- Non-Erotic Poetry
- 2013-07-18, [my...]
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my old father
among spring oaks
--i'll meet you soon
wh,
2013-07-18
- COMMENTS
5ed, esp liked the contrast of old father paired with spring oaks, not happy with the last line, the main reading is too direct. i.e. it makes the first two lines too leading. FTIW
I'm not usually a big fan of short pieces, but this said a lot to me, starting with how I was abruptly stopped short with the title.
Brevity conveys depths of feelings ; a wealth of meaning with a precise economy of words . My humble salutations to the father who inspired such words , Senna .
says a great deal with so few words. It is short and it is definitely a poem. :-)