All Comments on 'Westbound Pt. 01'

Reading your stories is a humbling but very pleasurable experience. Absolutely bloody briliant!

Wonderful story! Keep up writing!M

This is a great start to your new story. If it is like your previous ones, I am sure that it will make a great addition to your library. Can’t wait until the next installment.

In your universe, is slavery always a lifetime sentence? You made no mention of a time limit. For instance the three business owners who used their bodies ass collateral. Who would risk a lifetime of slavery on a loan? Maybe several years but not a lifetime.

It isn't perhaps my favorite type of story, your stories are a bit gritty and real for me, but the writing is professional and the way you iron out details and wrap everything up so neatly at the end is impressive. I have to pay attention because little details and characters may show up chapters later or in the finale. It's two cuts above most stories in that aspect. I like Frankie and interesting cast of slave girls, I'm sure this will be a great series!

Thanks! I'm flattered that you think it's a "masterclass," but I appreciate the compliment :)

And permit me to say that I very much enjoyed your first try at the genre with "Slave Grading: The I Investigates." I look forward to your next effort - please keep it up!

Thank you! And no worries, there's more to come :)

Thank you! I appreciate the compliment and your continued readership. Hopefully you'll enjoy this one as much as my previous efforts - please let me know!

Thank you for reading, and to answer your question no, "lifers" (as they are sometimes called) are actually fairly rare in my world. In the truck only two of the women are full-on slaves: Linda (a volunteer) and Mary (convicted criminal). The rest are all indentured servants with varying time limits, but it's not very clear since everyone uses the term "slave" to refer to "lifers" and "indentures" alike because for most people there is no difference in terms of day-to-day interactions.

There actually is a discussion of this in the next part; in hindsight I probably should have put it in the first chapter.

I'd imagine that this ends up with the reporter in some type of slave peril, but I would read one offs of the slaves being interviewed. It's a really engaging universe and I look forward to the next chapter.

Great idea, and a great introduction to a series. I love how you are expanding on the HCI world. Keep it up! I wish I had this level of literary skill.

I have read and enjoyed several of the "slave" stories, and HCI was often mentioned, even highlighted, in them. Somehow I missed it, so what does HCI stand for???

Thank you Tanuki, your praise means a lot to me, coming from the author of Agent in Distress (one of my favorite series)! I think one of the reasons it takes me so long to write these is I really *do* want people to be get caught up in the details and the weird little twists and turns and callbacks, so I'm glad you appreciate them! I blame my father, who's waaaaay in to detective novels and talks about them all the time :)

Thank you! I really enjoyed your Gracie series, so I think we may be kindred spirits when it comes to worldbuilding and character stories :) And I admire your ability to build tension! Gracie's stories were both hot and tense. Well done!

And I must confess I know what you mean about the individual "vignette" stories - they were so much fun to write that I had to include some in the next story I'm writing *after* Westbound... :D

Thanks for the praise, I appreciate it (while blushing pretty hard), I'm really glad you enjoy my stories! I'm having fun expanding on HCI, and there are other authors who are taking a swing at it as well, which is insanely gratifying to say the least. As long as you're enjoying them I'll keep writing them!

I'm so glad to see you start a new series. Love that you keep going with the Joe Doe universe in your own way. Can't wait to see more. Cheers.

I don't know if I ever officially said what HCI stands for - if I did, it was probaby somewhere in Three Sisters and I can't find it.

For the record, HCI stands for Human Commodities International, and it's incorporated (in Delaware, of course) so you'll sometimes see it referred to as HCI, Inc.

Thanks for reading!

Thank you, my Canadian friend: six out of five is pretty good indeed! I'm having fun with the worldbuilding (or more accurately "world expansion" since like you point out it's Joe Doe's world and I'm just borrowing it) - it keeps me sane during down time at my day job.

Also, your "Undeniable Reality" series is on my reading list, if it's even half as good as it looks I am going to enjoy it thoroughly :) Thanks for reading, AND for writing!

In Westbound, Gentlemen takes us inside the cages to meet the people caught up in modern slavery: a divorcee who went a little crazy, three business women humbled in an economic downdraft, two girls set up by the police. Everyone has a story; perhaps what is striking is the transparent normalcy of the characters. It is hard to present a short story with this many characters, but Gentlemen does it well.

The Question ever present is what makes these women any different from the reporter who would study them for her rapportage?

The story ends in a cliff hanger more like the season finale of a made for tv movie than a short story. Still a great story!

I note we now have two writers Gentlemen and Carl Bradford working on the HCI angle along with Joe Doe. Keep working together. Great material. Erotica supports the story line and the major premise of the writer; off color language is kept to a minimum.

When is the next chapter coming sir......

It's coming as soon as our friends at Literotica approve it for posting!

I do love all the little details and twists and turns! I wrote an outline for my own story taking place in Joe Doe's HCI world, where a female FBI agent is investigating fraudulent practices by slave traders. She's tough, beautiful, and smart, and she has the backing of the FBI, so she won't be an easy mark for unscrupulous slave traders. I hope to bring my own style to the world you've done a great job fleshing out, so to speak. :) can't wait for approval of Ch 2!

You should absolutely write that story - the outline alone is intriguing! I would be very interested to see what happens when you apply your voice to a "slave peril" story, I think it would be VERY good.

hi,

waiting for next part.

how long it usually takes from submission to work gets shown on site?

One of the best writers around in the non-con genre. I love how you can combine a gift for storytelling with erotica.

I'm just starting this scary series. I say scary because it's 2 days before thanksgiving, thousands of Americans are heading for the poorhouse, and the politicians are locking us down Again. The middle class has been decimated so how are we going to pay our debts, indentured service, slaves to the rich and powerful? I'm glad I'm closer to the end of my life, than the beginning. Great story, on to chapter two!

"that could never happen to me." She looked over at me: "Right?" You keep thinking that, honey.

A very interesting angle on a common topic. You have me hooked.

What do you mean by "Tracy-style story"? I can think of a few things, but it could just as easily be something I'm not familiar with.

I like the grading system, something I've not run across before.