- Incest/Taboo
- Fun in the Hot Tub
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All Comments on 'Fun in the Hot Tub'
by chris99999
- 26 Comments
Loved your story thank you. I wish we could read more of what they get up to in and out of the hot tub and maybe with her Gf's as well. Maybe they decide that being a couple is just so much better and they stay together somehow. the parents might even encourage them to look after each other. A baby would seal the deal between them nicely.
Very good writing flowed nicely and didn't seem rushed hopefully you continue with this and make another part, kind of a suggestion which you don't have to take from me but I think it would be better not to include another male character maybe just add the sisters friends
Totally agree with Frankie1952, further making the relationship more intimate and personal between the two main characters would be amazing and greatly appreciated.
It was good, but what was the purpose of making the sister such a slut, talking about how much she had been fucked before? It didn't seem to add anything to the story, it only turned the sex with her into less of an achievement. Felt like you sabotaged your own story there for no reason.
Maybe try not making it sound so robotic, use some contractions. Good otherwise.
I think you may be too young to be here, an obsession with big tits is usually a giveaway.
Your writing style doesn't flow well and, people don't say "I will" and "I am", they say I"ll and I'm. Try reading your words out loud before submitting.
I loved your story just the way it was. Who hasn't fantasized about fucking their sister, if they say they haven't they are lying.
It's fun and exciting, but also the characters don't sound very realistic. They speak to one another with no personality. It hurts the sex and chemistry. Still not a bad story, but I gave it three stars because the characters were so meh.
Your story hit must of my list of good light erotica, don't let people tell you otherwise (they can go read a novella if they want more character development or not into busts). Nice job!
Excellent middle and ending, can't wait for the threesomes with the other lady/ladies and uncle donkey maybe it could become an all IN family affair lol
Please continue this story it is the best I've read by far you are an excellent writer
Until the hot tub scene. They sounded like 12 year olds. Does anyone ever call parents mother and father, unless they are royalty?
The speech patterns of supposedly 19 and 22 year olds is silly.
Since I didn't see it addressed, I'm gonna throw out some ideas for future chapters. Uncle Francis is their mother's brother. He is the "friend" the mother goes to see. They have been having having a sexual relationship. And of course, the brother gets with the sister's friends as does she. I'm gonna say leave the father out of it. Too predictable and the daughter already said she would say no.
Brought back memories of the 1st time I saw my sister topless, loved the story
10"!! Imagine that up your sweet little cunt!!! Who the fuck talks like that to their sister or their mother as you have in other stories!! All it ever is in your writing is a cunt... Show some imagination! The word cunt has always had a derogatory meaning but it seems there are certain lowlifes that want it accepted as everyday language!! The Latin is cunny, which is much more acceptable! Your overall stories are quite good but they are lacking eroticism!
HOW ABOUT MOM IN THE HOT TUB,
WITH A BIG FAT COCK, IN HER SWEET,
LITTLE CUNT. GIVE US MORE TUB FUCKING,
BUT TURN THE BUBBLES UP. THANKS
AWESOME story.
Wish I had a sister like that.
Can’t wait for the next adventure.
Love yhe story. Not my sister but my wifes sister. My wife got out coz she hit a cramp. My sis in law, just said fuck me, and I did.
Girls always have the last say...
But eventually she let him do everything that he wanted to. Nice sister...
Would liked to know more about Hanna!
4 Stars