's body convulses in orgasmic spasms and my cock keeps pounding into her raw pussy. As she clamps her inner muscles around my cock, I release my pent up load, filling her trembling pussy with my thick spunk.
"Oh fuck..." Kristina breathes as she crumples back into the mattress, her body shuddering through the after quakes of her eruption. "Damn..." she shivers, smiling at us while pulling Lauren into an embrace. I disengage my cock from her well-fucked pussy and flop down on the bed beside her.
"I can't move," she announces. "You guys need to do that to your mom!"
"We need to do that to me!" Lauren counters, kissing her best friend while mashing her boobs against Kristina's chest.
"God!" Kristina sighs again. "My nipples are raw and my pussy hurts but I've never cum so hard in my life! I'm still shivering!" Lauren wraps her arms around her as I pull the sheet and blanket over them.
"Wow!" Kristina shudders again. "I'm not horny anymore," she says, smiling at me.
"Give it an hour," I respond causing them both to laugh. I laugh too as I pull back the covers and join them in an embrace.
"I love you, both," Kristina says, pulling us closer.
We snuggle under the covers, a happy threesome without a care in the world. Well, except maybe whether we should reciprocally fuck our parents. But that's a story for another day.
- COMMENTS
This jumped the shark quickly. Dragging the parents into things snapped the elastic on the suspension of disbelief. Good example of why stories dont need sequels
The Kelly/Karen bit messed things up. Also, is Kristina now on birth control? Ever since they shifted to Brandon's apartment, there has been no mention of a condom and multiple mentions of 'filling her up.'
Only read 1&2 so far,
I love it all until dad was getting brought into it.
Also Kelly’s name becoming Karen in part 2 felt awkward.
Love the story, working on beginning of Ch 2….my pet peeve is the MAJOR character f’up with Brandon breaking up with “Kelly” in Ch 1 but Dad asking about what happened with “Karen” while working on the plumbing at the new apt early in Chap 2!
I don't recall reading this 2nd part of this series in the past. It's good but i am a little confused as to what happened with the concern for the need to use birth control. It seems to have disappeared unless the girls are suddenly on the pill. Maybe i missed that connection somewhere.
You lost my 5 stars when you brought in the parents....the same parents who tried to stop the half-siblings from fucking. It was a perfect brother sister threesome. All you needed to add was a little breeding and boom, perfection! Alas.....
Going great!!!! Would of been better if, you had the mother just get fucked by her son.. They doing it under his roof & not his parent's.. So, its not like they have to let the Dad know.. Since, basically the mom came over with the intend to get fucked by her son & not say anything anyways, with the Dad fishing.. If the mom tells Dad about her & their daughter, then she has to tell him about her watching their children fuck & masturbated, too.. Then explain, why she didnt tell him before.. I just hope Kristina brings her Mom over & let him fuck her, too.. Cant wait for next Chapter..
This is where you lost me. You had an amazing thing going and then suddenly and seemingly for no reason, you changed course and then got the parents involved. And after they were very against them dating because they didn't want the incest to happen. This would have been leaps and bounds better had you left the parents out and left it with their secret incest and the thrill of being caught.
Next up, the carpet installer, the pizza delivery guy and his 33 year old virgin sister who just left the convent...
Stay tuned!
Nah.
This story fell off quicker than Russia's currency.
Not gonna lie it's pretty good but I actually liked where the first book was headed like there'll be multiple girls that have sex with one guy not that this is bad it's just taking such a drastic turn like you decided that you want to change the story so it's good but it's not for me I do hope though that you do create some sort of story that's more like the first book
What a shit writer. This has great potential and then you fucked up what could have been a sexy, odd romance and devolved it into a lame duck fest. Pathetic.
WOW! Good job; thanks for sharing your work! I read this a few years ago, ran across it again,
I very much enjoyed it, although the parent's certainly bring in a complication that I'm not a fan of. Not a fan of sharing, and I loved the idea of both Lauren and Kristina being all his, even (or especially) because they are siblings.
This was tough to read through what seemed like a change in direction.
It initially felt like a fantasy, and very erotic, with an undercurrent of emotion that would rise to the surface as Brandon and his sister realized they loved each other deeply. Perhaps instead the threesome would become a committed unit, although Christina seemed to be in it a bit more for the sex.
Now it seems to be devolving into how much sex can we have, and how many people can we screw?
Still very good
About to start the next chapter...
I preferred this without Mum, but it was good nevertheless.
5 more Stars !
Rapier
I read the comments and I agree with Anon, what happen to the condom as there was no mention of Kristina going on the pill. If she didn't and no condom, she could pregnant really quick. 5 stars
I’m sorry, but you lost me here. I don’t know why these brother and sister stories always seem to devolve in a family free for all. It detracts insanely from the brother sister love story that was developing. I don’t get it. Why would the love for and making love to a sibling leed to “o, well, lets have sex with the parents”?
You are a very talented writer but this story took a wrong turn for me. And not only for me it seems.
Love it, so horny and also really enjoying where this is going. Please proceed to the next chapter.
You, my good sir, are a master of literature. Anyone to make decent erotic lit. That parentage reveal is on a whole different level of skill on par with Sir Arthur Conan Doyle! Also, all the sex scenes in this series are of of this word.
Um very good. But I think everyone has forgotten Kristena is not on the pill & Branden hasn't been using a condom lately. Anyway good story so far. Thanks!
Why does every great story always wind up being absolutely destroyed by the addition of swapping, cheating, or all characters getting together with everyone in the story? Seriously it happens every damn time I find a decent story. Do you guys f up the story intentionally? It's unbelievably irritating!
Lauren is so hot I just wanted her and Brandon to act like they are married and live happily ever after like a true husband and wife
You write a fun story, but I agree with some other comments that the story loses “zing” when you expand the action to more characters. The thing about taboo stories is that what’s happening is “wrong” and very very rare. If everyone is doing it, it’s not rare anymore and the taboo nature of it is lost.
For me, history has lost some of its magic.
The problem is not incest at this point, it is the fact that Brandon's relationship with lauren and kristina was special, now it is only about fucking, I am no longer able to feel that love that the three shared.
In the above story, Lauren seemed to accept only Kristina, and Brandon himself acknowledged that just Lauren was enough for him. In this story, he is clearly uncomfortable at first with the idea of fucking his mother, and ends up accepting because his sister insists, and suddenly he doesn't even care that Lauren fucks their father anymore, Lauren goes through as well. a similar process, sudden and seemingly convinced of everything by Kristina, who has gone from an innocent virgin girl to an uncontrolled nympho.
Lauren's first sexual relationship with her mother felt uncomfortable for me too, very forced and sudden. It feels as if they have entered a spiral of manipulating and convincing themselves to fuck different relatives, and when one feels uncomfortable the others try to convince him until suddenly the person feels comfortable with the idea and no longer cares about anything. to happen.
This lengthy review is not a criticism of you, I just needed to let you know how the story felt to me at this point.
So, what happened between you and Karen?"
LOL!
Did you write the story, or plagiarize it?
Hint; Brandon's ex girlfriend was named Kelly, not Karen.
It's supposed to be YOUR story, you cast remember your character names?
I stopped reading at that point.
Highly disappointing.
Wonderful, so insanely debauched and depraved, absolutely sucking fucking wonderful. Cunt lapping sex maniac Lanc’s UK.
Getting the parents involved is pretty hard core. Not sure how this will go. I think you should have made it just and the siblings and how they will work it out after finding out that Kristina is related. How can they stay together and not get caught. The incest thing is tantalizing but hard to make it work long term. Can you do this or will it all collapse?
Yeah, like other comments on here, there seems to be something "off" with this chapter. Terms "rushed" and "Lazy" were used to describe this chapter. Those seem fair because of inconsistencies and confusion. For one, is brandon's ex girlfriend's name kelly or karen? ANd, there was an Initial concern to use a condom with kristina and then, all of the sudden, No condom was used with kristina. Plus, there never was one used with Lauren. Other than those head scratchers, it was a decent read. But, then dad was suggested as entering the mix. I am Not against reading about dad/daughter incest but i don't like the way the plot is being suggested for dad/Lauren. That is a turn-off. I will delay my rating for now til i see how chap 3 measures up.
I won’t pile on to what most others are saying, but will note one recurring theme I’m not big in … the “ I lined it up and rammed it all the way in one thrust” oft repeated. Not a loving technique and misses the pleasures of slowly overcoming the resistance as the pussy lubes and opens up. Also doesn’t seem to match Brandon’s super lover character.
Just my opinion, your handle (Mr. SLAM) suggests you think differently and, hey, you are doing all the work of writing, so might not be worth the proverbial two cents.
"Of course, I'm new to this but I can't imagine having too many dicks lined up wanting to fuck you." This line is where the romance wax exchanged for pure sex. What happened to Brandon only being with Kristina as a way to substantiate the time with the one he loves? That was the validation for multiple partners. Being with "Mom" is a fantasy, but what does he really get out of it that makes it worth handing Lauren off to another dude (dad or not).
Great story up to here, but if Dad is brought into the loop in Ch 3, I'll read that far and drop the story mid chapter. Sorry to be a downer, but that will have killed the story for me.
Where to start... the whole thing felt rushed, the connection with the three central protagonists were sacrafice to drag yet more characters into the sheets. There was at least a passing nod to the natural reluctance on Mom's part to bed her own daughter. The story of her turmoil - like the intimacy between Brandon, Lauren and Kristina - was, frankly, betrayed in favor of short, unengaging sex scenes.
Okay, I’m going all Sherlock Holmes here. In my comment on the first chapter, I brought up my concern about a missing partial story. Now I perceive another mystery. This second chapter seems to have a bit of a different feel to it like it may have been written by another author or may be written out of sequence from the first. In the first chapter, Brandon’s ex was Kelly in this second chapter her name has been changed to Karen. I’m a little intrigued here, but I have no way of solving these mysteries.
Both chapters were great reads. But I need to agree with the commenters before me. The concept of making Lauren sleep with her father so that Brandon can sleep with his mom is a complete turn-off for me, especially when Lauren doesn’t want to do it. The mom insisting on this is really nasty in a bad way. She is pimping out her daughter to her husband because she is lusting to sleep with her son? Not good. Not good at all. And Brandon encouraging her to do what her mom wants while she doesn’t want to makes Brandon a real scumbag user in my eyes and not caring at all for his supposedly beloved sister. I would see the dad as a sexual predator if he should agree to his wife’s demand. Kristina now seems out of control for deliberately encouraging Lauren to sleep and actually start an incestuous relationship with her dad. Lauren should not be sacrificed so that Brandon and Mom can munch on each other. No Dads, please.
Where the first part was great and took the time to go over the details, this second part seems lazy and too eager to move ahead throughout.
story keeps getting better, even though its long you never really know because you are so engrossed in the story
When did Kristina go on birth control?
I agree...No parents...Get back to a 4 on 1 orgy with Lauren’s friends...
WTF, I can see where this story is heading and if I’m right and you include the parents especially the fathers in this story. You just fucked up a great story. It was a ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ story.
I agree with the most other readers: chapter one was awesome. Getting Kristina involved - ok and reasonable but then making her to the half sister was for me a downer. Involving the mother is normally for me not a problem, but in your story with the described background: no thanks (I would say unrealistic, but here at literotica...). But including the father ESPECILALLY when Lauren have NO intentions to do so and Brandon nearly pushing her? Sorry, but no ... unfortunatly no more favorite author or story....
took a good sex story, brother, sister, and teen girls, was hot. then brother and sister sex was hot, everything was good, then just had to ruin it, with the parents and all of a sudden, dad is going to fuck his daughter anytime he wants? WTF? you lost your readers, bud. just another crap story, i know where this is going not even going to waste my time reading the rest i don't want to know.
The story started out so hot with the lingerie party. Then, adding Kristina into the mix with Lauren and Brandon was OK. However, as soon as you added the “conversation” between Lauren and her mom, you lost me. I filter for brother/sister stories, and too often a storyline is going great, it’s erotic, sensual, and naughty, and then for some reason an author feels compelled to bring the parents into it, and it just ruins it. I’ll never know where things went between Lauren and Brandon, whom I look at as the main characters, with maybe Kristina as an additional plot line to spice things up, because I stopped. I’m done. If I wanted to read parent/kid stories, I’d filter for that. I don’t.
Was a great story right up to the point you added the parents, then it dropped to an ok story. It went from a loving relationship to kind of a sleazy relationship for Brandon and Lauren. Lauren who starts out wanting her brother then decides to become the family slut and Brandon who seemed decent for the entire first part of the story, being the caring guy who just wants his sister(s) and making sure they were satisfied then talks her into screwing their dad which makes him seem like a dbag and pretty much changed the entire feel of the story. While the first chapter was excellent, I probably wont be reading chapter 3.
I really like the Brandon, Lauren relationship. Kristina as well is okay but adding the parents destroy's all other relationships. Don't think I will bother with the next chapter. I know it's the authors story but I simply like the pure romance of Brandon and Lauren, doesn't need anything else. Too many others fractures everybody's feelings and muddy's everything for me. Leave the parents to their own thing let the kids go their own way before everyone gets lost.
Wow. Made me supper horny and hard. Blow my load several times. Great story.
I wish there was a way to set up a poll here. I would like to know if I am a minority or others think this story is really thought provoking rather than merely a wanker.
The brother sister thing was great. I think several guys had some sort of physical contact with their Sister. These stories let our imagination go where many of us did not when we were growing up. Some guys had some sort of sexual run in with their mom., I believe MUCH LESS than the sister contact? Again, ever since Oedipus there has been that weird desire and introducing Mom into this is hot to the guys, but maybe not to the ladies? In any event, getting dad involved would be GROSS! Maybe it was my very disfunctional relationship with my father, but the dad/ daughter thing is really repulsive to me.
But hey, this is the author’s story, not mine. He has done a wonderful job writing both HOT and Thought provoking situations! I applaud him for that and absolutely will not criticize him or his writing because of my messed up thoughts about families.
You can obviously see his work REALLY has me looking at my earlier years in a most analytical manner. Well done, sir. Even if you force me to open a couple closets i prefer closed.
I find it very aggravating to read some of the negative comments here on Literotica. This is a well crafted tale about a controversial subject, and the author did a great job expressing his/her creative talent! If you don't like the subject - don't read it. If you have constructive criticism - post it in the spirit of trying to help the author & do it in a respectful manner. Keep up the good work samslam & don't let disrespectful people interfere with your artistic expression.
many times before, sequels are very disappointing at best, but this was crash and burn. The parents........ REALLY!!! I won't be reading ch.3.
' "You think I should fuck your brother, right?" The way mom said it made it a statement rather than a question. "Well then, don't you think your father deserves a reciprocal arrangement?" '
Uuuh, fuck no I don't!!! My sister's pussy belongs to ME!! MINE!! Sorry mom, I think you'd be great, but no way do I want dad's dick anywhere near my sister's body! That pussy stays in the shape of my dick, and mine alone! Hell yeah I'm double standard selfish!!!!
(Hell, honestly i didn't want mom in there either!)
I love that they all enjoy each others love juices! A delightful pleasure ignored in too many other stories. Thank you!
I was so into this and wanting more!!! Then you ruined a perfect story by adding the parents!!!
You could have kept the parents out of it and could have added Alex or Kylie instead. I would have preferred that.
I’m starting to worry where this story is heading..Leave the fucking parents out of it
Bring Back Alex .. You did not need the Parents .. To Me Alex made more sense
I read chapter 1 and 2 in a single sitting, so the big picture of the story has a flow to it. I'm ok that Kelly's name got changed to Karen. She was minor anyways. What I did notice that detracted from enjoying ch 2 is how careful the characters were in ch1, to make sure Brandon had on a condom when he was with Kristina. In ch 2, Kristina simply gets Brandon many times with no mention of protection. Did she suddenly get on the pill and the reader doesn't know? I thought the first time they came together there might be an "oops" moment where they suddenly realize that they forgot the condom and panicked for a few paragraphs, but it didn't happen. Then they had sex again and again, and no one seems to notice. Is the author trying to set up a surprise pregnancy to deal with in the next chapter or is he inconsistent in writing and everybody's safe and we forget about the previous chapters and move on like nothing has happened? I don't get it. However, I've liked reading it so far and will continue, but my constructive comments I hope will help the writer to be more consistent between chapters so the story flows more smoothly.
The first part was perfect with the 4 18 years old. Where are Alex and Kylie?.
The story is getting bored. I will not read chapter 3 anymore.
Why include the parents. It started as a nice romance not it is a dull boring story
Dammit. I hoped Alex would return. Instead its kristina. Dont care for the parent thing tbh.
I just encountered Literotica this year, 2019. The collection of stories is extensive with a broad range of writers with fictive imaginings. The"Sleepover" series touches many relationship threads… too many for some as we find in the comments. The imagination in chapter 1 featured four curious teen girls getting lessons from an accomplished guy. The chapter developed a special bond among a brother, sister and a friend whom the reader did not yet know was a half-sister. As the chapter ended, this reader was satisfied that the saga had concluded. Later it was discovered that there is a Chapter 02 which reveals Kristina's origins and the greater inter-family history which opens a whole new set of possibilities.
I was satisfied that the story could have ended at Chapter 01. I was settled with the number of characters in the frame. You, Sam, took Chapter 02 to threads I had not expected; your imagination is larger than mine.
I'm going to read Chapter 03 with an open mind and anticipate it will earn my "5" as did the first two chapters.
Sam, write on.
im going to give your next chapter its first read, i hope it stays just a 3 way romance, involving mum qnd dad just RUINS whats a good love story with possible marriage and future kids.
Too many people, too complicated now, I’m just gonna ignore the next chapter, it hurts leaving a story unfinished but I’d rather leave it with Brandon, Lauren and Kristina, just a nice happy romance between siblings.
good almost to this point ... too many involved when the senior generation was included ... wont read the last chapter
The age differential just isn't unusual. The "endangering close families" is a much more credible objection.
Why do you people feel the need to ruin a series by trying to make it more complicated than it needs to be? Adding more people into the mix doesn't help a story, and in your case completely smashes what could have been a wonderful three way romance. Such a shame, I don't think I'll even look at the next chapter.
I gave it 5*. Like the mommy fuck, dad daughter, not so much. Maybe cause I fucked my mommy but would never do that damage to my daughters.
Different strokes for different folks, but moms and dads gross me out. I'll stick with sisters and cousins. Thanks for the story until that stuff though.
Maybe she wants Lauren to fuck her Dad, while she fucks Brandon side-by-side, just like Mom and Dad and Mr. and Mrs. Andrews do at the cabin, That would make a cool sequel right? Also, can't help wondering if Lauren is on the pill.
When all the girls were together Brendon had to wear a condom when he fucked Kristina . Then he starts having unprotected sex with her with no mention of any protection. Either on the pill or he ends up knocking her up.
Really love it but I must point out a minor flaw that disrupted the story's flow for me. I found it made me have to double back at times to clarify what was happening when you switched back and forth between the first person and third(?) person narrative perspectives. Brandon is your Narrator but at times you refer to "Brandon" in the third person in one sentence and then switch back to "Mom" from the perspective of Brandon narrating in the next. A minor problem in what is otherwise excellent editing.
I agree with anonymous (01/02/18) – leave the dads out of it. As far as that goes, I think Lauren and Kristina are enough, though I'm not sure where else it can go after and incestuous bisexual three-way. I have read this and most of your other stories and while I haven't cared for all of them, when they're good, they're very very good, and when they're bad, like this one, they're fantastic. For a long time I didn't think you would top 'My Virgin Sister', but this one does. Maybe I'm just old enough to prefer young girls.
WOW, there aren't too many step further that this can be taken - but I know a couple. Since this is many years old, I'll find out in the next chapter if they all make it all happen. Thanks again for writing such a erotic story!
I really hope the dad's don't get involved. That would ruin the really good story you have going...
just my 2 cents...
Stop the suspense, 'we' need to know what happened next !
Just get weaving - what's keeping you ?
I'm hoping they all end up in the cabin for big orgy/swapping holiday weekend.........
Rapier
As brilliant as it is, should have kept it simple with out adding the father(s) into it leaving the brother as the alpha male ijs
but I had to read the rest just to see what everyone else meant. I agree, it was better as a private thing with just him and his sister. Kristina was okay, but it's meant to be about the two of them mostly. It's just getting weird with all the other characters (of course sex with moms just weirds me out in general). You kind of loose the taboo deliciousness when everyone starts fucking everyone, then it's like it just seems everyday, and where's the fun secret from everyone? That said, I think the answer to Lauren being unwilling to sleep with dad is to have KRISTINA do it instead. Give her a little more experience.
Speaking of which, how could they mistake the meaning when they say "we wanted artificial insemination, and your dad donated sperm" "so?" "we did it the old fashioned way" - he's her father no matter how the sperm was donated! Why would she tell them that if she wasn't saying he was the father?
And maybe I missed something, but why does he always use a condom with Kristina until suddenly on page 4 (I think) he's cumming inside of her without one?
"OHMYGOD" & "Unfuckingbelievable" must be favorite phrases of yours.
I've been following this since the very beginning with The sleepover.
You really do need to wrap this story up
Say one chapter with Mom and Dad
Then
The finale with both families at the cabin
Seriously? No time for the ‘two-family orgy at the cabin’ follow-up chapter(s)?
Again, I'm late to the party on comments. I agree with parts of the comments I did read. I expected to find out the "secret" of the parents was that they were actually also brother and sister. Didn't like that they made Kristina their sister. I don't like the idea of the parents coming into the "party". Too many partners makes it confusing (just like Karen/Kelly...Kelly was Brandon's girlfriend in Chap. 1 and in Chap. 2 she is Karen?). What's next? The DNA shows that yes, Kristina is their bio sister but that her "dad" turned out to be Lauren's father and he wasn't as infertile as they thought? Then do we get the dads and Brandon to have sex with each other? I'm good with letting the story end here and using our imagination to take it any further. You could take all the comments into consideration (and I've only read about 6 of them) and make a new story using them with totally different characters. JMO Anyway, I look forward to reading more of your stories.
While I do like where it started and most of the second chapter. The whole Kristina is a Sibling, while not entirely out of nowhere with her comments about the parents at the Cabin, I don't think the Trade off for him getting to Bang his Mom is that the Sister has to Bang the Dad, if they wanted a 3rd person for the party, hell even a 5th they have 2 people from the First story that are ok with the whole Banging Brandon with the other girls. But I'm just a Reader and probably won't read the 3rd chapter because I'm not looking forward to the Dad being involved, Props to the Mom for only Banging her Daughter and not her Son because someones gotta Bang the Hubby else its cheating part. Though a Side step (Because characters have Agency and all that), They could bring the Mom in without her getting dick, Like she did while watching her Kids fuck, So long as she only has sec with Lauren (Maybe even Kristina), By all rules we know she can be involved, Not sure where cumshots/eating cum filled orifices fits in but TECHNICALLY it may or may not breach the no penis rule.
Honestly, Lauren doesn't want to do the Dad, you can have her do it, its your story and all, But we don't need to hear about it, if that makes any sense, she does it once and doesn't like it or doesn't do it at all, whatever works, Kristina really should not be given that much credit on her input because she said it herself, she isn't that experienced (only 1 person to date and it ends up being her Brother), But just because Lauren Could have sex when ever she wants, but if she isn't attracted to her Partner why bother? (That parts from Experience, Lack of attraction leads to bad sex.)
And Lauren also states that she isn't really attracted to her Dad, And that the idea is a little ew (Paraphrasing) and I can't really blame her for it. The pay offs not all that great really, and IF we end up with the Mom/Dad being regulars in the story in the Sexual way, the story is going to be Convoluted to all hell.
In conclusion, please for the love of all that is Incestuous and Holy, Please don't bring the Parents into it just for that sweet Incest Trifecta. Bring Alex back, Brandon liked her. Speaking of, Brandon wasn't sure about the Mother until a few days later either. Gotta love that Character Development.
Don't worry about 'who who' owls or mistakes. It's cleaer genetic attraction drew all siblings together. And this isn't a simple cuck tale as 'mistake' implied. The mom is clearly respectful of her modified reciprocal vows. Perhaps a few glitches could be caught by a fellow lit author in careful edit prior to professional publishing. Genetic attraction is the secret thread tying the story's events together. Well done.
Adding the parents and (eventually, the Andrews, I assume), is a mistake. It takes away from the story and just turns it in a swapping orgy. No thanks. The whole 'Kristina is your sister' swapping debacle is a bit too contrived just to expand the swapping. It's unnecessary. If you are into wife swapping, then go to that category.
Personally, if I were Brandon or Lauren, the first thing I'd do, is ask for a paternity test, to see who my father is. After all, their mother is obviously a swinger that doesn't care who fucks her, and her husband is one of those guys that gets off watching someone else doing what he shoud be taking care of. So realistically anyone could be their father.
Incest stories are, by their very subject matter, supposed to be a very private and intimate thing. Thats part of the appeal. By making the same mistake so many other authors make, by adding in more and more characters to the mix, it's the exact opposite of what makes a good incest story, completely ruining that secret intimacy that appeals to incest fans, it's just another swapping story.
You need to keep track of the characters in the story, it's not like there are too many of them. Who is Karen? In chapter 1 the girlfriend was Kelly.
like it very much..
hope there will be part 3 where it will be a family gathering and that is a very happy healthy family life and wish that i would be part of a loving family.
While I couldn't rave high enough for chapter one, (whew!) this one is slowly turning me off. Bringing mom in is borderline, but dad? Total turnoff.
Personally I dont see why brother isnt agreeing with her not wanting to fuck dad. I mean, what guy wants to share his girl(s) anyway? I sure as fuck wouldnt be sharing Lauren with anyone! Sorry mom, it was a nice thought, guess deep down Im just a two woman man these days! ;)
I LOVE the first 10 pages of this story (combining chs 1 and 2), after that it gets a bit much. If you are to do a ch 3 which doesn't seem likely, my advice is to pull back from the parent discussion. If Lauren wants to keep playing with her mom, fine, but cut everything else out. No discussion of her relationship with Brandon to the father and no more talk of Brandon and his mom. I think the secrecy of Brandon and Lauren makes it the hot story that it is. I love the dialogue you give to this story. Some authors just focus on the sex thinking that's the hottest part, but for me it's easily the minds of the characters. The better the dialogue, the better the situations are set up and the moral dilemmas are dealt with.. I just think the hotter the story becomes. Taking this story as an example of what I'm talking about, it turns me on exponentially hearing how badly Lauren wants it, how much she craves her brother. And I love that it becomes a story about how close the two of them are as brother and sister yet marriage remains never considered. Some people take it there stupidly imo. They are brother and sister and will always remain that way, but they crave each other as well. That's hot. Well done sir.
loved the entire story until the dad was brought up. would have been a 5, but I think a 3 fits better now
Loose ends need tying up please.
Will she wont she?
Will he wont he?
Will he get to 'have' the other half sister?
etc. etc.
Really liked this story up until a parent became involved in the relationship. Don't particularly like incest stories with parent/child incest.
I love your first story and I even I liked this one but why did you to have to go with present tense, It's kind of annoying.
Both stories are so well written, The half-sister doesn't bother me. but started to lose me when the mother was added. And totally lost me when they start talking about bringing the father in.
Other problem I have is early in the story they were careful about using protection/ Then all of a sudden Brandon and Kristina are going at it with no protection. Or is this a set-up for something later on?
The name slip with dad saying Karen instead of Kelli would have been forgivable if Brandon hadn't done it also. What he should have said was "Besides, after all the fighting Kelli and I did," that would have made it look like dad just forgot her name.
this series is so well written and amazing im a sucker for father daughter sex, love stories and harems so please write more i love your work! cant wait for next chapter
It would have been the best for the story to move on without involving the parents.
It started going downhill when mom got involved and i just had to quit it the moment the dad got added. Brandon should atleast be possessive over her sister but instead he wants her to fuck her dad when she herself doesn't want it.
More with four?
Hard to say, depends on how you handle it.
Looking forward to more !!!
This was a fun chapter. Your writing style is still wonderful. Dialogue is believable and realistic. Narration and descriptions are clear enough without dominating the flow of the story. And let's not forget character development. All good, all well done.
The most important thing I want you to know about how to move forward with this series is that whatever you decide to do will be the best choice. I decided a while ago to try to be more appreciative of Authors' efforts, and their generosity in sharing them with us For Free (tyvm).
Having said that, my only suggestion is that whatever new couplings might take place, small scenes with high levels of resisting incest that yield to the taboo attraction. Otherwise, you wind up with Group Sex, and I find that the Incest dynamic gets too watered down, even when elegantly rendered.
As another reviewer mentioned, it's heading towards too much of an incest free for all.
Makes it less special.
I liked the story until the talk about having their dad join. That ruined things for me, the story basically went downhill for me after the inclusion of the mother, where I started fearing that the dad would also get involved.
For most guys it's very different to share a woman with another woman, compared to sharing her with another man.
I would expect Brandon to be a bit more possessive of Lauren. I certainly would in his place.
If the author wanted to add more sexual partners, what about having one of the other girls join them again instead?
I vastly preferred the first chapter to this second one.
Seems like the author forgot a character's name when writing this second chapter:
Her name is Kelly, not Karen
liked this story but... kinda wanted sister to say she only want brandon. for male willing to share brandon with safe females... but she only wants brandon herself.
I've highly enjoyed reading both these stories. But wasn't the break up in the first story with a Kelly, and then dad in this story talks about Karen..? Doesn't take away from the story much, but just an admin note..
Wow!' In my next life I want to be Brandon, or Lauren, or Kistren. Hell I'll even settle for one of the parents. Again WOW!!!!
I'm a little ashamed to say it but like to keep my incest limited in stories. There is a hypocrisy to it but hey we're already talking about incest, why not be a hypocrite while we're at it. :-P
I've found a jive with sibling incest, I can work with mother son, I'm least comfortable with father daughter but when I'm desperate. However, when you start throwin' them all together in a free for all you've crossed my threshold. The mom threw me off and just as I started to come to terms with it you throw in the dad too... I'm with Lauren on this one. At least leave the daddies out of this.
Very hot except...
You lost me when you added the parents into this very good story.
I hope you do another chapter but drop the parent and let Kristina , Brandon and Lauren work it out for them selves.
I like a good daddy/daughter incest story but not at all in this story that stands very well by itself. Keep the parents out of any future stories on these young siblings.Just turned me off when you put the mom in, then thinking about adding the dad.
... here about the parents' involvement. I'm satisfied with the three siblings' participation. Perhaps with the occasional get-together with the other two young ladies.
Ok, maybe more than occasional.
Please keep these coming.
(no pun intended)
RaM
Hope you keep this story going. I was all for Brandon and Kristina getting together, but now I can't wait for the parents to fuck them also.
I'm much more comfortable with (half)sibling incest than parental involvement, whether father or mother.
Lost me in the last few pages.
I'm just waiting for Alex, the black girl to come back. I'm not feeling the daughter/daddy issue. Great story overall.
I'm still worried about K getting in the family way.
Maybe Lauren can watch mom & dad get jiggy with it and then decide if she is going to do daddy.
Love the story. And can't wait for Chapter 3.
I just finished page 4, after Lauren and her bro tag team their half sister. Did I miss something or did he shoot a huge wad of cum into Kristina's fertile pussy. No condom. They have been pretty careful about that so far during the whole story. Why haven't they discussed getting Kristina on the pill before now, since they are going to be doing the zuga-zuga on a regular basis now. Just wondering... oh well back to page 5... Great story.
Yes, I too think this is great. I like the dynamic of the parents swapping and Katrina becoming a half sister, added to the incest of Lauren and her brother. I think Kylie and Alex being dropped early on is a good idea. Too many characters, when later in the story Mom was going to be included also. However, I don't know that I think this should go further. I too am not a fan of Daddy/Daughter sex and in this case it looks almost coerced. Daddy/Daughter sex can too often seem like rape. The man is older, usually larger, weilds authority over his daughter that usually a son can shake off when contemplating his mother. I'm wondering if this should end right her, though it is kind of an awkward way to wind it up. Just my thoughts. I think Brandon's handling of Katrina's first time was good, though I think it'd have been better if the other three girls had given them the privacy of the room for her first experience instead of it becoming a spectator sport.
I think this may have been the best story I have read on this site. Nice flow to it, great content with very good detail. Loved it ! I think there is a little more to write about without going to far. Great read ..
As always, your writing skills are amazing. I thoroughly enjoyed these two chapters and really hope you'll continue this to the inevitable conclusion where both families are eventually fully swapping everyone. Don't listen to the naysayers. Let your imagination do what it does best and just run with it. You're amazing.
great writing style, the parents having an open relationship was a crazy twist! Bravo, bravo. Hope you continue.
Don't bring the dad into the sex it will ruin whats going on and is good about the story I know it may sound fucked up but I'm not really a big fan of the dad daughter incest so please leave him out of it if you write another chapter and if that means leaving out the mom then so be it
Everything that ithadtobeiowa was absolutely spot on. And Sam, unfortunately the appreciation isn't allowed over 5, I definitely would have scored higher! Thankyou, both from an entertaining story to read and the amount of orgasms I had reading your depraved wild imagination and what it can think up lol. 😊
It works for the story you're making. Follow the plot that you made. Don't cater to the whims of others because they want to jack/jill off to your story. Make yourself proud with your well made, engaging and truly entertaining story.
Damn... Amazing story. Like how intricate you made the plot line...
Don't add Dad. That'll just make the whole family weird, and it'll mess up what Brandon, Lauren, and Kristina have. But I do think that you should expound on this Mom thing with Brandon...
I really like what you did here. You made ano 8 and 7 page read effortless. Some things I feel about where this should go next:
1.Don't bring back the friends from chapter 1. They had a logical place there but really wouldn't add anything to the story besides extra pussy.
2. Decide what is going to happen to Kristina. Obviously she is having unprotected sex with Brandon. Is this an oversight or a set up for a later development in the plot?
3. Lauren and Brandon are portrayed as a couple. Since the relationship they have is out in the open, why not have them live the couple life? Move in together, decide on sexual encounters together.
4. I am not sure about the dad. I believe you have the writing skills to add him into this group and still be entertaining, but then I really think Lauren and Brandon need to live together because to me their relationship is the real plot of the story.
5. The constant simultaneous orgasms are a bit annoying because they are just so implausible.
6. A little more back story on what the actual lives of the Brandon, Lauren, and Kristina look like when they are not fucking. Does Brandon work? What does he do? Where does he want the relationship with Lauren to go.
Kristina and Lauren's lives. What do they do? Why do they not date anybody their own age? Where do they see this relationship going?
7. You portray Lauren as being the driving force in anything that takes place in this story. What are her motivations? Does she love Brandon as a man or as her brother who she happens to enjoy fucking? Brandon is much more experienced than her yet a 24 year old man let's the 18 year old High School girl call all the shots? Seems off.
8. I may be a sucker but again. Love. Right now it is set up so Brandon is the readily available stud but has no life or expectations towards anyone outside of the sex he experiences. The only person exploring her sexuality is Lauren and she does it without any regards to Brandon or Kristina.
9. Add in some basic human psychology. I know this is fiction but the way you portray the protagonists is unrelatable. There is no jealousy, no commitment between anyone, no emotions attached to the thought processes which lead the characters to act a certain way.
All in all I really like your writing. Actually chapter 2 was more interesting to me than chapter 1. I am just missing the "human" Touch in your characters. After all they are more than fuck machines.
I actually loved this story so much and what Brandon and Lauren got that i actually think about it, it feels strange but i just kinda love what they've got. And i don't know if you should add the dad... be sure to keep what Brandon and Lauren have.
Your story's stellar so far, please don't add the dad, it'll dilute the whole essence and just turn it into a family orgy.
Adding the dad will ruin what's between Brandon and Lauren. But, the story was incredible
Two are a couple, threesome starts to be a multitude (but handled with care, maybe works), foursome or five some is sure disaster, always somebody results wounded and hurt. Lets parents play by one side and the kids by they our side. Give them the chance (with the parents compliance, if you want) to be a threesome independent (it seems to work for them), is my opinion, of course, you are free to write all that's you want, but this is a sexy story driven to be a complicated relationship if the parents are actively involved!
However, I like the story, is hot and interesting!
I apologize for my English, is not my native language.
This story is really hot!
I hope that the author wants to write another chapter more at least!
You make a blue balls!
Good Job!
Im not tryin to talk shit or anything, but I think including the dad seems kind of stupid because i feel as though it would ruin what Lauren and Brandon have.
I agree with an earlier comment about personally not wishing to include the dad in the story, but that Brandon ultimately gets to sleep with the three girls without anything detracting from that. I would also love to reintroduce the other two girls into the story, even if they sort of barge their way into a little orgy. If there's two things I love in my pornographic fiction, it's incest and harems. A man can dream. :P
Love the intensity of the sex and the suspenseful exposition of desire and secrets.
Love to read about group with both parental sets and sisters. Wondering why he didn't ask for anal when sister says "anything you want."
What really appealed to me was the almost harem like nature of this story. I feel like introducing another male would detract from the established tone. It'd be interesting if Brandon was able to "steal" him mom away from his dad.
Can't wait 4 more keep up the good work. I'm guessing this will all lead to the cabin 2 sets of parents in a pile there kids in another.
Who is Karen?
Brandon had a girlfriend in Ch. 01
Her name was Kelly.
Great continuation of an already Hot story . Got me off more than once.
Looking forward to the next chapters... no matter where they go. Sure it'll be Hot.
Don't stop now!!