All Comments on 'Jake's Insomnia Problem'
by burninghouse
- 25 Comments
Wow! One of the hottest stories I've read here. Well told and very believable. A full 5 stars!
Not being negative, I give you 5 stars, but is it Jake or Brian? Please continue
A good story but obviously written by a young virgin. It's impossible to have a tongue in her pussy from behind and suck her clit at the same time.
What is 'stratle'? I think you mead straddle.
Who is Brian?
kind of ruined it when you had him have it eyes wide awake. you could of done more with him still pretending to sleep like pregnancy or him staying hard all night
There were a few mistakes, and I'm not talking about the sudden name change at the very end. But other than that it was an excellent story and incredibly hot. 5-stars.
This was perfect up until that very end when you screwed up the name. I would deduct half a star for that if I could, but since I can't you'll still get the full 5 stars since it was still a very hot story.
I made a mistake about the name in the story at the end. I have submitted an edited file.
I thought it was superb. I've added you as a favourite writer. You have skills in writing erotica. Well done.
Did the readers miss him being called Ben and the mom Connie. Some good stuff and some bad. Four stars.
Loved this story but you should continue with more and maybe mom gets pregnant and they live as husband and wife and raise a family!!!!!!!!! 5 STARS
I liked it. Alot of stories go off the rails after the seduction has taken place. Obviously it could have benefited from a 3rd party editor