All Comments on 'The Mountain'

Loved it! You have no idea how much I look forward to your works.

Thank you for a wonderful story! This is the best story I have read in quite a while.

I just discovered your stories last week and have read everything you've written here on Lit. I had never checked dates and had assumed I was discovering a currently inactive author. Imagine my delight when I discovered a brand new story today! I'm afraid I haven't got any work done yet this morning - but it was totally worth it. Well do e. Please keep writing!

A translator myself, I couldn't suppress a chuckle about the interrupters, I mean interpreters :-)

That aside, the story is a sparkling gem.

Thank you for this wonderful story

I always make sure it ends happily... Ever since The Rehab... Will not fall down into the hole of crying my eyes out.

Another amazing story! I liked how you could have cut off two or three pages and gone for the simpler Happy Ever After ending, but instead had to wrestle that last twist and bit of mystery intrique into there. Sure, we knew he would get the girl in the end (this IS romance), but by giving us something a little more, well......MORE..... only goes to show new readers exactly WHY every Dreamcloud story earns its red H!

So again, Thank you very much!

I will say I had a little problem suspending my disbelief over him fresh out of rehab, and being quite as active as he was with little to no residual issues over his leg injuries. Learning to walk again is one thing. Energetic lovemaking, running around in the park, hiking the mountain again, kicking (literally) a guy's ass........That might have been a little past his abilities only less than a year out from the coma period.

However, there is a rule somewhere that says you as an author are allowed ONE big suspension of disbelief per story. Too many, and the readers can't stay with you because it becomes cartoon like. But sometimes I wonder when reading your stories, if you took everything into account when creating some of the amazing things that happen to your characters. Here, the S.O.D. is in his almost superhuman ability to heal. But if a reader isn't carefull, all of his antics add up to one SOD after the other, and just might be too much. Sometimes the fix is simple. Adding a sentance here or there by way of explanation, or even perhaps tweeking the timeline. Personally, I think you write at a level that you could go pro, and SELL your published work. However, I can only imagine some high-powered editor still calling you out for the suspension of disbelief thing.

No matter, while these stories remain free here on this site, I think you can safely enjoy your reputation as being Top Dog on this site. The best of the best, and I hope those red Hs of gratitude are enough to keep you here writing for us! Can't wait for your next.....lucky for ALL of us, it never seems to be that long of a wait. And I thank you for THAT so much as well!

truly a five star

great story

please write more stories

A fantastic story.

yeah - the story was THAT good.

5* - with regrets that I can't offer more.

There are a few stories that I rate at five in spite of a glaring need for better editing, and this is one of them. Ramen/Ramon, interpreter/interrupter, could almost have been find/replace errors, except each was used correctly once before the replacements. The story was good enough, though, that they were a chuckle, rather than a serious distraction. Well done.

The story and the imagination behind it are both outstanding.

I am a big fan of your stories. This was a little longer than some but the ending was well worth the wait. I gave you a "5" only because there was not a "6". Well done.

jd

What is the opposite of 'damned by faint praise'? I would like to know since when I say this was not one of your best, it is meant more as compliment to the others than an insult this this one. Maybe a 4.9 rather than the 5.0 of several of your others.

I had a hard time getting into the idea that they could have a real attachment after surviving and not really being able to know much about each other. I was able to get past that but I think it is a case where I might have had an easier time with it is I had a visual image of them growing close. Like many of your other stories, it reads very much like a screenplay we might see on the Hallmark Channel. In a good way.

Wonderfully touching and romantic. I expect we will find it filling yet another slot in the top ten list. Though I am sort of hoping it won't. You are not leaving much room for the other very good writers here at the moment.

the betrayal by Doug was a surprise. as was the discovery by accident of new friends in Peru.

I learned a new truism, never underestimate the power of a woman's intuition.

your imagination took us on an interesting ride.

Loved your story very much. The description of the interaction between the parents and Melanie is spot on. Especially how Melanie reacts to water.

Wow... You write the best stories. Thank yuo for sharing your knowlegde. I loved it

I had to read it in one sitting. Fantastic story!

So enjoy your stories...really liked this one...another favorite!

It was a wonderful story. I couldn't wait to finish it. It really drew me in and the plot twist was unexpected and delightful. Keep up with your writing. I can't wait to read the next story.

Story to add to my favorites list. Thanks for sharing.

Your stories are SOOOOOOO much better than ones I've purchased on iBooks.

Your writing and the stories continues to grow and never stops astounding me. Truly a great story and wonderful characters.

You are an incredible writer! I have loved every story you've written!! Keep up the incredible work!

Wonderful, absolutely wonderful

Simply the need to praise you for yet another terrific story. You're one of the very best on this site. Please, please keep writing.

Agree with some of the other comments about needing more than a smattering of editing, but a minor distraction given the quality of the tale. Bravo.

It is a real privilege to be able to read your work for free. Thank you.

Thank you so much for sharing this story. The writing is wonderful and the story heart warming. It's like a gift every time I read one.

Interpreter, not interruptor.

milena, melina?

I never dreamed I would ever read a "Romance" story. But, after a year as a Lit member and a big fan of your work , as well as that of a select few other writers, I have to accept that I am what I vehemently denied so many years ago; a "SOFTY".

This is a beautiful story, as your fans have come to expect, perfectly paced, with excellent scene and character development. I would have to reread all of your earlier submissions to be sure but I believe you have outdone yourself with this one.

FIVE STARS. Wish it could be TEN.

I do see an opening for a sequel. Just a thought.

Thank You Again For Sharing Your Talents With Us DreamCloud...

This is the first time that I have commented on a story. It was wonderful, thoughtful and heart warming. Thank you

This story is right up there with this author's stories titled "The Rehab," and "The Promise." Actually this story might be even better. It is certainly entertaining. With a well written complex plot, and cast of characters.

I always enjoy your writing

thank you and keep up the good work

But a good cry is sometimes wonderful too!

DC, thank you for once again providing us with a great story. It is now 1 AM on the day after it came out (I check your page daily for new ones) and there were already 32 comments before me. I hope that tells you how many people appreciate your contributions... this one no less than the others.

First story in two years to prompt a comment! Think about expanding this story, very well done, lots of room to build out the characters.

Your story telling is wonderful. I could easily see this made into a movie. What a beautiful love story.

or you could have titled it, "Don't Wear Cartoon-Duck Panties." It's a good story--not your best, but better than most. Even saying that, I still gave it five stars.

and felt like it was close to home, living in Eastern Europe. Armenia is not close to me geographically, but you are there, describing it so well I can feel it while reading. To pick up Armenia of all places... all the girls from there were simply beautiful.

I have to subscribe to your work, period. You know I was browsing through your stories and would just go "yep, he kicked ass here", "wow, that one was superb", "kicked ass here as well...". Was really happy to see this new submission and did not delay reading it, although I had a tough day and feel like sleeping is a must.

Thank you for all the good feels :-)

Great story again. The only thingto make it better would be telling Mikhail that he was not responsible for the original crash, to ease the guilt he carries.

Thank you for continuing to share your writings

Excellent, well constructed story with highly believable characters - I was hooked from the start.

OK, I'm a sucker for a good tale. Everything was right with this one. Damn it, why not have a happy ending.

Thanks.

Correction for chapter two and three, maybe others:

Ramon - Ramen

it is a pretty unfortunate misspelling, makes me think that some guy named Ramon has been darned unlucky ;-)

From page 5 and forward:

interrupter - interpreter

interrupted - interpreted

I thoroughly enjoyed the story, but I agree with the other commenters who said that the editing could be better. For example, you repeatedly referred to Azerbaijan as Azerbaijani. The letter "I" on the end of the word changes it from a proper place name to an adjective. It is just like referring to America as American, or England as English, as in "Tomorrow I'm flying to English". The only place it was correct, was where you identified the pilot as Azerbaijani. Still, it was an excellent story.

I gave it 5 stars but I would have given it 10 stars if it were available or 15 if the editing had been better.

Five Stars from me and very well-deserved. Thanks for the story.

This is a thoroughly engrossing story especially how two people of different nationalities and cultures joined in such great happiness. Reminds me of John Lennon's song "Imagine" that if people could meet two at a time maybe the hatred in the world would be no more. As for the "editing issue", its the story that moves us and if we are forgiving we easily move through the few mistakes here and there. They do not take away from the context of the story! A beautiful story written in a very poignant way! Superb job and 5 stars for sure! Keep the stories coming.

Another wonderful story, DC always the best....

Keep writing, we are always waiting for your new submission...

Thanks for sharing.

You could build a novel around this, that I would buy, or just publish a book of your favorite stories, that I would also buy. Keep going, you could be great

I couldn't stop reading.. well done.

much enjoyed ,

GOOD WORK!!!

i lost track of the time......this story was very immersive.

loved it, especially how they overcame the language barrier.

definitely 5 stars

This is easily the best story I've read on this site. And don't take that lightly, I've read hundreds, certainly everything on the top lists and all their threads. Very few have been great and certainly not as good as this.

Я не могу написать по Армянскому, но может быть по Русски как нибудь пройдёт. Спасибо за отличную книгу и, к сожалению, я только могу дать пять, но серьёзно хочется дать десять звёзд.

... but finishing this story was well worth it. Publishable. And a thank you to darussian, below, whose endorsement drew me in.

Thank you for yet another wonderful story.

I can't wait for the next..

THAT my friend is a movie script.

Great imagery, complete characters.........worth the time to read and enjoy.

Thank you for sharing your stories with us.

Brujay

Such a wonderful and beautiful story! One of Literotica's best! I loved the characters, especially Tamara! Please write more stories about them! Ty!

Loved every word!

asianToy

Wonderful story. From every aspect. Thanks for sharing.

Wonderful storytelling, characters, and detail. I have traveled quite a lot in Europe and Asia, a bit like this gentleman herein. Like him, I have often found that people in less modern circumstances often display more humanity and more connectedness to family and community than we Westerners manage in our busy, self-absorbed, and anomic lives. 70% of communication is nonverbal, so they say; but most people will never understand this unless they travel in other countries and attempt to interact and exchange stories with persons who do not share a language with them. Your story does a lovely job of showing how this works, especially when there are two stranded persons depending on each other. I loved the Russian red herring which masked any foreshadowing about his partner's duplicity. Really well conceived and presented. Thanks for your generosity in sharing this wonderful tale with us.

Thank you for continuing to contribute here. You're one of the very best, and this story lives up to your previous work in every way.

A great story . A nice twist with the murderous partner ,and the

duplicitous ex-girlfriend.

If I had the bucks, I would finance this myself. Wonderful story.

This was the best story ever shared here. Thank you for sharing your talent!

I am truly thankful I somehow discovered this writer. His talent is unbelievable and others may find words to express how fantastic he is but I'm simply overwhelmed by his stories. They touch me in ways I can't describe. I hope someone discovers these stories and make movies or even made for t.v. movies from them. DreamCloud's amazing talent should be shared with the world.

you wright some mighty fine stories!

A very rich story with twists and turns and characters to love. Thank you so much for a great read! Mike

Yet another great story! You never fail to excite the senses with the mystery and intrigue, the twists and turns, and the PASSION!! Thank you for sharing your talents with us...

This deserves to be a movie

I most definitely agree with a prior comment that this story has the substance and depth to be a successful movie.

DreamStorm!!

You should start writing novels,the stories are extremely good

The story is excellent! We just discovered you and your story when someone favorited one of ours. This definitely deserves all 5*s (maybe more). We would like to echo the calls for you to go professional. Then you will be getting paid to have critiques of slight grammatical errors. Good luck publishing or give us more.

Thanks for the fantastic read. MM

Man, this is some serious writing!

Dream Cloud,

You are an excellent writer! This story has lots of great and creative ideas in it. It is half way to a novel and I believe it could be published as such. I know the BIG push is to self-publish right now, mostly for financial concerns (publishing rights and all...), but if the publisher likes it, and it will!, then your book will be read more widely. It's good enough for me to give it 5 stars +. I have read some of your other works, but this is by far the best! I love that the sex was part of the story and never gratuitous. Very romantic and necessary to drive home the love and excitement they had/have for each other. One last point is that you had "the rest of the story" included in your work. Most authors leave us hanging, but you gave us the whole back-story, mid-story and finishing-story. Really, really well done! First rate and my favorite. B/C I don't have a Log on yet, I couldn't favorite here, but trust me: it is!

Congrats!

Christopher from California, also an author

Damn that's a good story. I feel the friend/enemy storyline is unnecessary however. I've read alot of romance novels and stories that seem to hide behind a danger or adventure to propagate story or advance the overly complex plot. Thankfully, it seems you didn't do that. I just felt like the friend/enemy thing is just too out of place. Oh and another thing, I would've liked to know the heroine a bit more. The story is told through the hero's perpective and language barrier prohibits communication I get that but I would've like to know more about the heroine.

I really enjoyed this story immensely and I thank you for sharing it. I have discovered that I am a sucker for stories with romance and a happy ending.

I love the story

Ed Grocott

Which is amazing because with every story of yours I read I figure there is no way he can top that. The only explanation is that you are getting better with every story but I don't know that much about creative writing to be able to point out how. Your stories are so real and vivid they actually evoke the same emotions as if I was really there. I wonder what Doug is doing right now? Thanks again for the wonderful experience.

As usual a very good story. I was a little disappointed this time though with the number of spelling and grammatical errors. I haven't come across as many in any of your other stories, and I have read quite a few.

One of the best stories in that genre I have ever read.

I just had a REALLY silly thought. Why didn't your very cool protagonist get himself a speaking electronic English-Armenian translator? LOL Super story. Thank you.

This is Big screen movie quality...

I love the story and the shocks throughout...

His anger over the shoe...

His committing to the fall to ensure her survival...

His anger at his parent's actions...

The violence due to his poor language skills...

His even greater anger at his mother's and Kimberly's deceit...

The surprise of the initial sabotage reveal...

The "how lucky/unlucky can you get" about the second one...

His turning pale when he learned the true target (I picture in the movie the film would have slowed and the sound faded prior to Doug's name so WE wouldn't have heard it)...

Twins...?

And if course, through it all, their love surmounting the language barrier...

Truly amazing...

I don't give 5 stars as "love" to me is something one feels towards wife/spouse/kids or other family-ish relations, not towards concepts/things/stories.

If 6 stars were possible, in my book it would be with the label: "Excellent story, which I will re-read at a later time."

I loved reading this. I rarely visit the romance section because it seems so many stories lend themselves to 'dragging', making what should be moments of frisson into 5 or 6 roadbumps of "oh hey, that was nice I guess". You hit these moments right on the dot and bore a true gem.

for another of your amazing stories. It is 8:25 AM and I never got to bed last night. It's all your fault.

I've now read many of your stories and find them intoxicating. Thank you for adding spice to our lives. Definitely should be published as part of a collection of your short stories.

Loved this story. I've read everything you've written and you always amaze.

all I can say is you're a damn fine writer. 5*

Every story I've read by this author, makes us humans worth having a future.

As always, your story was very good with a nice twist at the end. I enjoyed reading your work. More, please. :)

You can qualify for a novelist this was the first of your story I've read but it's a start

REGARDS DK

From "the rehab" to "the mountain", everything you put up is a masterpiece from a master.

I know this is rather lengthy for a story, however there is much more to be discovered about the family and the business. Will Tamara's brother do well with the purchasing,how will the families do with the twins and will the American portion of the business have more love in her life? I think you have more to deliver. Thanks for this portion

I like hot and hard, but also sweet-another great story, engaging characters...love the emotions and twists you weave in

Think this was perhaps fifth story of yours I really loved...glad there are still more to go....