All Comments on 'New Life At The Victorian Motel'
by BellaWrites234
- 18 Comments
Well done. I wouldn’t have guessed this was your first story. You blend the development of your main character nicely with the steamier aspects of the story. I look forward to your next step in her tale.
First off, I'm glad you decided to start writing and see great potential. I loved the story and the plot line however, it felt like it missed a few elements. A better description of the lead you have helped. Also, the sex scene, while well thought out seemed hurried. These are just some helpful tips from a fellow writer and I cannot wait to see what to write next.
You have me... seriously!!!! Your first? Looks like you were born to do this (I'm talking about writing). Please don't take too long to continue! I'm waiting! Damn!!!!!!!
Great story, well written, once I started reading I could not stop until the end. I do not write many reviews but felt I just had to say well done, keep writing.
Bencky xx
Welcome to Lit! Well done. I liked the irony of a law student unwittingly signing herself into lesbian prostitution. I’m looking forward to what comes next.
Soooo good for a first time. Ignore the pettiness of critics and keep writing.
A wonderful opening, very hot and extremely well written. I do hope that there will be more episodes as Cat (Kitty) becomes more experienced in her new life. Five stars for a very worthy first submission.
Very well written. I have so much enjoyed this series as out heroine seeks deeper into her submission. Her journey reminds me so much of my own. I love Cat's relationship with Momma as she grows from scared and defiant to eager and obedient, finding a new purpose to her life. Thank you so much, I very much look forward to more of your stories