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Click here"OH YEAH! FUCK BRANDON! JUST LIKE THAT!" Lauren screams a few minutes later as her orgasm rumbles full speed ahead and I pound her mercilessly.
"I'm... there... too... Sis..." I pant, thrusting my hips as I slam my cock home, shooting deep inside her contracted cunt. "Oh fuck!" I moan as I jerkily deposit my load into her pulsating pussy. Collapsing on her soft breasts, my lips find hers but we're both breathing too hard to do much kissing.
"You really don't want to fuck dad, huh?" I ask when my breathing is under control. I'm lying on top of her, my cock still buried in her warm tunnel.
"I don't know," she says quietly.
"You love him," I say, ticking off reasons on my fingers. "He's caring and mom says he's good in bed," I add. "And you love to fuck, what's the problem?"
"Jesus, Brandon!" Lauren says, pushing me off of her. "You're such a guy!"
"You didn't seem to mind that a few minutes ago," I laugh, rolling onto my side next to her.
"I wish I could talk to Kristina about this," she says, eyeing me cautiously.
"We should probably loop in her in sooner rather than later," I admit. "She's going to find out eventually."
"Really?" Lauren asks, excitedly. "I can tell her?"
"Sure, why don't you two come over for dinner tomorrow night and we'll tell her together?"
"Okaaaay..." she draws it out like it really isn't okay.
"You want to tell her yourself?" I ask, shrugging my shoulders. "Be my guest, I was just offering." I hide my disappointment at not getting to see Kristina's reaction.
"But I still want to tell her here," Lauren quickly adds. "We'll get here early and I can tell her just before you get home."
"That works for me," I answer as I lean in for a long, passionate kiss.
"I should probably get home," Lauren says, breaking the kiss and rolling over to get off my bed.
"Yeah. I hope you liked your ice cream," I joke as I pull on my underwear.
"It was the best!" she laughs. "Thanks, Brandon."
We don't even bring it up on the way home or when I kiss her goodnight in the driveway. "See you tomorrow!" she says giving me a little wave just before she goes in the house.
When I arrive home the next day, I find Kristina and Lauren engaged in what appears to be post-coital cuddling on my bed. Their lovely bodies intertwined with each other stirs my cock to life before I get two steps into the room.
"You guys started without me!" I exclaim as my eyes roam over their naked flesh.
"We couldn't wait," Kristina says, disengaging from my sister's embrace and smiling at me. "Lauren was just telling me about your mommy fetish," she says, moving towards the edge of the bed.
"What?" I yell.
"Kristina!" Lauren says at almost the same time. "I was not!" Kristina laughs as she tugs at my belt.
"Okay, that might not have been exactly how she put it," Kristina smiles as I quickly remove my clothes. "But you admit you want mommy to come over and play, right?" she asks.
"Yeah, I guess I so," I answer as I pull down my briefs and kick them aside. "Did she tell you her dilemma?" I ask.
"Yes," Lauren answers for her. "She thinks I should do it."
"You do?" I ask, somewhat surprised.
"Of course, I'm new to this but I can't imagine having too many dicks lined up wanting to fuck you." Lauren shakes her head as Kristina continues her discourse.
"Seriously," Kristina says, leaning up on her knees and getting very animated. "Think of how convenient it will be to have your dad right there to fuck you whenever you want. You get horny after dinner? Bam! He's right there. You wake up horny in the morning? Just jump in the shower with daddy. Can't sleep? What better way to relax than..."
"Okay! I get it!" Lauren interrupts her, looking at me for support but Kristina grabs my dick before I have a chance to respond to Kristina's unexpected foray into daily horniness.
"Speaking of horny..." Kristina lets the sentence trail off as she bends her head down to lick my semi-erect cock.
"Would you fuck your dad?" I ask Kristina as her tongue swirls around my cockhead and flits across the sensitive underside.
"Which one?" she asks, coyly just before sliding her lips down the length of my shaft.
"That's right!" I say excitedly, looking at Lauren. "Kristina could be just as reciprocal for me and mom as you are!"
"This isn't funny, Brandon!" Lauren says as she watches Kristina suck me off.
"Well, she could..." I say quietly but not really thinking it's a possibility. "Nah, that wouldn't sit so well with the Andrews would it?" I laugh.
"Probably not," Kristina says, taking a breath. "Will you fuck me, Brandon?" she asks, scooting back on the bed.
"We haven't decided what I'm going to do about dad yet!" Lauren says but she rolls over to make room for her half sister to lie down next to her.
"Well, you know my opinion," Kristina says, pulling her knees up and spreading her creamy thighs for me.
"Mine, too," I answer while aligning my cock between Kristina's glossy pussy lips. Lauren scoots closer and starts caressing Kristina's breasts as I slide my cock into her anxious pussy.
"A bedtime fuck does sound nice," Lauren says quietly, obviously giving the idea more consideration.
"Hmm mmm," Kristina answers as she wraps her legs around me and digs her heels into my ass cheeks.
"I wonder if mom would let us sleep together?" Lauren muses as she tweaks Kristina's nipples. I'm building up my rhythm as Lauren sucks one of Kristina's taut nipples into her mouth.
"She would if she's over here sleeping with me," I answer. "It's all reciprocal, remember?"
"Don't get distracted!" Kristina admonishes me playfully. "I've got a receptacle for your reciprocal right here!" she laughs.
Lauren and I get down to business and give Kristina a long, slow, tantalizing fuck. With Lauren's hands and mouth on her top half and my cock and fingers stimulating her bottom half we tortuously incite her passions. Repeatedly ignoring her pleas, we take Kristina right to the edge of bliss before backing off, incessantly moving her to ever-higher levels of arousal. Without a word between us, my sister and I intuitively know how far the other wants to go each time. Finally, by mutual unspoken consent, we push her all the way through, culminating in an incendiary, bed-shaking orgasm and transforming her pleas into a scream of pleasure.
"OH LAUREN! PLEASE! PLEASE! BRANDON! THIS TIME! PLEASE YESSSSSS! OH FUUUUUK YEEEESSSSSSS!" Kristina, curses her way thorough her release, her body shaking uncontrollably through the most intense orgasm I have ever witnessed. Lauren is looking on in awe as Kristina's body convulses in orgasmic spasms and my cock keeps pounding into her raw pussy. As she clamps her inner muscles around my cock, I release my pent up load, filling her trembling pussy with my thick spunk.
"Oh fuck..." Kristina breathes as she crumples back into the mattress, her body shuddering through the after quakes of her eruption. "Damn..." she shivers, smiling at us while pulling Lauren into an embrace. I disengage my cock from her well-fucked pussy and flop down on the bed beside her.
"I can't move," she announces. "You guys need to do that to your mom!"
"We need to do that to me!" Lauren counters, kissing her best friend while mashing her boobs against Kristina's chest.
"God!" Kristina sighs again. "My nipples are raw and my pussy hurts but I've never cum so hard in my life! I'm still shivering!" Lauren wraps her arms around her as I pull the sheet and blanket over them.
"Wow!" Kristina shudders again. "I'm not horny anymore," she says, smiling at me.
"Give it an hour," I respond causing them both to laugh. I laugh too as I pull back the covers and join them in an embrace.
"I love you, both," Kristina says, pulling us closer.
We snuggle under the covers, a happy threesome without a care in the world. Well, except maybe whether we should reciprocally fuck our parents. But that's a story for another day.
- COMMENTS
This story........ Like most of the people leaving comments I liked the first chapter. There was something special about it. This one.......the train derailed. I like the story between Brandon and lauren, and I don't mind Kristina being there. They make sense when they mention Lauren needing a reason to be there. It makes sense that Brandon would have sex with Kristina. Otherwise she starts to feel like a third wheel and the readers feel bad for her. The problem I have is they don't go anywhere. Brandon is 'dating' Kristina, but yet she only comes over for sex. How does the illusion work if they are not seen together?
I'm not against the included parents thing, I'm against adding them for no reason. If the Mom had walked in on them and masturbated to watching, that would have worked. They could have noticed her as she left. That could have been the opening to her and Lauren's conversation. That would have been better then Lauren trying to seduce her mom out of the blue. catching them and seeing that, could have been what convinced mom to think about sex with her kids. Its a more natural ease into it.
In the first chapter there was an interaction between the siblings that was fun and I enjoyed. This chapter seems to have lost it. It's either they are having sex, or talking about sex. There is nothing else to this left but sex. Brandon said he would be great with just Lauren. It bothers me that he is great with just her, but now he is looking forward to doing his mom? I understand he is not a dominate person, but why is he letting Lauren convince him to sleep with his mom? Then we have the dad introduced as a possible fuck buddy for lauren...... Once again we have a character (Lauren) That doesn't want to sleep with someone. Why is Brandon okay with this happening? He is feeling weird about doing his mom, but nothing about Lauren doing her dad? I would think if he is great with just Lauren, then he would have a problem with others fucking her.
This chapter has hit the sex scenes hard, I hope the next ones actually tell a story other then who is going to fuck who. Maybe have Brandon or Lauren develop a backbone? Maybe the author will go out of his way to actually have something besides a long sex scene with minor breaks that just lead to more sex. So far in the context of this story the world is two houses (Brandon's and The parents) and a cabin somewhere. A great story needs more then just sex.
I'm going to avoid rating and see if like one commenter said, this was wrote later and inserted in. This chapter would be a three at best if I did rate it.
Just my point of view,
Buddy J.
Samslam,
sorry but I kinda agree with the other Monkey's in comments. I'm kinda being hit with cognitive dissonance by the different potential connections that you might make. Mom, Dad, The Andrews parent couple, etc... No I was happy in Fantasy World with Brandon and the 18 year old girls. All combinations of the Five. sigh.
Wow you had a great read going here for the most part, 5 stars all the way until this FUBAR. The slip on the character name is one thing but then you have to bring the old folks into this. Whom by the way are so dead set against even the slightest thought or possibility of incest, for about two minutes that is, until of course they think they might get a taste. That cost you 4 stars and the only reason I gave you the one is because beneath that one star it says, I HATE IT! That said, your a decent writer and I like longer stories like this but I guess your imagination ran out for the kind of story you had started. I hope you can pull your shit together and continue writing hopefully with what it takes to follow a good story line through. I'm older than the parents in this story so don't think this is some younger reader revolted by the thought of the parents getting involved. Its about follow through and giving your characters a mind of their own and following them where they take you, not pushing them where you want them to go. "Thanks for the effort and keep writing." W
This jumped the shark quickly. Dragging the parents into things snapped the elastic on the suspension of disbelief. Good example of why stories dont need sequels
The Kelly/Karen bit messed things up. Also, is Kristina now on birth control? Ever since they shifted to Brandon's apartment, there has been no mention of a condom and multiple mentions of 'filling her up.'
Only read 1&2 so far,
I love it all until dad was getting brought into it.
Also Kelly’s name becoming Karen in part 2 felt awkward.
Love the story, working on beginning of Ch 2….my pet peeve is the MAJOR character f’up with Brandon breaking up with “Kelly” in Ch 1 but Dad asking about what happened with “Karen” while working on the plumbing at the new apt early in Chap 2!
I don't recall reading this 2nd part of this series in the past. It's good but i am a little confused as to what happened with the concern for the need to use birth control. It seems to have disappeared unless the girls are suddenly on the pill. Maybe i missed that connection somewhere.
You lost my 5 stars when you brought in the parents....the same parents who tried to stop the half-siblings from fucking. It was a perfect brother sister threesome. All you needed to add was a little breeding and boom, perfection! Alas.....
Going great!!!! Would of been better if, you had the mother just get fucked by her son.. They doing it under his roof & not his parent's.. So, its not like they have to let the Dad know.. Since, basically the mom came over with the intend to get fucked by her son & not say anything anyways, with the Dad fishing.. If the mom tells Dad about her & their daughter, then she has to tell him about her watching their children fuck & masturbated, too.. Then explain, why she didnt tell him before.. I just hope Kristina brings her Mom over & let him fuck her, too.. Cant wait for next Chapter..
This is where you lost me. You had an amazing thing going and then suddenly and seemingly for no reason, you changed course and then got the parents involved. And after they were very against them dating because they didn't want the incest to happen. This would have been leaps and bounds better had you left the parents out and left it with their secret incest and the thrill of being caught.
Next up, the carpet installer, the pizza delivery guy and his 33 year old virgin sister who just left the convent...
Stay tuned!
Nah.
This story fell off quicker than Russia's currency.
Not gonna lie it's pretty good but I actually liked where the first book was headed like there'll be multiple girls that have sex with one guy not that this is bad it's just taking such a drastic turn like you decided that you want to change the story so it's good but it's not for me I do hope though that you do create some sort of story that's more like the first book
What a shit writer. This has great potential and then you fucked up what could have been a sexy, odd romance and devolved it into a lame duck fest. Pathetic.
WOW! Good job; thanks for sharing your work! I read this a few years ago, ran across it again,
I very much enjoyed it, although the parent's certainly bring in a complication that I'm not a fan of. Not a fan of sharing, and I loved the idea of both Lauren and Kristina being all his, even (or especially) because they are siblings.
This was tough to read through what seemed like a change in direction.
It initially felt like a fantasy, and very erotic, with an undercurrent of emotion that would rise to the surface as Brandon and his sister realized they loved each other deeply. Perhaps instead the threesome would become a committed unit, although Christina seemed to be in it a bit more for the sex.
Now it seems to be devolving into how much sex can we have, and how many people can we screw?
Still very good
About to start the next chapter...
I preferred this without Mum, but it was good nevertheless.
5 more Stars !
Rapier
I read the comments and I agree with Anon, what happen to the condom as there was no mention of Kristina going on the pill. If she didn't and no condom, she could pregnant really quick. 5 stars
I’m sorry, but you lost me here. I don’t know why these brother and sister stories always seem to devolve in a family free for all. It detracts insanely from the brother sister love story that was developing. I don’t get it. Why would the love for and making love to a sibling leed to “o, well, lets have sex with the parents”?
You are a very talented writer but this story took a wrong turn for me. And not only for me it seems.
Love it, so horny and also really enjoying where this is going. Please proceed to the next chapter.
You, my good sir, are a master of literature. Anyone to make decent erotic lit. That parentage reveal is on a whole different level of skill on par with Sir Arthur Conan Doyle! Also, all the sex scenes in this series are of of this word.
Um very good. But I think everyone has forgotten Kristena is not on the pill & Branden hasn't been using a condom lately. Anyway good story so far. Thanks!
Why does every great story always wind up being absolutely destroyed by the addition of swapping, cheating, or all characters getting together with everyone in the story? Seriously it happens every damn time I find a decent story. Do you guys f up the story intentionally? It's unbelievably irritating!
Lauren is so hot I just wanted her and Brandon to act like they are married and live happily ever after like a true husband and wife
You write a fun story, but I agree with some other comments that the story loses “zing” when you expand the action to more characters. The thing about taboo stories is that what’s happening is “wrong” and very very rare. If everyone is doing it, it’s not rare anymore and the taboo nature of it is lost.
For me, history has lost some of its magic.
The problem is not incest at this point, it is the fact that Brandon's relationship with lauren and kristina was special, now it is only about fucking, I am no longer able to feel that love that the three shared.
In the above story, Lauren seemed to accept only Kristina, and Brandon himself acknowledged that just Lauren was enough for him. In this story, he is clearly uncomfortable at first with the idea of fucking his mother, and ends up accepting because his sister insists, and suddenly he doesn't even care that Lauren fucks their father anymore, Lauren goes through as well. a similar process, sudden and seemingly convinced of everything by Kristina, who has gone from an innocent virgin girl to an uncontrolled nympho.
Lauren's first sexual relationship with her mother felt uncomfortable for me too, very forced and sudden. It feels as if they have entered a spiral of manipulating and convincing themselves to fuck different relatives, and when one feels uncomfortable the others try to convince him until suddenly the person feels comfortable with the idea and no longer cares about anything. to happen.
This lengthy review is not a criticism of you, I just needed to let you know how the story felt to me at this point.
So, what happened between you and Karen?"
LOL!
Did you write the story, or plagiarize it?
Hint; Brandon's ex girlfriend was named Kelly, not Karen.
It's supposed to be YOUR story, you cast remember your character names?
I stopped reading at that point.
Highly disappointing.
Wonderful, so insanely debauched and depraved, absolutely sucking fucking wonderful. Cunt lapping sex maniac Lanc’s UK.
Getting the parents involved is pretty hard core. Not sure how this will go. I think you should have made it just and the siblings and how they will work it out after finding out that Kristina is related. How can they stay together and not get caught. The incest thing is tantalizing but hard to make it work long term. Can you do this or will it all collapse?
Yeah, like other comments on here, there seems to be something "off" with this chapter. Terms "rushed" and "Lazy" were used to describe this chapter. Those seem fair because of inconsistencies and confusion. For one, is brandon's ex girlfriend's name kelly or karen? ANd, there was an Initial concern to use a condom with kristina and then, all of the sudden, No condom was used with kristina. Plus, there never was one used with Lauren. Other than those head scratchers, it was a decent read. But, then dad was suggested as entering the mix. I am Not against reading about dad/daughter incest but i don't like the way the plot is being suggested for dad/Lauren. That is a turn-off. I will delay my rating for now til i see how chap 3 measures up.
I won’t pile on to what most others are saying, but will note one recurring theme I’m not big in … the “ I lined it up and rammed it all the way in one thrust” oft repeated. Not a loving technique and misses the pleasures of slowly overcoming the resistance as the pussy lubes and opens up. Also doesn’t seem to match Brandon’s super lover character.
Just my opinion, your handle (Mr. SLAM) suggests you think differently and, hey, you are doing all the work of writing, so might not be worth the proverbial two cents.
"Of course, I'm new to this but I can't imagine having too many dicks lined up wanting to fuck you." This line is where the romance wax exchanged for pure sex. What happened to Brandon only being with Kristina as a way to substantiate the time with the one he loves? That was the validation for multiple partners. Being with "Mom" is a fantasy, but what does he really get out of it that makes it worth handing Lauren off to another dude (dad or not).
Great story up to here, but if Dad is brought into the loop in Ch 3, I'll read that far and drop the story mid chapter. Sorry to be a downer, but that will have killed the story for me.
Where to start... the whole thing felt rushed, the connection with the three central protagonists were sacrafice to drag yet more characters into the sheets. There was at least a passing nod to the natural reluctance on Mom's part to bed her own daughter. The story of her turmoil - like the intimacy between Brandon, Lauren and Kristina - was, frankly, betrayed in favor of short, unengaging sex scenes.
Okay, I’m going all Sherlock Holmes here. In my comment on the first chapter, I brought up my concern about a missing partial story. Now I perceive another mystery. This second chapter seems to have a bit of a different feel to it like it may have been written by another author or may be written out of sequence from the first. In the first chapter, Brandon’s ex was Kelly in this second chapter her name has been changed to Karen. I’m a little intrigued here, but I have no way of solving these mysteries.
Both chapters were great reads. But I need to agree with the commenters before me. The concept of making Lauren sleep with her father so that Brandon can sleep with his mom is a complete turn-off for me, especially when Lauren doesn’t want to do it. The mom insisting on this is really nasty in a bad way. She is pimping out her daughter to her husband because she is lusting to sleep with her son? Not good. Not good at all. And Brandon encouraging her to do what her mom wants while she doesn’t want to makes Brandon a real scumbag user in my eyes and not caring at all for his supposedly beloved sister. I would see the dad as a sexual predator if he should agree to his wife’s demand. Kristina now seems out of control for deliberately encouraging Lauren to sleep and actually start an incestuous relationship with her dad. Lauren should not be sacrificed so that Brandon and Mom can munch on each other. No Dads, please.
Where the first part was great and took the time to go over the details, this second part seems lazy and too eager to move ahead throughout.
story keeps getting better, even though its long you never really know because you are so engrossed in the story
When did Kristina go on birth control?
I agree...No parents...Get back to a 4 on 1 orgy with Lauren’s friends...
WTF, I can see where this story is heading and if I’m right and you include the parents especially the fathers in this story. You just fucked up a great story. It was a ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ story.
I agree with the most other readers: chapter one was awesome. Getting Kristina involved - ok and reasonable but then making her to the half sister was for me a downer. Involving the mother is normally for me not a problem, but in your story with the described background: no thanks (I would say unrealistic, but here at literotica...). But including the father ESPECILALLY when Lauren have NO intentions to do so and Brandon nearly pushing her? Sorry, but no ... unfortunatly no more favorite author or story....
took a good sex story, brother, sister, and teen girls, was hot. then brother and sister sex was hot, everything was good, then just had to ruin it, with the parents and all of a sudden, dad is going to fuck his daughter anytime he wants? WTF? you lost your readers, bud. just another crap story, i know where this is going not even going to waste my time reading the rest i don't want to know.
The story started out so hot with the lingerie party. Then, adding Kristina into the mix with Lauren and Brandon was OK. However, as soon as you added the “conversation” between Lauren and her mom, you lost me. I filter for brother/sister stories, and too often a storyline is going great, it’s erotic, sensual, and naughty, and then for some reason an author feels compelled to bring the parents into it, and it just ruins it. I’ll never know where things went between Lauren and Brandon, whom I look at as the main characters, with maybe Kristina as an additional plot line to spice things up, because I stopped. I’m done. If I wanted to read parent/kid stories, I’d filter for that. I don’t.
Was a great story right up to the point you added the parents, then it dropped to an ok story. It went from a loving relationship to kind of a sleazy relationship for Brandon and Lauren. Lauren who starts out wanting her brother then decides to become the family slut and Brandon who seemed decent for the entire first part of the story, being the caring guy who just wants his sister(s) and making sure they were satisfied then talks her into screwing their dad which makes him seem like a dbag and pretty much changed the entire feel of the story. While the first chapter was excellent, I probably wont be reading chapter 3.
I really like the Brandon, Lauren relationship. Kristina as well is okay but adding the parents destroy's all other relationships. Don't think I will bother with the next chapter. I know it's the authors story but I simply like the pure romance of Brandon and Lauren, doesn't need anything else. Too many others fractures everybody's feelings and muddy's everything for me. Leave the parents to their own thing let the kids go their own way before everyone gets lost.
Wow. Made me supper horny and hard. Blow my load several times. Great story.
I wish there was a way to set up a poll here. I would like to know if I am a minority or others think this story is really thought provoking rather than merely a wanker.
The brother sister thing was great. I think several guys had some sort of physical contact with their Sister. These stories let our imagination go where many of us did not when we were growing up. Some guys had some sort of sexual run in with their mom., I believe MUCH LESS than the sister contact? Again, ever since Oedipus there has been that weird desire and introducing Mom into this is hot to the guys, but maybe not to the ladies? In any event, getting dad involved would be GROSS! Maybe it was my very disfunctional relationship with my father, but the dad/ daughter thing is really repulsive to me.
But hey, this is the author’s story, not mine. He has done a wonderful job writing both HOT and Thought provoking situations! I applaud him for that and absolutely will not criticize him or his writing because of my messed up thoughts about families.
You can obviously see his work REALLY has me looking at my earlier years in a most analytical manner. Well done, sir. Even if you force me to open a couple closets i prefer closed.
I find it very aggravating to read some of the negative comments here on Literotica. This is a well crafted tale about a controversial subject, and the author did a great job expressing his/her creative talent! If you don't like the subject - don't read it. If you have constructive criticism - post it in the spirit of trying to help the author & do it in a respectful manner. Keep up the good work samslam & don't let disrespectful people interfere with your artistic expression.
many times before, sequels are very disappointing at best, but this was crash and burn. The parents........ REALLY!!! I won't be reading ch.3.
' "You think I should fuck your brother, right?" The way mom said it made it a statement rather than a question. "Well then, don't you think your father deserves a reciprocal arrangement?" '
Uuuh, fuck no I don't!!! My sister's pussy belongs to ME!! MINE!! Sorry mom, I think you'd be great, but no way do I want dad's dick anywhere near my sister's body! That pussy stays in the shape of my dick, and mine alone! Hell yeah I'm double standard selfish!!!!
(Hell, honestly i didn't want mom in there either!)
I love that they all enjoy each others love juices! A delightful pleasure ignored in too many other stories. Thank you!
I was so into this and wanting more!!! Then you ruined a perfect story by adding the parents!!!
You could have kept the parents out of it and could have added Alex or Kylie instead. I would have preferred that.
I’m starting to worry where this story is heading..Leave the fucking parents out of it
Bring Back Alex .. You did not need the Parents .. To Me Alex made more sense
I read chapter 1 and 2 in a single sitting, so the big picture of the story has a flow to it. I'm ok that Kelly's name got changed to Karen. She was minor anyways. What I did notice that detracted from enjoying ch 2 is how careful the characters were in ch1, to make sure Brandon had on a condom when he was with Kristina. In ch 2, Kristina simply gets Brandon many times with no mention of protection. Did she suddenly get on the pill and the reader doesn't know? I thought the first time they came together there might be an "oops" moment where they suddenly realize that they forgot the condom and panicked for a few paragraphs, but it didn't happen. Then they had sex again and again, and no one seems to notice. Is the author trying to set up a surprise pregnancy to deal with in the next chapter or is he inconsistent in writing and everybody's safe and we forget about the previous chapters and move on like nothing has happened? I don't get it. However, I've liked reading it so far and will continue, but my constructive comments I hope will help the writer to be more consistent between chapters so the story flows more smoothly.