by Veryrespectable
Brief but exquisitely erotic. One cannot read this first segment without recognizing the symbiotic nature of the relationship. Looking forward to finding out what comes next as well as learning how the relationship developed.
Kudos
Hope you decide to carry on with this story. Very intrigued as to where it will go next (and what his punishment will be).
Great start to your story. Very well written and it sets up well the relationship between the author and his mistress. Looking forward to reading more!
Poorly written piece of erotic literature if you can even call it that.
You need to verse yourself in the S&M world to truly understand the nuances of power and control before you begin to write, please do your research.
This reads more like a hate story with the race card serving as a distraction to your talentless prose.
I see you’ve written a part 2 to this travesty of a story, I’m afraid you’ve lost my interest. Please stop while you’re ahead and abandon any hope for a third instalment, you’re contributions won’t be missed here.