All Comments on 'The Loving Husband Ch. 02'
by NeedYou
- 15 Comments
A very good start. Please don't make Tomy the wimp and stay their for all of this. If she has Lou has to stay with Tony for the sake of the story. Just let Tommy leave her. Great story
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Don't make tommy a whimp! have tommy move on to another women and have Tony fall in love with someone special. have lou realize she is a selfish bitch now left alone.
i would rather see them all dead than to think this was fun for tommy ....if i was tommy no matter what i said i think id shoot them both and claim i came in on my wife like this and just went nuts..... either that or get rid of the bitch and find myself a real woman .....need to look back over what you wrote also lol could be shortened up some ....keep trying you might be ok one day
He agreed his wife wanted, thought she needed, a larger cock. Now it turns out she is contemptious of him. She claims verbally she loves him,
Stories that humiliate the man who has vowed to take care of her every need are NOT arousing. Thus so many pleading for the husband to be a man. Nothing she has said or done shows she wants her "good man" for anything other than his earning power. She seems as I said above, to find him contemptious. Even as she claims she loves him?
This past paragraph language throws me. I think I know what the author is trying to say, BUT, I'm not sure and a word or two can change much of it.
Frankly I could never understand Tommy. It would be either baseball bat to the knees and balls for Tommy or a .357 were she my wife. And then her ass would bounce down the sidewalk.
What do you guys mean 'don't make Tommy a wimp'?? He is already a wimp. He should have thrown her out[or took off himself]when the idea came up.
Great descriptions of the sex between Tony and Louise, but like most people I despise these slut/wimp stories. The only character who seems to have a conscience is Tony. Louise is portrayed as a selfish slut, but the writer seems headed toward dumping Louise ass out the door which would great. Most , if not all of your readers seem to have contempt for slut wife and sympathy for husband Tommy together with disgust for Tommy's refusal to kick Louise out and file for divorce. Go with the maojority and dump the bitch. the Ct. Yankee
don't listen to them. If I understand you the way I think I do then you are just exploring different things. I have read your stories for a long time and always enjoy it even if it isn't something I agree with or am turned on by. Keep writing please!
Keep it up with continuation. Again, I'm seeing a possible pregnancy here by Tony, and with her blackmailing Tommy into agreeing to this for fear of his losing her altogether. Very erotic....
Louise is really enjoying herself at the expense of her husband. She was kissing him at one time but tell to get back because Tony and she was gtting read to cum. Strange, but erotic.
So the husband has a small cock, can't last, shoots nothing and doesn't want sex very often. And the wife totally belittles him. Can't wait to see what other cliches we get for a cuckolded relationship.
nasty cheat whore ,buy your self afucking toy slut. to your husband you don't sound very loving