All Comments on 'Losing Control at the Lake Ch. 01'
by Scheherazade73
- 21 Comments
I'm envisioning the perfect little 18 yo brunette and I can't help but wish I could've been in Jayme's position at some point in my life, having a neice like that crushing on me. Good work. Keep writing
Do wish some commentators would just lay back and enjoy the images that such a delightful story gives.
Gotta say that as an Australian, the image of a 'douchbag' is positively revolting.
If someone was to call me that they would get a size 10 boot in the ball bag.
There now I have gone off again.
Did like the story and your expertise in placing in front of me.
This is my favorite story sseries of all time. Pretty sure I've read it about 25 times.
Some of my favorite authors will write so vividly, but with obvious grammatical errors from time to time. This is understandable when conveying intense passion. With your writing though, you seem to edit pretty well. I appreciate that. Not to mention the thrilling and stimulating storyline. You have shaped the characters well, and made the circumstance believable. I am really looking forward to reading further. Very well done!
I like this story very much. I like the style of writing, plus how much he cares for her.
great start..you held my interest from the start and did not disappoint ..if there was a 10 then I would give yu a 10. sorry it can only be a 5
This has been my favorite set of stories.
I don't think that Jayme and Dana should add someone to their affair because I feel as if it would take away from their relationship, but i did enjoy that you added Dana having a relationship with Josh because it added conflict to the story and conflict is what makes it seen realistic. Please don't stop at chapter 2. Please keep it going for as long as you can. :) Bravo!
this was absolutly amazing. i love the way you write and im extreamily picky when it comes to things like that. Your great and im in love. you need to continue, and not just to chapter two... i need more :))))))))))))
Such a well written and emotional sensual story, was so much fun to read and so hot as well. Please do continue with more of them!
i've didn't actually read entire story just yet. bits & pieces. here + there.
all that i've can say now to what i've read - bravo + encore & phenomenal....
part2 - somehow someway it becomes `the uncle + the niece & derek's mom`
{or} the niece + derek's mom get into romp somehow someway which will set up
the uncle getting in with them being part3
great story. just on little thing, a person in their 'eighteenth summer" is only 17. i'm not sure how picky the censors on this site are. but, be warned
love the intimate detail, one of the best stories I've ever read on here! Can't wait for more
This story has lots of potential for further chapters. Please keep on going.
Thanks for the generous feedback, everyone. I aim to please! It's my first time posting, so thanks for being gentle ;)
Great story! Thanks for sharing. I gave you 5 stars for this wonderful story.
RecHiker
I made myself cum to this story!! More! More! More!
Pretty please?