All Comments on 'The First Night'

Strange story for this category.

I almost felt more like mind control or mature.

Anyway, interesting and well written.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.

I agree that the story seems odd to be in the romance category but mind control, why? This is more romantic than mind control by far.

I loved reading your story and was looking forward to there being more chapters but was disappointed when I finished reading it to find out you wouldn't be continuing the story. I hope you'll write another one like this one.

Unusual series of scenes. Predictable, but enjoyable. Keep on writing.

except for the dom/sub crap, I really liked it...

I thought this was very nice. I kept waiting for the raunchy sex, and when it didn't happen, I wasn't disappointed, because it just seemed like it didn't need it. but more chapters to fill out the relationship and add some sex would be great.

Itd be nice if people on here stopped shaming other people's desires. If it's not for you you could've stopped at any moment and went elsewhere but instead you put down the writer....I enjoyed it obviously so please continue

Holy crap that was awesome!!!! But why stop the story there? PLEASE PLEASE

continue!!

I’m loving your writings the more I read. I got the impression of some mind control/hypnosis going on in the background, maybe I’m just projecting my own desire!

To short and undeveloped…

While I'd like more to the story, it seems that there's some sort of control over the girl who did whatever the guy wanted without question. Or as "Old_Fart2" wrote, too short & undeveloped. While other stories have multitudes of chapters, this story leaves me wanting with only the 3/4 page. Hence the 3 stars. The author cheated himself royally! Bob