All Comments on 'Finding Himself Ch. 02'
by PostScriptor
- 29 Comments
That's what I'm talking about! Posted right on time and pro-level writing. PostScriptor is back!!
It is looking like a huge mess but what a mess!!
Nice story and very sexy!
I don't believe anything will be the same or ok after this unless Joe has cuck tendencies.
Joe is an idiot but this is seriously going to screw everything up!
Great read!
So we have Joe out looking, having initiated the split, but it was Susan who got some from Ted, who was all too willing to give. Now What???
What a pleasant surprise. I thought you were done after part one. Oh, the possibilities. ***** Thanks
This part was about technicalities...technically she didn't cheat her husband...technically he didn't cheat his friend...Even more: both admitted (more him than her) that going away for the weekend didn't mean they would have sex...but he made her drink a lot of wine and even didn't forget to take in his bag a small 'bullet' vibrator...so technically his only objective was to finally fuck her...Again a good read...Now we have to wait and see where will take his characters...Will she return to her old "boring life with a man she could love and grow old with" (as her husbad's dance partner stated was her dream)? I think this scenario hardly will happen, but only the writer knows...3* for now
1. too many POVs
2. who gives a fuck about that moron joe
3. ted is possibly worse than joe - fucking a woman MARRIED to one of his FRIENDS
4. basically they are ALL cheaters and assholes
Story had good bones but no plot and no ending. Maybe you have a foellow up planned. I would suggest that you rewrite to total story.
He is a lousey friend and an ass. Susan really doesn't love Joe that comment about I still love the guy was pure tripe when followed by her follow up comment in chapter 1 and the willing actions in this crappy chapter. Joe is a dunce and has been from the start. Nobody in this story is likeable, the closest person to that is Betty. But look where Joe meets her. I don't know why I even commented, because there is nobody worth caring about in this story.... they all ought to find themselves alone and sad at the end of the story
i honestly don't see susan as cheating. joe opened the marriage by his own actions. just because he tried and failed does not excuse his actions. he opened a can of worms that will show how inadiquite he really is in the bedroom. he has fucked up big time and it is about to bite him in the ass.
Joe, deservedly, is going to reap what he has sown. He blew off his buddy's warnings and then more defied him to try his wife. He then insulted grossly his wife and I could never imagine my wife taking me back after saying what he said.... She would put my shoes outside the door.
Are definitely through as friends unless Joe has cuck tendencies.
This is like adult version of Goofus and Gallant comic strip from Highlights kids magazine. Joe is cast in thankless Goofus role and Ted is reaps the rewards of being Gallant and selfless both in and out of boudoir.
The writing isn't polished as PostScriptor 's best story ( ' Melting Away ' series , but the concept is gutsy and notably more ambitious then average story. I thank the author for sharing.
This is not going to end well. Two cheaters and a cheating friend. So far one is a chuck and a fool.
There's an old saying you will reap what you sow. Joe has opened both himself and those he considered close to a world of pain both physical and emotional. I can't comprehend why his self centeredness blinded him to reality so harshly. As others have stated susan is beautiful. He was awfully narrow minded to think she'd pine away for him. Ted isn't completely innocent but he's not totally guilty either. He did try to talk joe out of what he was contemplating.. I hope that no one is destroyed completely.
It takes two to have a boring marriage, I takes one to walk out. She won't lose much by leaving idiot Joe. He won't lose much if she does either.
I guess some dudes are dumb as Joe and sleazy as Ted. Lucky for me I don't roll with a crew like that.
Some people should quit while their ahead. Sad to say this story never got off the ground.
I normally enjoy postscriptors work, but as others pointed out there are no likeable characters.
Joe is a buffoon Susan is a stupid whore and Ted as one reader put it is a waste of DNA. Im hoping there will be a good finish. Joe will probably end up with the hooker at the bar Susan will end up with nothing bemoaning what she gave away and Ted will be castrated by Joe's many friends.
Joe will still be a buffoon, probably happier but still a buffoon.
The sex scenes are the redeeming qualities of the story postscriptor does a very nice job of writing them. Pity he couldn't put any substance with those hot scenes.
Still heads and tails better than most of the garbage posted.
PostScriptor, this was a less entertaining chapter than the first one.
The sex scene was erotic, exciting to read.
Maybe you have a very good stroke story here?.. We will find out shortly ,lol.
AMerryman
I believe that while he DID bring the vibrator, BEFORE he plied her with wine, at the end of Ch 1 she said, “I am not going to miss out on the opportunity of having a wild weekend with you where you will make love to me, have sex with me, or just plain fuck my eyeballs out as you will,” so I think HER intentions were pretty clear, also!
Of course the whole plot is tedious and contrived. Joe is bored and complacent, and cruel. Susan has been loyal and loving, but now has options with Ted, and others, due to Joe throwing their marriage away. He thinks he has just put the marriage on hold, but either you keep your marriage vows and commitments, or you are no longer married. Kind of a soap opera watching were this is going.
The writing style puzzles me, since the author throws in lots of pointless but specific details, which are distracting to a discerning reader. What with all the details about what they ate, where they sat, what they wore, the weather, the scenery, etc.? We had to be told not just that they ordered cocktails when they sat down, but that it was a "predinner" cocktail. Wasn't that kind of obvious, and, so what? They drove up the coast to wine country, had a romantic gourmet dinner, then retired to their room for some exciting and adventurous sex. The interaction with the owner and the waiter is just meaningless filler.
So Joe is a moron, and Susan has now lowered herself to her moron's level of virtue and character. Joe is responsible for his own stupid selfish choices, but Susan has now joined him as a married person ditching her vows and commitment. Joe cannot give Susan permission to fuck around on their marriage, Susan has made that choice for herself. Susan should have consulted with an attorney, and her children, and either decided to wait for Joe to wise up, or send him legal separation papers. Its obvious she and Ted have potential for a good relationship, and that would only be strengthened if both she and Ted allow Joe enough time and rope to either climb back into the boat, or hang himself, Joe's choice. With Joe acting like a dunce, and Susan and Ted acting like some honeymoon couple, the action reads like a cartoon.
I just don't understand how this becomes a multi-part story. Either Joe and Susan split, or they reconcile, while during the interim Ted is providing sex education classes. A profound and compelling plot.
Always a disappointment when a good author does not perform up to their potential.
For the many who feel important with "Does anyone realize this is fiction?" A good read is a good read. The best fiction helps the reader suspend disbelief, especially in a fantasy. I won't be reading this writer any further.
Only idiotic crap!!!
I didn't see that coming. Pretty much out there. As Sean said, "Impossible, but doable"................ great read, thx........
But found this to be boring. Not much tension, dont anticipate tesolution. Joe is an ass who dorsnt appreciate what he has-so life lesson but damn i learned that in grade school!
This is what happens when you use the excuse that you’re writing fiction. That way you get to truly make pathetic people from basically good people. Is there anyway that Ted and Susan can avoid looking in a mirror and living with what they see.
I know I'm leaving myself wide open to criticism just from the way the comments are going, but I thought it was a good chapter. Joe left his home and wife, so why can't she find a little bit of happiness with an old friend? If she does take him back he'll have to up his game 100% because she now knows what she's been missing all this time. How does this make Ted the bad guy, Joe gave his approval, even if he was kidding. Sucks to be that stupid. *****