All Comments on 'All That Glitters Ch. 20'
by bigtddybr
- 7 Comments
There are a few really good story tellers here on Lit, but you are the only one who has been active in long time. Bravo! Please keep it going.
The nobel physics prize ceremony is normally in Stockholm. Only the peace prize is awarded in Oslo.
Excellent once again. You weave a masterful space adventure. Thank you for it!
I presume that the house on Liramor Prime is key to the downfall of the Senator.
Hope Raymond enjoys is "Show Off" tour.
Lock-down should be giving more time for writing but...
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Just a comment on logistics at Liramor-23. If other work was being held up by the Naval vessels needing the 'tug' to move them, being the way of moving the debris from the pirate vessels, why wouldn't the tug move each Naval vessel a short jump away? All four could be moved enough to be put of the way, and likely do it in less than a day.
Then, the pirate debris could be moved to the scrap pile, and the work impeded by the debris could begin within a day or two instead of more than a week.
Seems to me an experienced Navy tug captain would think of the most efficient way to do something.
Just a thought.
With some of the strange wrong word errors in the past 8-9 chapters, it made me wonder if you were using voice recognition software to 'write' with. Homonym errors are not that unusual, but some of the one you have used are quite bizarre.
'Costumers', instead of 'customs', was a hilarious one. I read that sentence, and thought 'WTF is he talking about?' LOL
Trying to recall some of the others, but can't. I have seen a LOT of your/you're mistakes, from Ch-00.
Thanks for sharing, and the effort to submit. Oh yeah, haven't been able to hit the 5 stars since I left the previous comment about the problem, 7-8 (more?) chapters, previous.
OMG WW55 . Your critiques are really annoying . Please just try and enjoy this free work of art .
Ex navy here, you do realise in petty officers 1st class is highest ranking, right? 1st class is an e6 right under cpo. Equal to staff sargent.