- Incest/Taboo
- Donk
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All Comments on 'Donk'
by Rockofmarriages
- 33 Comments
This was a nice little story with humour, romance and likeable characters. An enjoyable first attempt and hopefully not Rockofmarriages last.
Nicely developed, interesting, and ripe for continuation. I'd also advise an editor for grammar/homonyms/punctuation, and as a Cali native note that "Sierra" is Spanish for "mountains", so "Sierras" means "mountainss".
I enjoyed this short episode and I really hope you decide to visit those two rascals in your future work.
Easily a 5*!
I hope you decide to revisit Donk and Annie. Good job on your first submission. Continue to improve and develop your writing skills and style.
I seem to remember a line from a movie saying "What's a Donk?" Maybe "Crocodile Dundee"?
That was an outstanding story, and I enjoyed a great laugh at the end..... I hope that there is more to this one!
You have a great talent for bringing your characters to life and making it fun to read, as the others have said PLEASE continue with these two and hopefully with new stories and characters.
A few little errors that need clearing, but great story line, especially the end. Echo Canyon, indeed.
Well written. Great read. Waiting for more of this story. Thanks
I agree with the comments that I read. I really was laughing out loud {lol} also. I'm dying to find out who won the pool.
This I loved. I only comment when I thoroughly enjoy a story and I can say I surely did enjoy this one. I, too, would like to see the story continue through their wedding and building of Donk's dream house and the lovers surviving a severe winter and having their first child. Please continue.
Thank you all for the comments - I have to say that seeing over 20K reviews is well beyond my expectations. This was a story that quite literally popped into my head while I am writing a different (and longer) story.
I am in 100% agreement that I need an editor, as my style of writing is unique. I use MSWord spelling/grammar check, but it is not that good. I am trying to find an editor here on Literotica.com: As that is a volunteer role, their services are in very high demand. If you know one - send them my way.
Due to demand, I guess I have to return to this story once I get chapter 1 of my other story edited and posted.
amusing and entertaining story
but really sloppy writing.
"Donk" was a truly enjoyable story. You developed some interesting characters and put them into a great setting. You really need to continue this with more of Donk, Annie and the rest of the clan.
If I have ever read a "lead" chapter this is it. Continue, please continue!
Good story, but between cousins, is this a real story of incest? Cousins can marry, until Charles Darwin married his cousin, as did Jerry Lee Lewis. Even Woody Allen married his adopted daughter, and no one called him incest.
I think this story should have a continuation, and perhaps be in the romance section, depending on how the author continues to plot the story.
For me, it's a nice story, more romantic than incestuous.
5 * for you, and hoping there will be more chapters to come.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
AND one of,if not The absolute Best surprise,double-zinger ending to a first (?) Chapter of a story that begs continuation. Five and faved. Please keep it going.
I would love to hear what the rest of the family hear going on, like did they hear from the moment they got there, her confession or just the sex part.
Well written - not by any means a "wham-bahm-thank-you-ma'am" story.
Hilarious and surprising end. Well Done! 5*