All Comments on 'Growing Up With Mum Ch. 03'
by jd8406
- 19 Comments
I think you are doing a good job on this story. The only criticism i will bring up is,you should try for smoother transitions in switching from one scene to another. But hey keep working on your stories and things will come together.
Enjoyed it. The dialogue between the two MC's is a little stilted and the plot is simplistic and predictable--but that doesn't make the developing relationship between Barry and Babs any less erotic, especially as the enthusiastic willingness of Babs to become ever more submissive to her son has every indication of soon involving Kay.
As a side note, it is interesting to observe that--following the more usual pattern of real-life incest between mother and son, it is the MOTHER who in fact guides the progression of sexual interaction; without that consensual lead this would simply be another one of those juvenile "alpha stud rapes his weak slut mom" stories.
Thanks for the creative imagery, and keep writing.
MLJ
Love the story it's been so long since the last part I had to read from chapter one to get the tale in my head again still 5 stars .
5 stars so far. They may be regretted if you turn mother into some kind of trollope, which seems to be indicated in the last paragraph
It sure made me horny. I think a little more detailed description of Mom's body would be cool, like she went to the gym after her divorce and now has abs and muscle definition and generally is a hard body for her son.
You have my vote for more chapters for sure. As for babs and Kay 1) all 3 can have nice regular 3 after dinner with a little bdsm thrown in 2) babs and Kay could have had a little history with each other like getting together when visiting store or that in actuality Kay and babs are step sisters or adopted 3) Kay is Barry's birth mother and Pam is his sister/twin
The story Line is good. The wording and punctuation needs work ,and the help of a proof reader will be very helpful. I look forward you the next chapters too come. Your getting better at this ,so keep up the good work !
If I was fucking my mom, I would express to her that the man in me wants to put my baby in her. Her response would determine our future together. A response of...."Yes, my darling, I too want you to fuck your beautiful baby in mommy's belly."
Let's get mom pregnant and if things went right let's get Pam pregnant also.
Of all the incestuous genres the mother/son relationship always seem to be more erotic. And if you couple that with the mother getting pregnant and she is ecstatic about it and the son is overjoyed.... that is what I would call a HAPPY ENDING.
How can it be wrong when two consenting adults love each other even if they are closely related like this couple. And their baby isn't going to be born with two heads.