All Comments on 'Breeding the Help Ch. 04'
by Depravio
- 45 Comments
Honestly I love it, an amazing mix of hot and horny, coupled with some real emotion and real human characters. Always helps when it plays to my breeding kink as well.
Hot chapter. Should have had a cute chapter with the two of them being adorable. maybe working on baby 3
I'm genuinely surprised Joy did have sex with him and get knocked up as well. Still it's a great smut story.
I was pleasantly surprised to learn that you updated this story after all these years Depravio. I appreciate that you took the time to focus on Carl's character development and that Mariah's background was fleshed out. Thank you for this well done conclusion.
Ha. Nice way to show character growth there with the little Joy interlude.
I enjoy the way this one wrapped up. I wouldn't have minded if it went in a different direction, or if you include little snippets and epilogues down the line, but I left feeling satisfied. Your writing is enjoyable to read and better than 95% of the stuff on Lit. Professional quality stuff. I am grateful that you are sharing this with us for free.
You also have me questioning whether I'm secretly a racist from how numb I've grown to the the term "white dick"
Loved this lone chapter back years ago and love it even more now.
Exemplifies the "wholesome lewdness" beat perfectly. Perfect amount of sweet and spicy. :)
I would encourage you to keep writing in this world. I want to know how Carl and Maria take on growing parenthood, support themselves (States or Philippines?), what dreams they pursue (besides a big loving family), and perhaps reign in another broodmares in Joy...
But it could also end wonderfully now. And that's the point: a wonderfully satisfying story from beginning to end.
Please continue your writing and talents. There's not a lot out there with a spirit like yours. Cheers!
Simply one of the best stories I've ever read. Very hot, and very well written. I really cared about the characters. Fantastic.
Fucking hell my friend. This was by far one of, if not the best, stories I have read period. The amount of description, the amount of growth Carl goes through, the raw passion between him and Maria, the descriptions of him and her exulting in her pregnancy and breeding. Incredibly well written and had me sucked in entirely. I found myself coming back to your page more than once over these last months after the 3rd part was posted because I wanted more. I still do honestly; I could see Carl and Maria roping Joy in too. More kids, more pregnancies, as they get their lives together in their village. But then again, this ending was so beautiful I don't want to ruin that haha. In any case, you definitely have a follow from me because of this story.
I loved the story, and especially the transformation Maria helped work into Carl. What a stellar way to end and I couldn't think of any other possibility except this one.
I remembered when this was a one shot story. The fact you came back and expanding on this and this good. I'm glad you came back and finished this story and I enjoyed it. Thank you!
You, to put it simply, are a god. I can't remember how often I read your first chapter when it came out, wishing that you would tell us what happened next. And now that you have, I don't think there's going to be a tale on this site that will ever top it--and as I'm sure you'd agree, there's some damn good stories on this site. "Breeding the Help" is hot as fuck, but it also gives us real flesh-and-blood characters as opposed to the cookie-cutter ones we so often see in stories of this type. Please continue your writing efforts; I have no doubt we'll be seeing your name--real or pseudo--on some published books, someday! Good luck, and thanks for this incredible tale!
I kinda wish we could get more stories like this. Perhaps another chapter or a story connected to it like a spin off?
Amazing work! However, I can't get Joy out of my head now. I can definitely see the sisters conspiring to get pregnant at the same time!
Thank you all! This series was a true labor of love. I have many more works of hot, sex-soaked passion and depravity to share. Joy’s part in Breeding the Help isn’t finished either…
Hahhahahahahaha im your fan!!!!!! I shall anticipate in your new work!!!! ♡♡
I figured it would be a “fuck em and forget em” story and loved how it turned out. Never lacked for sexy, and overwhelming with love.
This is an amazing story, one of my most favorite. I am happy for the happy ending. I guess Carl moved permanently to Maria's village? How did they live their life then?
I'm looking forward to Joy's next story.
I'm a reader and that's what pushed me to literotica to get more... "pleasure"! I rarely like or comment any stories here though, but I have to say this has been the best that I've read on this platform so far! Please do continue with Joy's stories or any other stories too!
a writer myself i try to pour my heart in my works. this breaks even that. the series is a decade old. people have waited so dilligently for it. i first read it when 4th part was already out. i feared i would have to wait to. but seeing that end came so quick, the tears never dried on the 10th page. this writing style is amazing. the depth of knowledge fabulous. we rarely see and find stories that have hearts poured in by writer in such quantity and quality that we the reader are forced to pour our tears. the end was anti climatic. never in a million years have a story emerged which is so normal yet so exquisite, so true yet so far far off. to depravio i have no words left in arsenal for appreciation you deserve. writing a story in exquisite use of twisting words and writing a series with such heartfelt plot are two things of different worlds. you mate opened the path to the other world which is so beautiful. the only words of appreciation i have left for this to commemorate is this one shall be engraved in the thread of times for futures to come.
I’ve never read any erotic literature as good as this. You blew it out of the water, thank you for coming back to finish this. It seems like we share a lot of the same fantasies, you articulated them so well. Looking forward to the next project, cheers!
I came for the smut, but stayed for the story. This was beautiful, but so real that it hurt. Thank you for sharing your life.
I'm glad you came back to this story. A little mistranslations here and there but love the story. Looking forward to more of your stuff.
I've never cried from an erotica story before. This was too beautiful and sweet. Bless you
This is just a masterpiece!!!! I’m crying so much!!!! You deserve an award for this!! Now I will daydream about this for a month! Thank you
This is the stuff great novels are made of. The series is one of the best stories I have read.
Well done Depravio! I’m going to echo the sentiments of the other comments here, this is without question the best story I have ever read on Literotica. I look forward to your future stories.
I’d also love to know this; how true is this story? Is it a fantasy of the perfect life Carl (you?) and Maria might have enjoyed, or did this really happen?
Once more, well done, an excellent piece of writing!
damn. Good for him but is there gonna be a part 5 but with joy now in the fold? The sister also doesnt mind ahahahahahahah
Excellently written. There’s a lot of details in there that make me believe this really happened - I’m saying this as a former expat in Thailand with a wife from a town in the Davao region, funnily enough pretty close by to the one you describe. A lot of what you wrote rings very true to the expat life, or what I imagine it would be like to be one growing up (like my former students).
Just a few things that threw me slightly
- I’m pretty sure there was no Jolliebee at that time in Bkk
- Why no mention of the Durians? That region of the philippines is amazing in their low price and quality.
- Why were no kids running up to the MC and saying ‘Hey Joe’? they do this for every white face, even the non americans.
With those minor gripes, which may be simply things you forgot (given the length of time if the dates are accurate), you got an incredible amount right. There’s also a lot of subtle messages in here, which I was not expecting in a piece on this site. I actually enjoyed seeing your wannabee jock of an MC grow up, or try to. Hope to see a sequel, honestly this is a mild polishing off from being printable (sans 80% of the sex scenes).
Great Love Story ❤️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ FIVE STARS ❤️😻💕. Two Twin's Excellently Written Great Story
Depravio I think I'm in love/lust with you. To write such a beautiful passionate & sexy story, you must be one hell of a man/lover. Thank you.
Love this anthology since I read Part 1. Being married to a Filipina myself, the details are exact replicas of what I have experienced, sex, scenery, food, everything was correct. It brought back many memories, wholesome and the erotic. Finish the story. How do they end up? Carl Daddy finish school and start a flourishing business? A third child? Did Joy “join” them? I look forward to the next part of those very enjoyable saga!
Incredible story! Definitely worth the read. All that detail and the very end is very vague. I would have liked to know how they lived out the first few years at least. Just a more detailed up to a hell of a story would have been better. I liked how Carl changed from being an arrogant, spoiled kid who forced himself on the maid to a mature, responsible and loving partner to his wife. You can see how Carl became so damaged from his dysfunctional parents. You can’t help but feel bad for him because he can’t have felt loved. Thank you for sharing this story and I’m glad he found love in the end.
Loved it! im a romantic ........... I would love to have seen an epilogue to finish up, where he got a great job and had his family in the US with him?
to maybe see his father have a better relationship with him and see his grandkids and some kind of satisfying retribution or come uppance for his horrible mother ?
But all in all great stuff
Very good story. A Sexy Asian dreamGirl, wife and great mother in one package. '
Once you go Asian, you never go CaucAsian.. ;)