Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.
You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.
Click hereWhen I opened the car door to escort her out of the car, my loving wife was so pale that I thought she'd faint. Well, she didn't but she did weave a little as she walked slowly up the stairs to the fuck nest she'd shared with Ray years ago and where she'd betrayed our marriage.
We could hear voices raised in anger as we neared the living room.
"...you still want to marry that girl?! Are you crazy? Or are you just too bowled over with lust to care that she's a slutty call girl!"
"Don't you dare call her names, dad! Not when you were one of her clients! That's what's making you mad isn't it? You had to pay money to sleep with her and you were still a lousy fuck! Yet your son just has to love her and she gives up that lifestyle for good. Get over it, dad! You can't conquer Rayna and you've lost out to your son!"
Father and son stood glaring at each other as an older woman, probably Ray's wife tried to play peacemaker as she noticed Rayna standing with Rosy and me at the entrance to the room.
At his wife's loud whisper that his prospective daughter-in-law's parents were present, Ray turned his corpulent body and bald head towards us. I felt Rosy shudder at her first look at the man she'd been obsessed with years ago and who she'd betrayed me with. I guess the appearance of Ray did shatter her illusions regarding the bastard and was probably tainting the treasured wicked memories she delighted in all these years. I'd gotten my first bit of revenge.
Ray stared at Rosy with some bewilderment since he evidently found her familiar. When he recognised her, more cruelty came out of that disgusting man than I thought possible.
"So it does run in the family!"
He exclaimed, an ugly sneer on his face.
Rosy was deadly pale as Ray continued.
"The daughter is a whore just like her mother. I'd paid for the mother's virginity but failed to win the daughter's. What a pity!
Would have made a nice set! Mother and daughter sharing virginity with the same lover!"
He turned on his son.
"Are you going to marry this whore and create the next generation of whores?!"
The young man was almost ready to rip his father's head off, something prevented only by his mother standing in the way. Rayna had crumbled to the floor, weeping openly. Rosy looked at her poor daughter helplessly. Belatedly realising I was present, she
turned to me, remorse and regret shining in her eyes, and gasped out a sob-filled apology.
"I-I'm s-o so sor-sorry. I can't say how sorry I -I am."
For once, I think she truly regretted what she'd done with Ray, seeing how she'd caused Rayna to suffer.
Then she walked over to Ray and slapped him across the face.
"You bastard! How dare you insult and humiliate my daughter! She's perfect. The only thing imperfect with her is that your blood flows in her, you sonofabitch!"
In the silence that followed, you could literally hear a pin drop.
Ryan was the first to break the silence.
"Do-do you mean Rayna is-is...my sis-sister?"
The words tumbled out of the poor boy's mouth, sounding like gunshots in the silent room. Rayna and Ryan stared in silent horror at Rosy. She looked at the ground intently and nodded in misery.
Old Ray's wife started crying while Ray himself just stared at his kids almost as if he couldn't quite register what was happening.
All of them were too lost in their misery to notice my reaction, or rather lack thereof.
Frankly, I was numb. Sure, there was some satisfaction as I saw the two adulterous traitors get fucked up by the truth, but the fact was the feeling didn't last long and the misery of the people gathered soon washed over me like a wave, leaving me floundering emotionally.
Ryan seemed to snap, he grabbed his father and started pummelling him in the face and stomach. The remote in Ray's hands fell to the ground and the home entertainment system started playing the most recently played video, which unfortunately was the short clip of Ray fucking Rayna which I had sent to Ryan in the hopes of avoiding this confrontation.
Rosy stared at the sight of Ray fucking his own daughter right down to the anticlimactic ending, horror mixing with anguish. The sight of Ray pulling his wet shrunken dick out of the hole of his daughter made the tears turn into streams down her face. Old Ray and Rosy both gagged as they watched Ray's watery cum drip out of Rayna. Ryan had frozen when the recording played and at the disgusting sounds and sight of Ray's climax in Rayna, he had let go of his father's collar and collapsed nerveless onto the ground.
The two young lovers stared at each other as the awful truth sunk in. As Rayna started gagging, dry heaves shaking her body, Ryan's eyes turn from a dazed blankness to horror.
"Ou-r..our baby.."
He babbled. Old Ray's wife and I were the first to catch on and she clasped a hand over her mouth in horror.
Rayna closed her eyes in abject despair and screamed. It was a loud cry of pain and death that brought Ray to his feet and Rosy out of the daze she had fallen into.
"You must get rid of that thing. It's a product of incest. It cannot live!"
His cruel words brought him slaps from both his wife and Rosy. And he held his hands up as both women advanced upon him, screaming and slapping him. Ryan looked at his father in utter disgust and said bitterly, "Yes, it could very well be your incestuous child or grandchild! That's the only thing that is certain, isn't it Father?"
Rayna stared at Ryan, seeing perhaps for the first time his capacity for cruelty. I could almost see her withdrawing into herself right there on the ground. Ryan could hardly bring himself to look at her while Ray was still being harangued by the two women.
I was the only one who watched in numb detachment as Rayna picked herself up and ran out. Ryan snapped out of his funk and followed.
The loud squeal of tyres told me that the pair were likely heading out of the villa compound. It was the sickening crash of metal against metal that signalled their failure to make it past the heavy gates.
"Oh my god."
I shouted as I headed out of the villa. I heard hurried footsteps behind me as Rosy's hoarse prayers of "oh please no..." sounded out faintly.
The car was a twisted wreck, its front a compacted accordion. The young passengers were both in awkward positions in the front seats. The airbags had prevented even greater damage but there was a lot of blood. Ryan's head had hit the side window and he was sprawled at an awkward angle.
Rayna had small cuts on the side of her face that was visible from the cracked side windows but she looked to be alright. The staff had had the presence of mind to call for help. And after the emergency services arrived, we finally saw the couple extracted from the wreckage. Ryan's legs were mangled and he was losing a lot of blood. Rayna seemed to be bleeding too and we had to explain that she was likely pregnant.
The rest of the day went by in a dizzying circus of motion and confusion. Rosy was able to donate blood which Rayna needed for her surgery. Rayna had lost the baby and the impact had caused severe damage to her organs and they needed to get her into surgery to stop the bleeding and repair the damage. Ryan was in even worse shape. His legs were amputated and he had lost so much blood they'd used all the packs of his blood type in the blood bank. Ray couldn't donate blood to his own son because of his health issues. I stepped up and offered mine as I was a universal donor blood type. It was clearly a dire situation and they needed blood.
Ryan hung on for 29 hours as the surgeons tried desperately to stop him bleeding out but it soon became apparent that the damage was too great. When the doctors told him about his condition, he asked to see Rosy and me.
"Please tell Rayna I'm sorry" was all he managed to gasp out as Rosy cried and lowered her head in shame. At the very end, his mother held his hand as he flatlined. Ryan refused to see his father and Ray only shook his head as the doctors announced that his son had passed away.
The look of pain and hatred old Ray's wife shot her husband and my wife would have killed them many times over if looks could kill. As it was, neither of them died, though both had just enough decency to hang their heads in shame, avoiding her eyes.
Rayna never got to see Ryan for the last time and what we learnt from the safety cameras in the car was their nasty fight and mutual recriminations that ended abruptly when the car slammed into the iron gates. She recovered consciousness two days after Ryan died. She had no memory of how she ended up in hospital or even who Ryan and Ray were. After what she'd been through, neither Rosy nor I were eager to see her regain her memory.
Rosy never met my glance all through the journey home, trying to focus on Rayna. Despite her memory loss, Rayna was oddly distant and almost seemed determined to shut herself off from Rosy.
I'd asked my attorney to hold off on serving Rosy the divorce papers because of what happened. So it was a month later that Rosy received the papers. She didn't protest or contest the terms. She merely gave me a sad, teary smile and apologised for her behaviour before she handed the papers back to me with her signature.
I just felt numbly detached. I'd never envisioned that day the way it eventually happened. Empty was the only word that described how I felt. It wasn't the victory I'd imagined.
In the end, I never sold the house, I just left it to Rosy and Rayna who continued living there. Rosy's reaction when rumours started spreading surprised me. Perhaps it was better described as a lack of reaction. All she did was ask me on one of my occasional visits how long I'd known.
And all I said was "Roxy, I've known for more than 20 years". My use of the nickname Ray had used for her made her eyes widen in surprise. We were silent for the rest of the visit though she kept looking at me, seemingly seeing me in a whole new light.
Just before I left, Rosy hugged me awkwardly and whispered, "I can guess what you did but I'm never going to ask. I know you hate me now but I know it came out of your love for me."
She pulled back and looked at me with that sad smile and suddenly teary eyes.
"Please believe me that despite how it looked, I've loved you all these years. I'm now paying for the mistake I made. But you should not let the past hold onto you any longer. Live a good life."
With those words ringing in my ears, I sent all the evidence I had on Ray and Suzy and their associates to the police and the Feds. The short story is Ray is now in jail serving time for his crimes and someone spread the news that he had a penchant for ruining young virgins so he also became de facto buttfuck target in that prison. Suzy, the old madam, got to see what life was like as one who was used rather than one who provided young flesh to be used by others.
As for me? I stopped all the surveillance, put all files into one hard drive and buried it in the desert of the state I moved to after the divorce was finalised. I'd settled into my new home for a month or so before I scouted out a place and buried all the evidence so to speak. Even the videos of Ray and Rosy plus my session with Rayna all went into a box filled with magnets and then in the sand.
Tomorrow Rosy and Rayna are arriving for their summer holiday visit. Both of them decided to go back to school albeit in a different state and without the side jobs they once had. It's ironic but I see more of them these days than I used to when we lived in the same house. Well, technically, they study in a university about half an hour's drive away from me across state lines. I drive up to visit them once every couple of weeks and both ladies are still happy to see me though Rayna said something a couple of months back that had me holding my breath. She hugged me and said I reminded her of some guy she met at her side job once. She shrugged and laughed it off. I wondered whether to tell her the truth but her fragility made me swallow the truth.
The odd thing was she never did recall Ryan or Ray. Her counsellor and psychiatrist all attributed this to her self-protection mechanism that blanked out all the traumatic events.
We made a weird group since none of us were dating or looked to date. Sure, there were lady friends that visited occasionally but none who got anywhere near serious. In fact, my sons all probably got more dating than the rest of us. Still I'm happier than I've been in years and I think we've all reached some level of peace.
Thank you to readers who made it this far. Please take a little time to rate and comment/provide feedback!
- COMMENTS
I quit reading when he let his wife cuck him for years. No one and I mean no one puts up with and pays for a bastard from a cheating whore! Some btb.
Could not finish this story.
BTB vengeance needed but wrong tools and needed directed to:
The procurer, the prostitute wife and of course RAY.
You don't even want to know my grade.
I don't want to read another story like this one that I could not finish.
What a wimp who was too frightened to fight for his family even if it meant protecting them from themselves. This seems to be a uniquely American thing. Rather than protecting your family you set them up for self destruction. A strange breed those yanks
More than 20 years living the life of a fucking cuck? no. Just no. One star and another contributor on my pay no mind list.
Only an idiot without any self-respect would continue to subject themselves to living with disrespectful whore, these MCs that are more feminine than the females in stories, just ruin them can't enjoy a story with an MC that isn't respectable
What the hell ? Was he trying to take revenge by old age after 20 years ? Who the hell would wait that long ? And if he hated the (NOT) daughter that much, why wasn’t he man enough to show his face to her after he’d took her Virginity ??
Well the MC was the only one who actually lost out! 21 years of hating…an innocent girl used as an unwitting pawn in his desire for revenge…
Man that really sucks! And he has a clear conscience?? No way! U don’t hold hatred for so long and live! U end up dead emotionally! He is a dead man walking! And Ratna was an unwitting victim! So a puss poor story of selfish revenge and innocent victims!
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Good story. I really enjoyed it, in spite of minor flaws. BUT, so much uanadulterated hatred, carried for that long... Their ONE DAY of pain and sorrow wouldn't have made a dent. Realistically, the MC should have laughed his ass off, served divorce papers immediately, and donated nary a single drop of blood. Publish Roxie's journals, the DNA reportS, and footage of Ray and Roxie's trysts, and Ray's incestuous romp with Rayna. Make available to one and all Roxie's entire history and ALL of the incest she caused. Only after the divorce and Ray's legal troubles, send them the video of Rayna getting fucked by the man who fed, clothed and sheltered her for 20 years. And Ray has to find out that he ate cum, otherwise what was the poinr? As for the MC's pangs of conscience, NONE OF THE EVENTS ARE HIS FAULT. The only innocent MAY have been Ryan. Everyone else lived up to the lowest expectations and made their own choices.
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Good story. I enjoyed it, despite its flaws. BUT, such unadulterated hatred, carried for so long... Their pain and anguish on ONE DAY
What’s funny is he didn’t really need to do anything to get revenge. The only revenge he caused was fucking his step daughter before Ray and letting him eat his cum as everything else would have happened anyway. Even if he had divorced her she still would have lead her daughter down the same path leading to the eventual end. Overall an entertaining story
Hilarious, sad but Hilarious! No character to actually cheer for and the last few paragraphs were disappointing and really need a rewrite. Not that they were still seeing each other but
the lack of closure for a better word, the reader was still left wanting. It brought the rating from a 4 to a 3.
BTB is about the Cheating, The Discovery, the Confrontation after which comes the actual burning of the Bitch or the Bastard! You are a very good writer and I do not agree with the vitriol of some of the criticism! You must however admit the climax is very disappointing after the build up there is NO BURNING!
There were so many layers that needed to be addressed and you needed him to come out with all that has been happening to take it to a boil but … it peters out to a trickle and he is witness to all that is occurring but the dramatic irony is that they are not aware that he is way ahead of them but it happens in his mind only – I hate the dramatic irony here for I wanted the burning – Nuclear all the way. Your story – your choice.
You let them have and accident and Ray comes off not half of the horrible bastard that he is, The husband schemed, plotted and suffered for 20 years to actually almost reconcile with them. The amnesia or memory loss and her admitting that she actually did love him is a cop out and sounds like excuses because you got cold feet to actually make the BURNING a Greek Tragedy! Well it is a good story and well written with a disappointing end as far as the BTB lovers go!
Simply the stupidest tale on this site.... The 20 year wait to effect simple revenge is totally insipid. Nothing about this story makes any sense whatsoever which is why I gave it a 1 star for it is an utter epic fail when with a little rewriting and some simple common sense plot lines, it could be a really great one.
Epic Fail 1 star
Planned and stayed on alert for 20 years, to give it all up and crawl like a pussy in the end. Whomever wrote this is no man, for sure.
that was disgusting..the MC lost all moral ground when he used Rayna! She was an innocent in this... and could have been protected. though she was not his genetic material..she looked up at him as a father..it was his duty to protect her!
What a pile of garbage. Obsessed with revenge for twenty years? Get a life, dude.
i enjoy btb but this is too dark, why do their children bear the sins of their parents :((, thanks for writing..
more BTB please :d
1 star - one of the worst stories ever. After the first page, I thankfully skipped to the comments section and was not assaulted too badly by the extremely poor story.
forget about this nonsense logic, but I just want to ask the writer one question
when he learned about his wife infidelity he decided to wait 20 years to have his revenge assuming that he can fuck ray's daughter and let ray fuck her too!!! so how he was sure that the unborn girl will act like her mother? and meanwhile the daughter in the story said that she does not approve what her mother did while she did the same with a very silly excuse that she wants to show her mother that she can be in business without cheating? so she sold her virginity and became a whore and risked her future to be known as a whore just to show her mother?
then the husband fucked the girl who he raised and destroyed her her by letting her fuck her father and recorded then used the recorder to destroy the girl and her lover life
so instead of hurting his wife and ray he destroyed his daughter life and the life of her lover while ray was not affected at all except after he put him in Jill
this is a very bad story with a lot of mistakes
I agree with a previous commenter about an "impossible fantasy" but isn't that what this site is all about. Suspend reality for a while as a reader - it makes all of the stories more enjoyable. Thanks to OutofShadows for spinning a complex, screwed up story. I enjoyed it!
This might be one of the ten most ill-conceived, poorly-written, stupidly-plotted pieces of garbage I've ever written. A pigeon and a monkey banging on a keyboard could do better.
boy I have to suspend all beliefs for this one. no likable characters what so ever. All this family did is fuck each other, over and around each other. Though the writing was splendid -- 4 star for the author. But for the story -- I give 2 star.
This hot mess was barely holding together as a coherent story up until it was revealed that Rayna was incestuously pregnant followed minutes later by an improbable car crash which caused the death of both Ryan and the fetus as well as Rayna's remarkably convenient amnesia.
Hard to say which straw broke the camel's back but this sad attempt at a BTB story definitely lost control of it's literary legs, bowel and bladder at that point. Sad the author failed to realize there's no such thing as a good scat story.
This whole story was about the husband...we see everything through his eyes...but he is only about a third of this story...Rosy an Rayna is the rest of it...I want to know what
Rosy felt when all the shit hit the fan...after all this whole story is about what she caused to her husband and her sons...actually that she was never their for her sons....
What an ugly bunch of characters. The only innocent one was Ryan and he died. I think the main character could teach Osama bi Laden how to really hate. I did not like the story due to darkness of the story line. I do think it was pretty well written and worth 4*.
The main character just can’t be called a man...a sicko...a pathetic creature are just some of the definitions that come to mind...
Nothing he did defines a mans actions...
And trying to use an innocent child (Rayna) for his revenge ( against Ray and Rosy) shows Avery sick and sadistic mindset...he could have stopped this shit at any time..but just was too carried over by his sick desire for long term revenge to behave like a god man..too sick a story to read!!!
Your main character is an idiot. He wasted 20 years or more of his life to secure his screwed up version of revenge. Too bad he didn't die a horrible death for the way he treated his wife's daughter. She didn't deserve to have her life ruined.
What a sick fuck he was. I had hoped he too would be destroyed along with those he destroyed.
A shame he wasn’t. Horrible tale
This is one of the worst stories I have ever read. It made little sense nothing came together .
One train wreck turns into another, turns into another, turns into another. Why waste 20 years? For Revenge? You can burn the bitch, but you better expect to get a little flame as well. All that does is cause them to one-up the next person and so on. And then you end up with is Tupac and Biggie getting shot.
Too bad that the Rayna-Ryan complication took away the impact of his long anticipated revenge. Just a sad mess for everyone. Could.have been even more tangled if the baby had been born and he was the father. That would.have been fun.
People in this story are totally different from the original version. Waiting 19 years for revenge plot keyed to child's virginity is unreal. Mechanics of taking virginity using masks is impossible. Making child's love her half brother, killing him and fetus off, destroying her memory is pipe dream. This BTB totally fails as a BTB tale, and is far too convoluted and wordy.
Repost this as a standalone, severing all professed connection to deepemerald's far better work.
What A LOT of words. For nothing.
I well understand your intention. But you failed - at everything you attempted.
The original author made the original ‘Rosanna’ quite likeable, her eventual husband pretty much a non-entity.
Your effort to have me *suddenly* care about him and hate her just didn’t work at all.
I simply ended up disliking you.
Actually, it all ended up with my thinking of *you* as the opportunist. Trying to shove a character into a ‘bitch to be burned’ so that you could be the Noble ‘Judge, jury, and executioner’ - instead, you Outoftheshadows, ended up as the most pathetic.
-
Christ, greatest ‘FAIL’ among so many authors and/or characters in the world of LW’s worst failures!
Congratulations ...I guess.
JMAS
The protagonist would have been, legally speaking, more guilty of incest than Ray.
He did it knowingly, Ray (and Ryan) unknowingly.
The 3 parents we saw most were all thoroughly despicable people.
Rosy because she just had to itch the scratch, even with a nursing boy in tow.
Ray because he had to push it and was desperate to do it again and also the way he reacted to the pregnancy, a 3rd generation of whores or a 2nd generation of innocents.
The protagonist for being able to raise a child while planning to use her for his revenge. Any decent person would have either walked away, come clean about what they knew or treated her as their daughter. In his revenge attempt, 7 innocent people get affected, Ray's wife and son, Rayna and her child and Rosy's 3 sons (I read it as the older boy and 2 that were younger than Rayna).
While burning the bitch and the bastard can sometimes be very satisfying and a fun read, having none of the main characters with redeemable features spoils the fun and the collateral damage that some insist on including in their stories completely ruins them.
On the other side, I thought it was an interesting way to follow on from someone's story, it took a few paragraphs to click who the players were d'oh!
I had to stop several times reading this piece of shit, and go wash my face in cold water! I kept hoping your "character" would develop a conscience! He could still get his revenge on Rosy and Ray! ...But I had to keep reading hoping you'd turn the direction around! I actually got sick to my stomach by the time I got finished reading this heap of garbage! I was going to rant about different elements of the story then realized it wouldn't do any good to rant about a sick, twisted, diseased mind that only death could cure!
The entire scene with him and his stepdaughter is a bit much. That she does not recognize his voice or how his body is built is too much even for Fiction! 21-years is a long time for plotting a revenge!
A bit too much ... Our protagonist waits 20-years for his revenge is a bit much to swallow or believe but ... easy to understand for he comes across as a brooding man. Bringing it all together was a stroke of genius and undeniably plausible! A spider web that caught all of them in one foul swoop. I liked the ride OUTOFSHADOWS took us on – macabre but entertaining. It is easy to find fault but not that easy to write a story like this. I liked it very much and always had at the back of my mind "How will he bring ALL this together?” And … he did it well! Come on guys it IS fiction after all. The tension at the end was brilliantly stitched together and the outcome was dramatic irony at its best! This was BTB of a different kind – for our protagonist developed a conscience! 4-Stars!
Just plain "Sick". I guess this a what happens when,hatred "twists" one's soul!
read page one and skipped to end. Just another willing cuckold story. Kinda made me spit up a little at the back of my mouth.
but the central character couldn't decide to be a bad-ass or not. Too much angst on his part, took away from the story.
Bullshit, Rosy knew exactly what she was doing with Ray while married was wrong. Rosy just decided that her own needs out weighed her marriage vows! The whole story is a real crap such as a father paying money to fuck his stepdaughter.
A wimpy, coward, self-cuck husband who waits over 20 years for revenge? WTF?
Horse-feces. I skipped paragraphs trying to find a turn around. No luck.
but too convoluted to be truly enjoyabvle as a LW story.
I would have written this so that Rosy was dead and that he and Rayna got together at the end. I liked the story even though it got a little draggy in the middle. Thank you for writing.
reading after the second time author mentioned he would depend on nature versus nurture to determine Rayna's fate. For how a person feels and handles those feelings their is no simple gene determination. It is the action of many genes. Even then genes can be turned off and on by environmental factors from food and drink put inside to emotional factors in their environment. Any cue can helpl an action happen.What the main character did had more effect than what the genes were. Read about epigenetics and find out. ANother story where the result of revenge is worse than the original sin. Will read no more of these ever.
This was not so much btb, as incest. Sorry that doesn't get 5 stars.
BTB forum ? Aren't you another emasculated male creator trying to show how great being a RAAC is in contrast?
Take care of yourself and remember your meds before writing or something like this thing I've just subjected myself to might come out of your cavernous mind.
So ... For an entire week-end she enjoys the sex and not once (mask and all) recognise his body, voice or manerism! Not even Shakespeare could pull that off.
What a ridiculous plot line. It sounds like something dreamed up by a fifth grader.
This female writer has not a fucking idea what to be and think like a man is like. That is why she writes crap like this.
20 years of being a willing cuckold and for what!
I started to write out one hell of a comment on how sick the fucker was to do all that to the daughter he raised.
Then I saw Danger09 already did.. Well said Danger
The best thing that could happen is rayna and the other kids (were there?) take out huge life insurance policies making sure there are double indemnity clauses on the pieces of shit parents, and in maybe a year, kill them in a fiery "accident" that satisfies the indemnity.
Wow, this guy was really retarded for wasting the prime of his life for a revenge that is both one of the poorest thought out and least satisfying revenge stories that I have come across.
It is really difficult to have sympathy for a guy that stupid, I do feel a bit sorry for Rayna that she ended up as a whore like her mother, and that the one she considered her father aided her in being one rather than stopping it, ensuring that she was fucked by both her stepfather and sperm donor, seems like the whole setup is built to hurt the daughter a whole lot more than the mother.
Then it just peters out in a depressingly impotent and lackluster ending.
I can't bring myself to feel sorry for him. How can any human being help raise a child who calls/sees him as daddy allow this poor child to go through all that? He could've prevented this. I understand he's angry but rayna didn't do anything to him she was innocent just like he was. I almost threw up reading Ray and raynas fucking, while he watched--that's super fucking sick! I understand his hatred for the wife & her lover Ray--but why wait 20 years? Why waste 20 years of emotions on the two turds? They weren't worthy of? Why not divorce her with the shitload of evidence he collected & move on with his life? It just seemed really silly and stupid really... The revenge isn't even btb. I felt so bad for rayna, & Ryan they NEVER had a chance growing up with these mentally challenged turds.. Mom turns her into a stripping/whore & "dad" takes her virginity--oh it gets betters he sets it up for her to fuck her REAL sperm donor... Poor girl.. Poor Ryan's only crime was falling in love---- with his sister! and he ends up dead... Why? This husband was horrible... The truly horrible thing about it is, he doesn't feel any real guilt, he doesn't take any blame for the destruction of raynas life turning upside down all because her mother/his wife is nothing but a whore. He blames Ray and the whore, for these two kids life ruining. But he set this sick shit up...
Too many years passed. They say revenge is a dish best served cold. However, here it was frozen for too long to be enjoyed. And in the end he still sees them? Fiction is one thing, preposterous is another.
no rating
only 2 real sufferers were the 2 kids ryan and rayna, 2 innocent victims really
20 yrs as a cuck just to kill one and mentally scar another child
To me.
In particular I liked how you illustrate all the potential complexities and possible consequences of promiscuous sex.
There are many reasons why all human cultures throughout history have coalesced around one major template of sexual morality - marriage and sexual fidelity within marriage. And THE major marriage template is one man and one woman. Yes - polygamy has happened a lot in world history - but never as THE template. Only basically the "1%" of richest men could ever afford multiple wives and children. Plus aggrieved wifeless men - even "little" men - have been known to become dangerously violent sans a lack of wives for themselves.
This is one reason 80,000 more young Chinese men than women - due to sex preference abortions under China's draconian forced one-child-policy - are of such concern to many historians and thoughtful politicians. Both internally in modern China and externally - like all China's neighbors.
5 star. Loved the story. That being said, I couldn't live with her for 20 years. I'm in the BTB brigade. Stories though are just that. Keep writing.