All Comments on 'Manic Pixie Dream Niece'
by baloneyman
- 16 Comments
That was an awesome story. It got my pussy dripping and I can't wait for chapter 2. You have got to continue it. Your writing is awesome and so hot. Only suggestion is to be more detailed in your descriptions of the characters.
XOXO Heather
Very good first effort, looking forward to the potential of what chapter 2 brings
Well done! Good characters, well paced, very sexy! Looking forward to more chapters!
Please make another chapter. But keep it between the two of them
Great story! I'm making a note to find your page later hoping for a continuation of this very hot story!
I really enjoyed this story! I also have a niece named Katelyn that I have secretly lusted after for years. She's not a "bad girl" like your Katelyn, but she and I have shared these odd looks from time to time. Maybe she knows how I feel... maybe she doesn't. I hope someday to enjoy her like your Brian did his Katiebear! Looking forward to the next chapter of this story!
Nice Firefly reference! Good story too. I'm looking forward to finding out what concessions his wife wants. There's also some foreshadowing in an image that pops into his head, I think.
Is there a series coming, we have to find out what his wife wants.
Well written, will be looking for more.
Knowing things were going to work out, but not how. I really like the writing style; I think most men have a relative somewhat like the "Manic Pixie." Good story thanks.
RS
Lots of potential for branching out, it seems. The wife, the daughter, hell maybe even Katelyn's parents. Looking forward to your next piece!
Great story so far, lots of possibilities! Editing needs to be done prior to posting, only found one thing distracting.. Pixies are usually wisps, with short hair, and small breasts. Four stars .. Down one for the editing and slightly rushed ending.
A really great Story.
I just hope ist the first of a long series.
Thank you so much!!
(I don't care if it's just the two of them or the whole family - please expand this storyline)
What an Amazing story! Well written and Damn Hot. Would have loved to seen where it lead from here. Thank you.
Loved the story! Easy five stars!! Yeah, needed a bit of proof reading, but not enough to drop a star off like the guy below did, lol!
The only thing that I had a problem with was his blowjob. At the end he grabs her and shoves it down her throat! Two problems with that one, the first is the trust issue, you try grabbing your wife's head and shoving your cock down her throat and see what that gets you, ROFL! (Assuming you two haven't done it before) you may not have a dick for very much longer! My wife's last boyfriend pulled that shit and I had to deal with the fallout, ugh, for a while she was nervous with me even putting my hands on her head! Not saying some girls wouldn't get into that... I just wasn't that fortunate:/
Second issue if that he did it and she had no problem with it at all! No gagging and coughing when he pulled out, hell, even possibly throwing up, or her throat hurting afterwards, depending on his size. I suppose she could have no gagging reflex, but what are the odds of that!?! Lol! I didn't luck out there either, hehe.
Besides that one distraction the story was wicked fun!! I just wish my wife was that open minded, heh! A best friend with benefits would fit the bill perfectly ;)