All Comments on 'Swimming with Mum Ch. 01'
by mrs_mackenzie
- 37 Comments
DID I MISS SOMETHING?? I DO NOT SEE HOW THIS STORY COULD BE CATEGORIZED AS INCEST/TABOO. IT APPEARS THAT AN IMPORTANT PART OF THE STORY IS MISSING THAT WOULD PLACE IT IN THE INCEST/TABOO CATEGORY
WTF???? Not a single word of incest? Is this to be continued? If so, you should have indicated such. Well edited was a plus but not what readers would expect.
What's the point of the story? All you have is a boy growing up and going to college. Absolutely boring.
Great start, looking forward to the next part, hope I don't have to wait too long.
Hi everyone, Mrs M here, looks like I forgot to say in the story that this is definitely going to be continued! :)
Cock out in my hand stroking it just waiting for the excitement is gonna see his mom or Lydia naked… nope total boring ass let down that kills cock
Ignore the comments from those impatient souls who are ticked off you haven't given then so much as a boner in your first outing. Keep writing!
Jesus...I didn't think I'd find a novel longer than War and Peace on a porn stories site
Story was too short, but interesting. I hope you will continue. Thank you.
I really liked this opening chapter. Well written, easy to read and engaging. What's not to like? Looking forward to reading the rest.
It`s starting out nicely,,I really don`t mind a long story if it`s interesting and believable,,,I believe this is going to be a nice story..
This is a wonderful start! I love the slow burn stories the best, and this one seems very promising. On to the next chapter! :)
There's already way to many characters in this story, you can introduce characters later as you proceed through chapters but I don't think starting out an incest story talking about the main characters friends are bombshells are ever the best strategy, mom, son, dad, sister, ect...
I’m enjoying your writing, ignore the brickbat comments, it’s a great start. Thank you!
This is not a wham ban story. It has a build up and a lot going on. I suspect that it is a little bit to intimidating for some readers. All the criticism by those that struggle to read has put off a budding author. That is a shame. I hope the author has changed name and gone on to write other stories. Five stars for me. Thank you for your work.
Wow, I just love the writing! Love the build up of the story, so tender and yet funny and likable!
I actually laughed out loud a couple of times, what a lovely beginning!!
A work of art. Thank you. A story woven into life, the byways and excursions are a delight. It is life in its many facets.
I'm looking forward to seeing how this develops. I have my own idea of how things could start happening with his Mum, so it will be interesting to see if it's on similar lines to how you plotted it out. I very much enjoyed your writing and character development. Also a bonus point for including Sheffield - the city that I grew up in & still refer to as home, even though I don't live there anymore.
I’m really enjoying this, I can’t believe I’m reading it to be honest with you, but I’m actually imaging it’s you Mrs McKenzie, that beautiful 😍 picture in the avatar is the boys mom… I’m loving the build up (I think lol)
Kellie ❤️💜🩷