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- Stroke Your Cock For Me-JOI
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You have a nice, sexy, very, very feminine voice. You will turn on a lot of men (and maybe women) with that voice. Obviously, you already have.
You communicate urgency and need well. That's very sexy. Your voice rises in pitch and urgency toward a satisfying crescendo at the end.
The perspective is right in this story: you narrating the woman's part, talking to a man about what you want him to do. I'd encourage you to try different perspectives in stories in the future, but this one is perfect for this story.
The length is good for a story like this.
A few constructive recommendations:
1. Start the story by setting the scene a little more. Where is it taking place? You don't need tons of detail, but a little helps creates a sexy mood. Is this in the bedroom, the backseat of a car, the family sofa? If it's in the bedroom, talk about how you've been waiting for him to come and you lie back on the bed inviting him by opening your legs. What are you wearing? Tell him how sexy he looks in the clothes he's wearing as he approaches you.
2. Cover all 5 of the senses: touch, sound, sight, taste, smell.
3. You might try to mix up the word choice a bit. Find some alternatives for "cock." Don't start quite as many sentences with "I want." Mix it up.
4. Fill in some details. Don't just say your pussy is wet. Talk about it's pouring down your leg, or the wet sounds it makes when you play with it, or how you are drenching the blanket on the bed. And speaking of sounds -- if you have any sounds to add other than your voice, like for instance, the sound a wet pussy makes, that would be very hot. It depends on how easily it could be done.
5. Find a list of the most popular audio stories and listen to some of them. Try to glean what you can from them that makes those stories popular, arousing, and effective.
I thought you did a fine debut job. Keep up the good work, have fun, and good luck.
Very arousing audio,thanks Milfy,I came at your command all over those MilfyMelons.
Great story. I shot off so hard from listening to your sweet voice. Thanks!
Good debut audio. I really hope you are inspired to do more.
I followed your instructions to the letter (and more than once!) Thank you.