All Comments on 'Innocence'

please post part two ASAP

Hope you keep this going. It's pretty darn good so far.

Thank you.

I really enjoyed this and hope there is a follow-up.

It's CALIFORNIA..not cali! But, what do you expect from someone from mo!

So were was the golden shower?

story but all over the place,

the brother tells some parts of the story,then the mom/sis part of story is just told by mysterious person

my opinion you either have brother tell the whole thing or tell it in 3rd person.don't go back and forth

also WTF was the trip part in the story,came from nowhere then went nowhere

also you started with them,brother, sister peeing(which was okay)then they were going to have to talk about it(nothing said between them again)all of a sudden the Mom gets involved and its all forgotten

Like i said you got a good premise for a great story but it was all over the place,stick to one story,get through it then go on to next part,I really think it needed Editing Baddly

Liked it quit abit....need more please...chapter #2

It was fun to read......

keep it going.

Very good and would like more please...

Ok I didn't care for the pissing part, but whatever floats our boat.

I thought it was a hot story, the pussy eating was the best Son/Mother Brother/Sister then Mom eating out her Daughter.

The story could have used a little more work as to who was saying what, but overall a god story, gave it four stars.

Loved the pee part. Would have been even better if the sister had taken some piss from her brother. Loved the mother/daughter/brother/son fuck fest. Loved how the son/brother got his mother & sister drunk enough to get that sexual. Really loved how Sasha experience her first orgasm as an explosive one. Would love to read more about this family

I would love to read part 2 of this story

Loved every aspect of your story well written - great eye for detail.

I also enjoyed your pee fetish

Hey Readers,

Thanks for the comments and ratings. I appreciate the great feedback. I will be posting the second part to this story very soon. It will be a multiple part story so please check back to my profile for the upcoming parts.

The second part of the story will go into more character development. I will introduce you guys to my main characters better and give you guys some more info about the family.

Thanks Again!

And Merry Christmas to You All!

Double pregnancys.............They should be peformed as a threesome...............

Great story. Peeing part was brilliant. One of the best stories i have read for a while. Look forward to pt2.

very hot and naughty story. loved all of it and please write more for our pleasure please

Drinking tons of it is not so entertaining to me but everyone has their own preferences. Please keep writing these good stories.

Please oh please write part two so wanna hard more