All Comments on 'The Promise'

"The university I attended was the best in the state, but I had no scholarship, and I was broke."

"I had to keep my grades up in order to keep my scholarship"

That would be the one you didn't have, right?

You lost me in the first couple of paragraphs where the narrator of the tale says she had no scholarship and then says she had to keep her grades up in order to keep her scholarship.

I freaking LOVED this story! Gonna see what else you've come up with. Love your writing style too!

The intro with the scholarship.

Oh no! Right in the first paragraph too! I've fixed up some typos and an edit is on the way. I hope y'all give it another shot ;)

I love your writing style.The dialogue and character portrayals are excellent. Hoping this is the beginning of a series!

Loved reading this story. It flowed well which is nice to read.

Um, holy fuck! I want to meet a nasty slut like Jen. Such a filthy, cock hungry, cum thirsty, gang bang slut. Mmmm. 5 stars.

One fine story. Maybe Jen became cockloving AFTER her 4 years of premed, luuv2. But she was also a bit repressed,even prim for four years before. Leon, you honored both sides of her. Wondering if she was someone you knew well?

GREAT CONTINUE AND MORE DETAILLS..

Ya ever hear a stuck record.? Vinyl, on a turntable. Needle

keeps jumping at a scratch so you hear the same riff

over and over. Any delight in the music is lost in the

repetitive offering from your worn out disc.

Well, that describes this story. Fuck and Fuck and Fuck.

Same thing repeated and repeated. Makes you wonder

what repetitive activity he’s doing with his non typing hand.

Anyway, boring story. No imagination, no plot, not even good

sex. Maybe if I read it three or four times, three or four times,

three or four times…