- Incest/Taboo
- Taking Control
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All Comments on 'Taking Control'
by Mikro
- 12 Comments
Rape is not in any way, shape or form OK. And then Mom is just fine with what sonny just did. This could be under Sci-Fi/Fantasy and it would not be any more believable. Garbage.
1*
Try writing a built up first before jumping straight into the sex. The story had a lot of potential but sadly very lacking compered to over similar themed stories on this site where the son takes control. Compered to them this is a -5*.
I had to force myself to read past the first four paragraphs and sadly it just went down hill from start to finish.
I'm a strong believer that rape is inexcusable. You start out incenuenting that is the direction of the story but use it one time as a way to get what you want so to speak. You can take control without rape which is evident in master/slave relationships. The story needs more content to make more realistic. The way you wrote this is reminiscent of most people's first time, wham, bam, thank you ma'am. There's no build up. Just straight to the point as if all sex is a rush job. This story could be a lot better and more realistic if more thought was put into writing the story.
Sophomoric at best. One run-on sentence after another and a total waste of time.
Good job Micro keep up this story ....as in and then what? Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
through...threw your...you're its...it's
Pronouns without antecedents, continuity, punctuation, quotation marks
If you expect readers, much less good reviews, to say nothing about payment, it's up to you to write readability
I'm well aware you've done nothing to this...work...in five years, but I never lose hope, I will revisit next year...I'll deliver a rating then