All Comments on 'Uncle Dave's Midlife Crisis Ch. 02'
by mityam
- 6 Comments
Looks like Uncle has her sister to satisfy next. And why not if it is offered. He might even get both sisters together and put on a show for him.
The first 2 chapters of this story have a really good plot to them. However, it is somewhat overshadowed by the numerous grammatical errors. These errors cause the reader to stumble, which leads to a loss of rhythm in the story. It's not my intention to be overly critical. Just offering my two cents. Please continue writing. Thanks.
yeaa....u really need to read what u write... cuz tru say.............its at a gr. 5 level education.
Good story with developing characters.
But spelling mistakes at the wrong time really interrupt. 'shuttering' ? try shuddering
Your stories would be much better if you had someone proofread them before uploading them here.