by pallandrome
but this is erotic fiction where nobody needs to get a social disease, and condoms just reduce the heat unless the reader has a condom or latex fetish, or unless there's a plot reason given - which there isn't.
Otherwise a good start.
Rye and Ginger Ayle
However when you start dreaming of sucking some guys cock it should be in the gay category. Most guys (and me) are put off by finding that in a story especially as there are no rosa-blanca.ru identifying it.
Your writing isn't bad but you lost stars for the gay content. 2*