All Comments on 'Family Vacation Pt. 05'

I really enjoyed this series and wish it wasn't ending. There were a lot of errors with the names in this chapter however and required a little more attention to figure out.

I would bave finished reading the story, but all the misspelled, wrong and missing words ruined it.

I’m honestly slightly disappointed in this finale. I’ve enjoyed this series since you published the first part and have been eagerly awaiting new installments, but this ending was a bit of a letdown. I had hoped that it would conclude with an intimate, emotional encounter with Maggie (it had seemed to be building up to something like that), but it quickly devolved into emotionless, inebriated group sex. That’s just my opinion, though.

Missing words, naming the wrong person or relative relationship. I liked it but as someone else pointed out if didn't feel like the ending we were originally headed towards. Keep up the good work as I enjoy your writing style.

Ala "or it could have ended like this..." Matt and Maggie end up back in their room alone for the final night and do for real what they faked to piss off her ex, and much more. Or Chloe and Mike drop by and they all end up getting hot and sweaty in a hot tub. Many possibilities. Just keep writing and partner with someone to proofread for you, the story lines you come up with are very good, it just needs another set of eyes to polish it to brilliance.

I agree with some of the previous commenters; this was a huge disappointment. This story started off great, but it ended as nothing more than a heartless, soulless work of cheap erotica. I loved your other stuff... I know you can do better than this.

I was hoping it would conclude with an encounter with Maggie. I get that nudity was a family thing or whatever but I felt it wasn’t necessary for the story to finish with a group sex session. Shame.

The first four chapters were great; so why did you have to ruin it with this garbage?? We were all hoping for a special connection between the guy and Maggie... not a stupid, mindless fuckfest. You obviously don’t care about your fanbase.

This was a great story! The build up was great and I loved the end......even if I wish it wasn't the end. Great work

I say fuck everyone else’s comments you do you I love your writing and if they don’t like it they don’t have to read it, “turned out like cheap erotica story” where the hell you think you’re reading this from idiot

Did the author really just post an anonymous comment on his own story defending his lackluster ending and insulting those who thought otherwise? Lol 👇🏽

Alice getting head from Alice pulling Alice’s head closer to Alice’s vagina...

Chloe pushing Chloe off her brothers dick...