All Comments on 'Don't Drink and Swive'
by Medivh
- 10 Comments
i had to quit your grammar and usage is all wrong. Maybe from translation but need to fix it and yes not in this category as well
Not even close. Your english isn't great and a lot of mis-used words starting with the title. 1*
You really should stick to writing in your own language.
A sexy little story, but certainly not Incest - no blood relationship. Medivh also needs to check meanings of some words. A gross taste, for example would not be a strong taste, as may have been meant, but a horrible taste. Keep writing, though. It was interesting.
1. Wrong category.
2. English is obviously not your first language. Please use an editor to eliminate your near - endless stream of grammatical errors.
3. Other than 1. and 2. the story was fine.
Enough posters already stated it. I didn't even read more than two sentences.
Well the language barrier for starters. But an editor can indeed help with that as well as the grammatical issues.
Also to people saying this isn't incest.
The category is incest/taboo.
he stated it is taboo to kiss let alone have sex in public in Japan. So yss it is in the correct category. Incest is not the ONLY taboo thing in this world.
The category is incest/taboo, and there certainly were taboos here - public sex, unprotected sex, etc. The grammar is an issue, but otherwise a fine effort.
I didn't notice the category, but overall I thought the story was hot and really liked it. Thanks for writing!