- Romance
- The Mountain
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Click here"I'm sorry, Betty," I said softly, "I would have wished you didn't see this." She now knew why I had asked her to leave. I wondered why she hadn't told the Marshals. I wasn't worried about an assault charge, beyond the time it would keep me away from Tamara and Melina.
Betty pointed to the corner of Doug's desk. I could see the pain in her eyes. I walked over to the small stack of stapled sheets of paper. "He asked me for that this morning," Betty said, then broke down. It was our reciprocal life insurance policy. "I didn't know why he wanted it," she added as tears overwhelmed her. I looked at Doug's prone form as it started to stir. The bastard didn't even wait until I was reported dead.
Moretti moved quickly to Doug's side. I think he feared I would go at him again. I just smiled knowing Doug was done and took a step back to ease Moretti's fears.
"Mr. Finley," Moretti said louder than necessary, "do you know where you are?" Doug nodded and said something about the office.
"Mr. Finley, I am agent Moretti of the U.S. Marshall's office," Moretti continued, "I have a warrant for your arrest and an order for extradition as requested by the Peruvian government." I could see the realization of what was happening roll across Doug's bloody face. I couldn't help myself.
"I would fight the extradition with every dollar you have Doug," I added with glee, "I know a Colonel down there that wants to meet you. He was supposed to be on the same plane as I was." The idea of Doug bankrupting himself on lawyers and still ending up in a Peruvian prison made karmic sense to me. Doug's breathing was coming in gasps, and it wasn't driven by what I did to him. It was his predicament coming home to roost.
Moretti began reading Doug his rights as I watched his eyes lose their strength. I had never fed off someone's loss before. My mind reveled in his downfall. I felt vindicated and empowered. And then, like the flip of a switch, I felt like shit.
People died. More almost died. Physical pain and freedom deprivation would never make up for it. Doug deserved everything he got, but even death would do nothing to rectify what he had done. I let Doug go. Not physically, but mentally. He wasn't worth the brain power and certainly not worth losing myself and living in a personal cesspool of hatred.
"Maybe we should step outside and let these guys work," I mentioned softly to Betty. She wiped her eyes and nodded. "I need to tell you about my daughter," I added and wiped my own eyes. Hatred chewed up way too much energy.
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"Why she send flowers?" Tamara demanded in Armenian. For some reason, Florencia had sent flowers to me at Yana's address, the one I had given to Emilio for the time being.
"It's nothing," I said. It was hard to explain over the phone. I thought Tamara would be happy I was flying home to her the next day. Instead, she thought I was entertaining another woman. I had to work on her trust. I certainly wasn't a Don Juan, and I already had the most beautiful woman in the world.
"I can't read letter." Tamara said stiffly. I couldn't remember if I mentioned the language barrier between Tamara and me to the Campos'. It was probably in English since they knew my Spanish sucked.
"Get Viktoria," I suggested. I heard doors opening. I could tell Tamara was walking down the hall. There was a brief conversation after Viktoria answered the door. I could hear the pain in Tamara's voice. I wished I was there.
Viktoria started laughing as she deciphered the letter. I could hear Tamara demanding to know what was so funny. Viktoria spoke quickly with humor in her voice. There was silence after she was done speaking. I heard Viktoria chuckle again Tamara told her to stop it.
"I love you," Tamara said quietly in the phone. There was a little embarrassment in her voice. I tried not to force the issue.
"I love you, too," I returned, almost making it sound like a question.
"You home tomorrow?" Tamara verified.
"Yes," I replied, "11:35 PM." It was going to be a long two days of travel.
"Meet you at airport," Tamara said. I think my Armenian was getting better. I no longer had to think hard during simple translations. I almost told her not to, but her tone made it important to her.
"Good," I said, "I will see you tomorrow."
"I love you," Tamara repeated. There was more contrition in her voice.
"I love you too," I responded before disconnecting. I had no idea what was in the letter, but it obviously wasn't the love note she expected. I also knew that talking about it on the phone was not the route to take. I would find out when we were together again.
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My parents took me to O'Hare airport. They were as shocked as I was about Doug. They had known him and his parents for many years. He was the last person we would have suspected to go all evil on the world.
No assault charges were brought. I suspected Doug didn't want to alienate me any more than he already had. He would need my signature to liquidate his holdings in F&B Imports to pay for his legal defense. I would sign anything that separated us further, including a loan to buy him out.
I promoted Betty to run the U.S. portion of the business. She had been doing most of the work as it was, and already had access to all the files and bank accounts. I let her hire her replacement, a fine young man that seemed driven to succeed. It meant a lot more money for her family and no more bombs on planes for me.
Betty's first task was to solidify a contract for Emilio's cousin. Her in-depth knowledge of the process made me question what Doug had been doing for the last few years. I found out Doug was in debt up to his eyeballs and in the process of buying a yacht when the boom came down. I suspected he was playing playboy on my dime and dumping the work off on Betty. I considered it on the job training for Betty.
My mother brought a small note from Kimberly with her. It was handwritten on a small flowery card that was usually reserved for thank-you notes.
Jonathan,
I'm sorry I lied about Tamara's whereabouts. It was selfish. I was hoping you would come back to me if you failed to find her. We weren't perfect, but we were better than lonely. Please ask Tamara to forgive me. Give your daughter my love.
Kimberly
"She was afraid to see you," my mother said as I finished the note. I thought about the hatred I had wasted on Doug. It seemed silly to expend more on Kimberly. I wondered if I wouldn't have done the same if the roles were reversed. I would like to think I wouldn't, but I never thought I would try to beat a man to death either.
"Do you have a pen?" I asked my mother. She fished one out of her purse and handed it to me. I added a note to the end.
Kimberly,
I could never hold it against you. The heart makes us do stupid things like loudly breaking up with a lovely woman in a public hospital. As a friend, I still love you dearly.
Jonathanv
I handed the note back to my mother and asked her to give it back to Kimberly. I found it funny that Tamara and I could share no language and yet understand each other perfectly. Kimberly and I needed a translator to function.
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I was exhausted when I stepped off the plane in Yerevan. I was two hours behind schedule and wanted nothing but a shower and some sleep. Tamara changed those desires instantly. She was waiting at the end of the concourse, bouncing on her toes and waving when she saw me. I had no idea where the energy came from. My heart started pounding, and muscles woke up. I ran to her arms. I had almost forgotten how soft her lips were.
"Melina?" I asked. For some reason, I wanted to see her as well.
"Asleep with Meemaw," Tamara smiled, saying it like I was a fool to think she would bring a baby to the airport in the middle of the night. I laughed at myself before I enjoyed Tamara's precious lips again. It was so good to feel her arms around me.
The cab ride back to the Kurkjian buildings was quick. There was little traffic at that time in the morning, and Tamara was there to make sure the cabbie didn't take the long way. Tamara pulled a folded letter out of her jacket and handed it to me.
"I sorry," Tamara said. I could see it in her eyes. I unfolded the letter and turned on the overhead light.
Dear Tamara,
Your intuition has saved my love as well as yours. I send these flowers as a friend in hopes that we will find time to meet in the future. I wish to know well the person who has saved my precious family.
Florencia Campos
I laughed when I shouldn't have, but it was too delicious.
"I say sorry," Tamara insisted. I wrapped her in my arms again.
"No matter where I go, my love," I whispered in her ear, "I will never stray from you. You and Melina will always be first in my thoughts." Though it was in English, Tamara understood perfectly. Her smile returned with a little foolishness in her eyes. I thought it looked adorable.
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Tamara and I slept in a bed designed for one in Meemaw's apartment. It was cramped but twice the size of the hovel on the mountain. It brought back a few memories of staying warm in the most wonderful way. It was Melina who woke us early the following morning. After she had been fed and changed, I spent a good part of the morning making her smile. She was getting stronger, raising up on her knees and rocking back and forth. I knew she was about to be independently mobile.
Yana cooked a large brunch for my return. The family gathered in her apartment and feasted while I explained, with the help of Viktoria, about what had happened the past week. Tamara had already passed on the gist of it, and I was only filling in the blanks. Yana was happy it was over and done with. She had resolved herself to an American son-in-law and didn't want it to change. The brothers wanted more details of my brief insanity. A blow by blow replay of my useless revenge.
I shocked everyone by asking Garik if he wanted to work for me. I had decided that I needed to limit my traveling since I had a family now, and Garik seemed to love the trip to Azerbaijani. I could hire him as an independent contractor with bonuses tied to the inking of deals. He was both excited and hesitant.
"What would I have to do?" Garik asked.
"Travel to find product," I replied, "I'd take you on a couple of trips to get you started. In time, you'll recognize what we're looking for and be able to head out on your own. You can hire interpreters when needed to get your through the negotiations."
"I can hire people?" Garik queried with reservation.
"In time, when necessary. You always need to keep in mind what the company will make and balance that with the fees you need to pay." I smiled, "and your own pay, of course."
"How will I know if it's the right stuff?"
"Our clients like to mix art with functionality. Uniqueness, a good history, and quality are what you need to look for. Usually, you start with a lead, so you're not traveling blind." I was mixing Armenian words with English. I was getting better at it, and Viktoria was having an easier time translating and Garik was grasping the concepts quickly.
"What do you mean about history?"
I thought about it for a moment. History was the marketing part that our clients loved so much. It was more in the presentation, the stuff they could tell their friends. I looked down, trying to figure out a way to explain it. The rug at my feet would be a good visual aide. It was certainly high enough quality and well made.
"Take this rug," I instructed, "it is very well made and has a wonderful design." I dropped to the floor and moved to the corner, lifting it back to look for a label. "A label sewn into the rug with a company logo or family crest helps give it history." There was no label, so I moved to another corner. "You want the name of the artist, maybe a sewn signature to give it a one-of-a-kind type of feel." Still no label.
"You will not find a label," Tamara said before I moved to another corner. I looked closely at the back of the rug. It had a very high knot count. The quality was excellent.
"This must have cost a lot," I mentioned in passing as I rose to continue the instruction. Yana chuckled, her face flushing.
"Mother made it," Tamara said as if I should have known. My eyes widened as I dropped back down to my knees and reexamined the craftsmanship.
"You made this?" I asked Yana.
"Yes," Yana replied. She was beaming with pride.
"She and Meemaw each make a few a year," Viktoria added, "They sell them to the families here." Victoria looked to Yana, "she sold the last one for 95,000 drams." Yana was still blushing, proud of her accomplishment. I did some quick math in my head, maybe 200 dollars.
"200 U.S. dollars?" I asked. Viktoria thought for a moment. Armen, whose math was better than mine, answered.
"About that, maybe a bit more," Armen said. He seemed proud of his mother and grandmother.
"Who taught you?" I asked Yana, my smile growing.
"Meemaw and her mother taught her," Yana replied.
"Mom is teaching me," Tamara added. She rose handing Melina off to her Armen. She walked over to the wall and began retracting the large accordion divider I thought was just decoration. An old loom in excellent condition was exposed with another rug about a third of the way done. I rose from the floor in awe.
"That is history!" I said to Garik, "add a few touches and that's what we look for."
"American's would want my rugs?" Yana asked.
"With the right documentation, they will pay thousands," I replied, "they want a piece of your story."
"I am nobody," Yana said, suddenly out of her depth.
"You are an artist from a long line of artists," I said almost laughing at what had hidden in plain site, "Your family history, as far as you can trace it back, is what they want. They want to know they are supporting that history and becoming part of it. You just have to list it out for them."
"You can teach me," Armen said to Yana. Davit pulled forward in his seat and began nodding his head as well.
"It can be Garik's first successful contract," I added. Tamara scooted in behind me and wrapped her arms around my waist.
"I love you," Tamara whispered in my ear as the conversation in the room began moving quickly, excitement infecting everyone. I turned in Tamara's arms, ignoring the questions being flung at me. I had a lifetime to answer them.
The world disappeared as I lost myself in Tamara's lips. We were back on the mountain, a blizzard we no longer cared about was raging around us. The only thing that mattered was the moment and that we held each other. A squeal brought our minds back to reality.
Melina was waving her arms in Armen' s lap, trying to join the excitement by yelling for attention. She was our new mountain, a storm we couldn't ignore. I laughed at her antics as I swept her into my arms. Life was good. Life was very good.
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Tamara
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"Are you sure?" I asked the doctor. My belly was barely showing, and I felt no different than when I carried Melina.
"I know my job, Mrs. Bennett," the doctor said, almost insulted. I smiled warmly while I tried to let the ramifications settle in my mind. I finished dressing as I thought how this would affect Jonathan. I knew now that I needn't fear him leaving me anymore. Those fears were borne from the initial interference of his mother...and Kimberly.
I hated the way that Kimberly looked at Jonathan at our wedding. She was so American and way too pretty. He didn't notice, but I saw it her eyes. I couldn't blame her, but I didn't have to like it. She said and did all the right things yet her eyes would linger on the man I held most dear.
The jealousy ended when she embraced me with tears in her eyes as she said goodbye. She said something I didn't understand, but we both knew why she was leaving the reception early. I also knew I would never see her again. She left as a friend, saying her goodbyes to me and not to Jonathan. She loved him enough to disappear. I could never leave him, so she was stronger than me...or never loved him like I did.
Jonathan's Armenian was growing stronger. I no longer needed to see his body language to understand him. I loved how his accent butchered the language. Every time he told me he loves me, my ears would do a little dance, and the little girl in me jumped up and down.
"You might have to revive my husband when I tell him," I informed the doctor. The doctor rose from his chair and smiled at me.
"A blessing in any form, is still a blessing," the doctor said as he put his clipboard off to the side. I wondered if that was true. I rubbed my growing belly and knew my love would be no different. The idea of it was warming in my mind. As the revelation finally took hold, I laughed. The doctor seemed pleased and chuckled himself.
I found Jonathan entertaining Melina in the waiting room. Ever since she started walking, Melina needed constant supervision. She had the Armenian tenacity mixed with American unbridled curiosity. Jonathan was busy building some kind structure with wooden blocks, and Melina was having a ball knocking it down. He was having as much fun as she was. It was some game they invented and only they knew the rules. How high could he make it before she pushed it over? I loved how he could make her laugh.
"Having fun?" I said, announcing my presence. Jonathan turned with a smile as Melina, once again, destroyed the structure he had been building. He rose quickly, sweeping Melina up in his arms.
"Mommy's done," He told Melina in his lovely Armenian. "And how is she doctor?" he asked. The doctor moved out from behind and winked at me.
"Very healthy," the doctor replied as he moved toward his office, "it is a good thing for a woman in her condition." He left swiftly, leaving me to break the news. I wasn't sure if it was a good or bad thing.
"And how is Melina's brother or sister?" Jonathan asked. I tried to figure out how to tell him without freaking him out. He looked at me funny as I stalled for the right words. I knew he was reading my body language and already knew something was wrong. "Tamara?" He queried again, with a little fear in his voice.
"It may be both," I said, sucking in my breath.
"What?"
"Boy and girl or two of either," I said, watching his eyes travel through a million emotions, "the doctor only knows there are two."
"Twins?" Jonathan gasped, his eyes looking stunned. I moved forward to soften the blow and a smile formed on his lips, "Twins," he repeated, more to himself. He slid Melina to his left arm and pulled me in with his right. "Twins," he repeated dreamily as his lips found mine. I leaned into him and felt Melina kiss my cheek thinking it was a new game.
"They will drive us insane," Jonathan said humorously, "my mother is going to flip." His eyes found mine in that loving way he had. "We survived a plane crash; we can survive twins," he said, pulling the three of us tightly together.
A warmth spread over me. Memories of the first time Jonathan took me, warming the blizzard away and my fears with it. He looked at me with those same loving eyes. We could weather any storm, even twins.
"The mountain, my love," I said softly, "was the easy part."
- COMMENTS
I think I've read this a dozen times and just keep coming back. This is a great story.
A very engaging and heart felt story. Characters and plot development were precise and flowed effortlessly. Loved Tamara perspective at the end adding to the complexity of the story. A wonderful and joyful read. Thankyou for the gift of your time, effort and talent.
It was hard for me to get through the plane crash aftermath. Really difficult. But, it was worth it after she woke up. Thank you!
Thank you, again. I wish I could give you another five stars each time I read this.
Really trite and soupy ! in 85 years , probably the most entertaining story I have ever read , and I read a lot ! It has everything and should be presented to a movie producer . Really . Thank you much for sharing !
Excellent... A novel with elements of intrigue, drama, tenderness and eroticism
I really liked it
(excuse me for my English)
You know your story is awesome, when people like me re-read it every few months! You Rock!
I fully agree with the praise I read in some of the comments. This is one of the best stories here.
Eventhough I started skipping through the first part where Tamara was still unconscious as it felt a bit long-winded; I still liked the story. The part about his partner being the ultimate bad guy was a surprise. But also felt like it wasn't really necessary for the story. Just my 2 cents.
I find that most of the stories Literotica recommends for me are ones I've already read, this one being no exception. When I saw the title I knew I had to read it again and I'm glad I did. Still gets me emotional reading the story of their survival and love. Wish I could give it another five stars.
A story of a 1st prize in ANY category. 5 out of 5 for well thought out and written plot. Keep up the good writing.
DaveS
An amazing story!! The mind blowing twist of the partner trying to kill MC !!! Thanks for sharing your wonderful creation!
Oh my god what a fantastic story!!! I don't have enough words to express how much I loved this. Deserves much much more than 5 stars!!!!!!!!!!
This belongs in a library next to actual books and could make a great movie. I’ve reread this many times and love it each time
Rereading and love it. The one thing that is missing tho - Mikhail deserved to be told that the crash and his brother's death was not due to him. And he should know that the individual responsible has been caught and will spend a very long time in a not very pleasant prison.
Yes this would make a good movie, while I can't picture the proper actress for Tamara, how about Jake Jylhehal for Jonathan, just a suggestion.😁
I still LOVE this story, it never fails to improve my mood, even with the sad bits. Thank You.
I agree wirh all of the positive comments on this fine story. As Anonymous 2 months ago said, you should get yourself an agent and consider rewriting this as a film script. I can easily see it as a Hollywood blockbuster.
My only criticism; it jars when, several times in the middle section, the word interpreter is rendered as interruptor.
And, once or twice, my personal bugbear, the transposition of 'to' and 'too', as in 'I love you to' (to what?) or 'I'm going too find her.'
Small issues, but the result of relying on spell-checking apps rather than either rereading your own work or getting an editor.
This is the second of your stories I have read and I look forward to (not too!) reading the othersVery well done,
7527Crater
Excellent story. Really well written and highly entertaining. The twist was very well concealed as it should be. A story to be cherished. BardnotBard
Exceptional, right up there with the best tales I've read on this site. Great twist with the bomber and time taken to develop all the characters. Enjoyed it very much
A truly awesome story. Well crafted. This story deserves much wider publication! It would make either a great movie or serial. Suggest you contact a literary agent!
Definitely one of the better stories here. I reread it every year or so.
I’m loving your stories, I’m going through them all, love the romance ones especially
All of this author's stories are great and leave you feeling good. I can't believe he quit writing. I can see them not being posted on this site.
Does anybody knowhere he may post other stories? About 4 of these stories are on good reads. But I don't think that's the real author. I just can't see someone with this much talent stopping because they're mad. I can see someone having tragedies in their life or illness, or burnout and stopping. Anyone know the real story behind this author.
Amazing piece of writing, truly heartfelt and very well done. Slightly questionable ending line of “we survived a plane crash; we can survive twins”… — yeah, seems like an unintended connection — but aside from that beautifully written. Some grammatical and spelling minor errors, but we all make mistakes!
Thank you for this wonderful romantic story. This is after yet another reread. I'm sorry you had to stop writing here.
Another great story from you. Loved your characters and the unfolding of the story. Though I wonder why would Tamara keep the baby when she and her family were so definite that Jonathan was nothing but an asshole for using and ditching her and shutting her off. She surely knew about abortions. Residents of the Soviet Union were allowed abortions, and so knew about them, long before they were allowed in some of the states of the US. Even if she wished to hold on to the baby for sentiment's sake, I'm sure her family would have convinced her to opt for it. But I suppose then we would not have had this beautiful story. So thank you. 5 stars.
Another excellent piece of writing. You always manage to show your characters at their absolute best as well as their soul crushing worst but it clearly explains through actions that both are part of everyone so just accept it and move forward. I never saw the twist within his business that was written so perfectly not to forget the response which was even more of a surprise. Thanks for sharing this wonderful story with us.
One of my most favorite stories. Vivid characters, compelling action, real sense of place. I assume Jonathan called Mikail (?) to inform him of the real culprit. Makes me regret deeply that we've been deprived of further stories from you by the actions of the useless.
LMJ
Even after several times reading it, this remains one of my favorite stories I've read on here.
That was just plain amazing. Yes, I could speak to the spelling errors and other nit-picky things, but to be completely honest I just don't care. As with your main characters, I knew what you meant, and the heart that you put into this story was frankly impressive. Bravo.
Good story with some spelling mistakes and a daughter that switches names 3 times in a paragraph
Another story I read when I need a spiritual lift, it makes me feel much better after. Thank You.
There are spelling and grammar issues, to be sure, especially the repeated use of the words "interrupter" and "interrupted" instead of "interpreter" and "interpreted". Also, I still don't know if the daughter's name is supposed to be Melina or Milena because it swaps back and forth between them, sometimes in the same sentence. And I did predict the twist with Doug coming before it happened, although not a super long time before. But the story itself is wonderful and I love the concept of two people who don't speak the same language falling in love through surviving life threatening hardship together. I'm giving this one 5 stars.
Wow just read this again! DreamCloud could really write! Very Sad no longer writes here but being ripped off and plagiarized can really piss you off strongly. I do hope the author DreamCloud is still writing and creating somewhere. If epublish I hope there is a link or mention somewhere! I am thrilled the stories are still available to read on this site. I know I have several in my favorites that I have read again occasionally. Just as I just read this again! I can’t give an author any higher praise than reading their work multiple time because it is that enjoyable of an experience. A sincere thank you for writing, sharing (especially leaving your works on this site) your efforts with us readers on this site!!!
As I said I hope you have continued to write and publish because you have way to much talent to not because of the few thieves but much larger fans.
Peace to you DreamCloud writer extraordinaire.
Mariverz is a moron. Nothing Latin whatsoever about Azerbaijan. It's a predominately Muslim country in the Caucasus Mountains, which span Asia and Europe.
As for Pinochet, unless communist/socialist is a race, there was no genocide.
it's obvious that you don't know the Latin culture....
the protagonist, the Armenian bride, the baby, the families... would already be dead before Doug was arrested.
I mean, we blew up a US citizen and our chancellor in exile in front of the white house... and we didn't give 3 shits.... ( being honest, our friendly genocidal dictator Pinochet, by the way... ahhh and thanks for installing him in power mr. Nixon and mr. Kissinger )
no se como me había perdido esta historia, muy linda y emocionante.
GRACIAS!
I would really like to read about Johnathon telling Mikhael to contact Colenol Compos, so everybody could get some closure!
Finished this days ago and still smile about it. I’d definitely watch the movie.
Way beyond my 2nd reading and still a wonderful story, ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT! I'll probably read it again very soon for some more heartwarming.😍😻🤣😂😇
And yet ANOTHER 'second read'...!
and a first for me, all the years I've been reading Lit-three 'second reads' in the six most recent comments...
I remembered the gist, and started reading 1/2-2/3's of the way through-now realise going to have to start back at the beginning to thoroughly enjoy it...definitely didn't remember the twins, or her mom making the rug....
would also give another 5 if I could...it's definitely going into my 'All-time Best' folder
What a wonderful story. This was my second read and I enjoyed it all the more.
A damn good yarn, entertaining, well written, good drama and utterly believable.
Well worth the read.
Such a beautiful story … and my second time reading. If I could I’d give it another ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
This is one of the best stories on this site. Thank you, a thousand times.
Fantastic story and so well written.
I can’t help wondering what happened to the boy? Yes he must have died, but no questioning parents? No attempts to find the body? That little branch of the story could have had a few more lines or maybe pruning altogether.
Great story. Just one quibble, he needed an interpreter, not an interrupter
Superb love story. U should published it. Will top chart. contact Mills and boon
Those damn f-ing scavangers. Took away one of the best authors and his art.
A lovely story, had a blast reading it. Will do it again for sure. 5/5!
The last part of the story in Oeru sounded very familiar but I still enjoyed this nice romantic story with all the trials and tribulations. Well balance with a little sex and loving and also some intrigue and coincedences. Excellet 5 stars
What an amazing, warm story.
DreamCloud is one of the top authors on Lit, hands down! I say this after reading in addition to The Mountain, the stories The Promise, The Beach House, and The Cotillion. I will continue to read the rest of his fine works. The skills he shows creating original works with the power of his wordsmithing is refreshing and appreciated. I wish I had even a fraction of his skills.
Too bad about him getting his stories ripped off. More importantly, too bad for us readers who appreciate a quality story.
Such a great story. It had all the makings of a love story plus some. Sorry to have read that your posting ended because of thieves. I’m grateful to have come across “The Mountain”. Hope you are still writing and publishing stories.
What a wonderful story, loved every bit of the suspense and the happy ending.
Overcritical, I think you are wrong. There are many ways to fall in love, some sudden, some slow, and everything in between.
It's really two stories. One on the mountain and one afterwards. Both sort of ordinary. The abrupt change in Doug's status from loyal partner and friend to murderer was a little hard to take. How Jonathan was friend and partner all those years and never knew what was going on is almost impossible to understand. The concept of two people who don't understand each other's language spend a couple of days under very difficult physical conditions (remember that Tamara was unconscious for a couple days - which is also hard to comprehend) and the fact that they leave with undying love is just weird. A jumble of plot lines making little sense (coupled with grammatical errors and typos and misspellings and you have something about the 3* rating I gave it.
I spent the last 3 days rereading your story’s. They are all just as good as the first two times I read them. Wonderful
"My father, on the other hand, organized the trip and bought the plane tickets."
This made me so happy.
-dasgoodshit
Absolutely love this story. I read it at least once a week because it is warm and endearing. Thank you.
This one of the best stories I have read. It is absolutely a wonderful story. Read it start to finish couldn't stop reading. Hope to see more like this one.
Love the story and the characters.
Only thing missing was a call to Mikhail to tell him about why the plane was sabotaged. Absent that Mikhail is always going to suspect that the crash was somehow his fault.
I would like to say. This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time. It keep me reading it and I was telling my wife about the story. I was surprised about the partner. Good thinking there. The out come was great.
WOW what a tale. engrossing just thought the more extensive use of broken English at the end showed a rapid grasp of the language.
You do very well Dreamcloud! Why not give up your day job and go full on writing? Clearly your heart and mind are in this…
Great story, fifth time read. The survival aspects are spot on. Shelter, fire, water, caring for the injured, shared bodily heat are all very Les Stroud. I spent 15 months stationed in Turkey so in love with a raven-haired beauty who spoke no English. I took language classes the U of MD annex on base, but mostly used sign and broken English/Turkish to communicate with her and her family. Right index finger tap to a nodding head for "smart", versus a left hand thunk to the head while saying "stoo=ped". I never learned the correct word, "stoo-ped" became acceptable. Using both hands to outline some very curved pottery while whistling and rolling my eyes did far more than saying "Sen chok guzel." I translated the lyrics to 'Old MacDonald' for her young sister and sang the song, along with the animal noises, with her whole family. Guess which infidel always did the pig snorts? But infidel I remained and an influential uncle put the kibosh on our wedding dreams. If only we'd met on a mountain... (note: I wrote a story about a man who returns to Turkey and, through an act of valor, succeeds in claiming his lost love. An infidel with the Turkish MOH is an 'acceptable' husband after all... It's been 40 years; I still remember her phone number.)
Anon56
Hell of a good story.One thing I can't understand though,is how Tamara ended up in America when they were rescued,surely she would have gone straight home?.
Great storytelling!!!!! Kept me totally wrapped up in it. Loved it doesn't do it justice.
Very good!No, excellent! I could not leave it until I finished which disrupted my schedule for the day quite badly.
Loved this, beautiful story well written
Thank you for sharing it with us
5🌟
Thank you for this wonderful story. 5+++ stars is not enough to express my appreciation.
Such a wonderful story to start the new year with. Five stars just ain't enough. Thank you for it.
It is January 2022. I have knocked around a bit. I have had dealings with lots of people who wanted something the easy and worked very hard to get it. It always amused me that if those people put in as much work at doing their job they would be where they are trying to get to the easy way
I read your Bio. Your situation is our loss. I'm not going to pretend that I understand how the publishing business works, but I've read a few stories with Copywrite info in the author's notes. Couldn't you do the same? I hope you're still getting comments sent to you. You're very much appreciated here.
(12/30/2021) You made me cry...several times. The twist at the end was totally unexpected. Very well done. It's 5:am; I couldn't put my laptop down. Five stars and it goes on my favorites list.
very easy 5*
to reiterate the dude below this post, this would make a really good movie
Fantastic with beautiful plot twists, very entertaining. I came to read erotica and found a damned good story as well
A good plot with some interesting twists, well-drawn and believable characters. Easily a five star read and for me one of the best of hundreds I've read on Literotica.
Would benefit from closer proof reading. Only a few errors but they where glaring, such as Interruptor instead of interpreter. But that's a minor gripe and didn't come anywhere near to spoiling this excellent story.
Ummm these would make really good movies.... Just saying. Just got to say again how much I enjoy your stories. Just such a pleasure to read. Please keep writing. 5*
You are the best 'romance' author I've seen on this site
I've previously read
<the promise>
<the rehab>
And now
<the mountain>
Its just good knowing all these are by the same authot
Masterful. Bravo. Of course I have favorited you and the story. This is the writer's craft at its best.
I absolutely loved this. Started it and couldn't stop for a second. Had to grin like an idiot a few times in there. Amazing writing :)
I loved it! Great story, great characters, lots of emotion. Never wanted to put it down. Great job, Thanks!
You just made me want to survive a plane crash and FALL IN LOVE WITH A WOMAN WHO'S LANGUAGE I DONT KNOW!!!!!!
After reading several of your other stories, I know not to be at all surprised with the content of the next one because I know that what my eyes, heart and mind are about to consume is greatness! 😭 Thank you!
Very nice story. Just hated the "Ramon" that they had to eat on the mountain. Here we eat RAMEN.
Omggg, can't even find the right words to describe how much I loveeeed this story. It was almost watching a movie, I could easily picture all the scenarios in my head,I laughed and cried throughout the story.. this is one of the best stories I've ever read for sure ♥️
I'm glad I found my way to this story, I didn't know what to expect as it started off a little slow but it enraptured me along the way and kept me that way until the very end.
Thank you for writing this work of art.
He literally crossed the world to find his soulmate. A great story and I glad it ended happily!
Oh My God, what did I just read?? WOW !!! I haven't read all your stories yet DC but I love all that I have read so far. This story is amazing. Your ability to weave a good story is second to none. To bad some shitheads stole your wonderful works and post as their own and tried to make money off of your labors. Please come back, PLEASE !
Kudos big time, Thank you so much for leaving us with your wonderful tales.
I agree withaussie1951 very ewll done I too felt as if I was almost watching unfold before my eyes .
This would have to be one of the best stories I’ve ever read on this site. You certainly do deserve all the accolades Bestowed upon you by all the other readers. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ yeah I know I slightly went overboard with the stars but 5 stars doesn’t seem enough
Awesome story,without any doubt. I'll never forget those ducklings in different poses.LOL.
What a great story! I lived it with them, and your use of language to convey feeling is among the very best. Thank you!
Such a well written story of survival, love and family. The story had great drama, and character development. The deceit of his partner was not expected but explained a lot about the first crash. The one thing that was never explained was the identity of the child that died in the first crash. At any rate it was a great read, this quality of story was not expected here on Lit but greatly appreciated. Well done 5++ stars
Best story I’ve read in a while! First I’ve read from DreamCloud. I’m hoping for more as well written. Thanks for the pleasure!
A beautiful story. Well written, good logical situations and characters. Loved reading it.
This is the first story of yours that I’ve read and to say that you’ve set a really high bench mark for yourself is an understatement. If this one is anything to go by, I can’t wait to read more of your stories. Well done ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
I love your stories. I’m in the process of reading every one of them. I am saddened that you don’t feel comfortable posting anymore but completely understand. I work in IT and am well versed in the new “Anonymous Evil” that is pervasive on the Internet. Theft is still theft regardless of its form.
“...when Emilio joined Florencia and I in the kitchen”
Emilio joined Florencia.
Emilio joined ME.
Emilio joined Florencio and Emilio joined me.
Therefore: Emilio joined Florencio and me in the kitchen.
See how simple it is? You keep the same pronoun in both instances.
This story gave me hous of enjoyment.
I, too will miss your future stories, but I look forward to the ones that are still available.
Thank you for sharing them.
My god, I've never seen so many comments on 1 story before, and it deserves every one of them. Amazing work!
Your usual Six Stars, although I'd give this one 6.5.
I am horrified (if not particularly surprised) to hear that your stories are being ripped off. The web makes it altogether too easy to steal other people's work, and law enforcement isn't equipped to deal with it.
Finally, : No, this story is by no means too long. I would be happy to read more chapters, if we could convince DreamCloud to write them.
I need to echo cliquegge's comments. Dream's stories are a treasure and it's disgusting that someone would steal them. I truly hope he/she changes their mind. The Rehab, The Promise, The Cotillion, The Festival. Jesus those stories are amazing. The Rehab both hurts and heals everytime I read it. My only complaint is there should have been a fking miracle cure.
Seriously, damn thieves. They have deprived us of art.
I really like your writing and I am so pissed off at the arsewipes who stole your stories and in turn caused you to stop writing.
It is our (the many readers) very great loss.
This is like my favorite story on here. I love that he brought the duck panties back. That scene is soo God damned romantic.
It's always nice to revisit a story you really liked and hadn't visited for quite a while.
I don’t recall having ever read this one before. I didn’t check DreamCloud’s bio but I believe they are no longer writing on this site due to so many stolen stories / copywrite infringements. A great writer. I really hope DreamCloud is still writing - maybe E-writing and self publishing. A pleasure to read this story. Obviously I need to check to see the story list for DreamCloud. If it written I will be reading it.
I loved it one of the best romance stories I have read.....I will read again several times, it’s perfect!
First of all, this is my third time reading this story, so quite obviously I think a lot of it (as well as everything else of yours I've read). However, there are a couple of minor issues. For one, and I think I may have left this in a comment on another of your stories, but the person translating words from one language to another is an 'interpreter.' You used the word 'interrupter,' which means to stop what someone is saying (or doing), usually by talking over them.
The other I saw several times throughout the story after the baby was introduced: you used both 'Melina' and 'Milena' to describe Jonathan and Tamara's child. I found myself pronouncing it differently in my head depending upon the spelling, "Muh-lee-nuh" for the first and "Muh-lay-nuh" for the second, even though I greatly prefer the second pronunciation.
simply put i came here for what everyone else does but with a little more luvvey duvvey, i am walking way truly satisfied, i am glad i read it through
Superbly written. Well paced. Excellent story line. One gap I noticed would be Tamara’s reaction to his scared legs.
What a great and intriguing story of formidable odds and a love that won't stop. This story was so over the top with the struggle of staying alive on the mountain to finding his true love halfway around the world. The kicker was finding out that his slime ball business partner was trying to kill him for the insurance, just icing on the cake. It was a pleasant surprise to see that they stayed and lived in Armenia instead of hauling his family back to the States, but it made for a great ending. Thanks one more time.
everything about your stories is wonderful, from the voice to the details you drop so casually. the background knowledge has a depth that is only matched by the point of view.
wonderful, warming, and stunning
What a story! Enjoyed every bit of it and couldn't put it down. Congratulations DreamCloud, you write some really excellent stories. Btw, just so you know, it's "interpreter" not "interrupter" and "writhed" not "withered" though this could have got past the editor/s.Also, it's "born" in this case, not "borne". Sorry. don't mean to nit pick 5*s.
This story showed me that anything great can happen with any one from everywhere around the world as long as that someone is your THE ONE
I like to boast that though it was one of the first I read one here,it's still the onethat made me always come back for more
thanks so much
Even though the starting was a little fast, the ending made up for it. All in all, a good investment of time.
What a fantastic story! I read it one sitting staying up late to finish and it was on my mind first thing this morning. I was riveted from start to finish and found myself rather invested in Jonathan and Tamara and their love. As the story continued past what at several times felt like the finish, I was terrified that something was going to happen that would tear them apart again! I enjoyed the storyline and the twists and turns that it took. But most of all how you wrote about their tenderness and deep love for each other. It left me longing for a love of my own like that!
I see that this story was posted some time ago, but is still getting comments! But in case you ever edit it or try to publish it, may I offer two small suggestions? The writing was mostly clear throughout, but there were a few places with some typos and grammar issues. Second, there were a couple of places where the continuity was off. For example, when the plane was going down it was first said to be in a steep climb (going up) but then was all of the sudden plowing into the trees. Then when Jonathan and Tamara were at the hotel and she was breastfeeding, the description made it sound like he was sitting behind her so that she could lean into him, but then in a few lines, she was laying on his back. When I read stories like this I attach to all of the details in order to get a clear picture in my mind of what's happening. So while these continuity issues don't detract from the story at all, minor disruptions in the flow can just be a little jarring to the reader.
You have given me some ideas on how to improve my own work and I'm looking forward to coming back to this story not only to read it but for inspiration time and time again. Thank you for sharing your work with us. I'm going to read some of your other stories now! Also, if you haven't already, perhaps consider publishing this to a site like WattPad? I've read some very good stories on there and this is one worth sharing with more people. :)
can't count the number of times reading this 1 an others . the Promise , The Rehab & most all of them. like all of them . to bad can't rate at more rate 5 stars !!!!!!!!!
Second reading, still just as good. I go along with the movie idea. Certainly wish I knew where you are posting now. Long time fan, still am. Kenl
Absolutely magnificent.Oh why can't more people write like you?
A masterpiece amongst a sea of crap.
More,more I want more
Your story line was very compelling and well filled in with color and details. Very unexpected twists as well. You do need to learn when to use "to" rather that "too."
You have crafted a wonderful love story filled with romance, danger and great twists and turns. The screenplay for a spectacular movie is already right here. Well done.
This is a 5 times 2....I read it a second time and enjoyed it immensely.
I think this story works as a great prequel to the Taken films. Poor guy just wants to settle down with his sweet Albanian wife only to end up starting a human trafficking ring that gets ripped apart by Liam Neeson overcompensating for his terrible parenting skills.
When you consider a conversation carried on through a third person, "interrupter" is actually fairly apt.
John
A few minor problems, such as 'interrupter' instead of 'interpreter', but my main complaint is that I can't award more stars. Fabulous story which had me cheering for the hero.
Please read the title
Just when I thought I was jaded beyond all hope,i find a writer of your caliber. I have been around the block more times than I care to share,for some reason I'm having trouble with my allergies.please keep sharing your thoughts and gifts,have a beautiful day rocf
I have clue how many times I've read this that says something about you thank you God bless you6
If you were still posting here I'd recommend firing Tim. LOL 5 stars, as usual.
Very good story... none of the sex, violence, action, thought or dialogue was gratuitous. It was all there for a reason; especially the sincerity of their love. Best story I have read on literotica. Thanks Brent
And they just keep reading better and better each time. I hope some day you will change your mind about sharing more with those of us who are BIG fans!
I could care less at this point about the grammar mistakes.... This site is for novices and not for literary greats to express a passion in words the two bodies or like minded individuals do..... That said, great job on the story line and characters.
A great pleasure to read, but the scattered grammar errors (e.g. "I" instead of "me) and incorrect homonyms (e.g. "too" vs. "to", "site" vs. "sight") shock the reader out of the flow of the story.
I remember reading this a long time ago... loved it then and even better now. A good read and well crafted writing … well done .
Paul
Hmm, who would think that sex on a blizzard mountain...means you're treating her as a whore? They both expected to actually die, I don't think payment would have mattered... And who thinks of coupling with a whore preparing to die on a mountain? I think the family ran out of common sense to feed the plot.
This was a great story with a lot of interesting twists and turns and a sweet romance. I can only wish my own stories were so good.
I couldn't stop reading. Spent the whole night reading this and I'm supposed to be waking up in 2 hours (5am) .-. This is what good stories do to me. Awesome story and love and how everything played out. The person who made the comment about copying is obviously foolish, there are hundreds of other stories that pretty much have the exact same story line or draft, this author shouldn't be accused of such things.
I forget, should you always read stories about love and commitment that make you cry or never read them? Great story!
... an Anony, that the story was stolen from the previous book just pisses me off. This tale, and the other, bear as much likeness to one another as chalk and cheese!
The reality that stories may have similar elements, even similar setups, is a given!
I read that there are really only 4 stories.. that all other stories a derived from these. If that is the case, even if the roots were the same, the graft made a different tree completely! So where it the crime? This tale put so much more into the story that the two no longer truly resemble one another, except superficially. This could be successfully marketed if written and directed by some top notch fill talent...
Full marks, and thanks !
YUo ripped off the book The MoUntain Between Us and have the gall to pass it off as yoUr own?
You're evil, I was balling like a baby. Keep writting, I love the stories.
I loved reading your imagination and thoughts as they intrigued my curiosity of what was coming. Awesome story, really brings you into the life, fears and happiness of the people involved.
Thank you for your story.
Your words float across the written page. Your readers race toward the next sentence. What is coming next to stimulate their imagination. I am only sadden that millions of readers will never read your words. We discussed some time ago about being published on that “Big Stage” and the cost and difficulty to get a publisher. I still pray that some agent will realize your gift and get you into the money market. I finally got a “handle” and am no longer an Anon. Best Wishes my friend.
look what fell from your pen
a magnificent story. I have some idea how much of you you must have put into this work and it shows
"A goddess dressed in nothing but cute ducky panties emerged."
That's why I read this site, lines like that.
a true writer and excellent author. This is the stuff you should be paid for......
bill
10ssssss
thanks for the freebee
saw people had been steeling your writing, but a movie just came out called the mountain between us and that was a book written in 2010. Who is stealing from where? yours does have a happy ending.
survival takes a strong person, TK U MLJ LV NV
but I can't give it a five*. The last nauseating sentence finally pushed the straw over the edge of the camel's back.
Simply amazing! Gripping from beginning to end! You are a brilliant storyteller!
I have to admit I was disappointed. I didn't appreciate the whole "child ripped from arms" scene.... I expected something to go wrong, the whole event woke me up and got me interested......and then wham. Nothing. Not finding any closure on that front just resulted in me losing complete interest in both characters and their struggles.
Maybe I'm just odd and a little too firmly planted in reality, but I would have had a damned difficult time screwing a complete stranger knowing there was a lost or dead child in the vicinity. I mean that is just based on my own experience with survival training and S&R experiences... i find that a complete turn off and somewhat repulsive and maybe even a little ghoulish.
You're a good writer, no doubt about it. but that one. single. detail. ruined the whole story for me. And I know I'm a bad reader/reviewer because I didn't stick with it long enough to find out what happened.. Sorry!
I Love a good adventure. I love survival stories and romance. I know life is harsh.... I read fiction to be entertained and uplifted.... not to be emotionally slapped around. I get enough of that in real life to want to read about it in my free time :/
Beautiful.
Loved it, you did such a great job conveying your characters feelings. Well done
5* Really charming story. Really good use of Jonathan's rehab as a device to allow the baby's birth. Didn't see Doug's betrayal coming. I did though see Kimberly's betrayal coming a mile away.
This one had it all for me, adventure, survival, integrity, finding true love. Man, I'd read these all the time if you could just get away from the self-centered cheating slut wife stories you seem to find under the "Loving Wives" heading. The mystery of finding that our protagonist was the target of multiple assasination attempts put plenty of drama and excitement into the mix. And it was so much more satisfying than reading about some slut fucking half the guys in the city and then that patented line "I love you only". Every fucking time, The same bullshit line and unbelievable reason for her actions. "I did it for us", You have to understand I needed it this one time". That shit gets so old. This was just so refreshing, love and happiness in one another's arms. Very nice.
Very engaging, but please learn the difference between interpreter and an interrupter and re-edit. The many misuses of the word were quite distracting to the flow.
I only read this on 5/15 and it was just as great this time. I find that DC'S stories always leave me feeling wonderful. How can I beat that????
This is my fourth time reading it and I still have the same feeling as the first time. Thanks for this wonderful work of beautiful fiction. Silent movies prove that you don't need to know what someone is saying to understand their feelings.
Really enjoyed your story. Well written, well thought-out story. Thanks!
DreamCloud, you and Rehnquist share one thing, the talent and skill to unfailingly write great entertaining stories that are a joy to read.
Someone once said that great science fiction or great mystery fiction is simply great fiction. This, my friend, is great fiction.
I really admire your talent. I'm going to be very disappointed when I finish reading all your stories. Wait!! By then I can start the second read through! !!
I mean here's how it goes:
1) You come up with an idea...
2) You write a story based on the idea...
3) You post it here...
4) I love it.
Maybe we could try for a change where, I don't know, I just really LIKE something you write...?
Soppy as anything, but I loved it from start to finish. Many thanks.
Thank you for writing this entertaining story.
Kept me up past my bedtime! Loved it! You are a master story teller!
An excellent story. Had me from the word go. It has a real human warmth. Thankyou.
What a wonderful story!! I just loved it. Please continue to write, I love your work!!!
I read it again every six months or so, along with a few of your other excellent tales.
Beautiful story. It is well written with a wonderful flow and I had to laugh at the conclusion!
This story impressed me because i didnt see some of the twists. It also failed to impress me....WHO AM I KIDDING? DreamCloud always impresses me with his writing.
DoW
..... of a story from one of the several best authors on the site. Many thanks for a truly enjoyable read.
A beautiful and wonderful story. But I suspect this story would have scored a 5.0 if it hadn't been for some spelling mistakes. Fix the spelling for interpreter and interpret at least, will you Mr DreamCloud? :)))
cultural love stories that end in happiness for the protagonists - so sweet...and done so well!
Thanks for your time and talent
I'm so sad that I have no finished the story. What a beautiful story.
I imagined Jonathan being a younger version of Bill Murray. Lol. Jonathan's humor and demeanor reminded me so much of Bill. This story would make a wonderful film.
Thank you so much for sharing this truly memorable and heart warming story.
I only recently discovered your works (starting with the Rehab) and i'm slowly working through the others. You are a truly talented writer and i hope that i never run out of stories of yours to read. Thanks again, 5 well earned stars.
Your stories are true mountains and clouds of dreams! I love reading your stories; they always bring out the imperfections of human beings and then show the true heart of people. You have an awesome talent! I look forward to many more.
In every story you write, I always feel warm afterwards and I get really sad when I know the story is ending... like I'm so freaking in love with your writing I'm crying
Your stories are just wow.it always brings a smile on my face .the only thing I did find a bit irksome was the inconsistency in the child's name.is it milena or Melina? It was an amazing work nevertheless.keep writing more
I've never had to survive a plane before, Jonathan has some kind of luck. The coincidence seemed to be to much I was surprised to find out why. I've to long enjoyed the crazy over the top fetish, loving wives, bdsm, and non con., storys. I'm glad to have found some longer solid storys here.
Looking at you avitar I'm sure I've reead something of yours before but don't recognize any of the titles. I would like lit. to some how highlight our previous selections like google does for our searches. $$$
The characters were well crafted and presented, and the drama and suspense were compelling. The erotic scenes were exciting as well as tasteful. Well done.
I also think it could be improved by making it less quaint, and more logical.
Since all Doug needed was Jonathan dead, why not just set up a mugging gone violent? So much cheaper, easier to arrange, and plausible. Who would question that happening on the streets of Chicago?
Tamara was a passenger on a commercial air flight, so all her contact information would be a matter of record, as well as with the couple who paid her to transport their child. There also was the embassy involvement first diverted by his mother. Surely he would make further inquiries once he was out of the hospital and learn of the attempt to reconnect him and Tamara.
Since you did such a great job describing the bonding and love and trust Tamara and Johnathan developed on the mountain, it made no sense for Tamara to think Johnathan would abandon her, especially since she had never heard from him directly, and had given birth to their child. You convinced me that this couple had already betrothed themselves for life on that mountain. Also, while Tamara might have been difficult to find, Johnathan should have been a easy for Tamara to contact, if for no other reason than to get child support.
Why would Tamara's family think a man who wanted to desert Tamara and her daughter would now show up unannounced, to pay her for more sex? I appreciate you tried to make it an issue of language confusion, but Armenians are not stupid, nor primitive. Their first concern upon Johnathan's appearance would be Tamara's and the baby welfare, money, not revenge. Google "Armenian child support laws" for more.
Of course there's more, but you get the idea. Your story is a solid 4-star effort, but could have been a 5 with more care and thought. I have not yet looked at your other writing, but I applaud your talent and hope you are or soon will be a great commercial success.
Thank you for your time and talent.
I got a little nervous with the Colonel, I wasn't sure if he was going to be on the wrong side of some intrigue!
It's nice that his in-laws are going to have a nice income, income should let him live high on the hog in Armenia.
What can I say that hasn't already been said. All the positive feedback and praise is well warranted. I too thank you for this story, it had it all, a true masterpiece.
I have read many of Dreamclouds stories and liked them all but this one is wonderful. He is a really talented and creative artist.
Incredible and lovely story. This tale need to be 500* at last!
Do you know somebody in Hollywood? Is perfect for a movie, and maybe to an Oscar.
Is one of my favorites, with all the ingredients for a great movie, drama, love, thriller, business, friends, family, lovely relationship and Success staff in the work and search of new friends (not Doug, of coarse!).
I can`t believe somebody is capable to write one story like this!
Is perfect!
My congratulations and many thanks for share this story!
I apologize for my English, is not my native language.
Make this into a book and the movie will quickly follow. This has it all in both the romance and adventure/mystery genres. Please share this with the world.
I agree that this would be an excellent movie.
Your story-telling is superb. The plot was like something Lee Child might have dreamed up for Jack Reacher. I agree with the others about the glaring "typo's" - when you are made aware of these, is it not possible to go and edit the story accordingly? Would make sense. Although, I realise you are up to your eyeballs writing "The Link - The Huntress" just now. As a new reader to your collection, I am still catching up with your old stories. So, if I have to put up with the occasional spelling or grammatical error, so be it! Cheers, 5* anyway.
Full of twists and turns and very romantic. As others have commented, five stars are not enough. Reads just as good the second time around.
This story is absolutely fabulous as reader comments attest -- so absorbing and well written. But, that is my unqualified opinion of every story by this author that I have read to date. Taken as a group, it is the best collection of truly great stories on this site. DreamCloud, thank you for so much pleasure. If you are not writing professionally, you should consider it sincerely.
This is by the far the best story i have ever read... Action, adventurer, romance, betrayel, love this story had me on the edge of seat.. I 100% believe
this would make a excellent movie
Romance, tragedy, shocks, twists, and a happy ending.
This is a beautiful piece of writing that was well paced and a fantastic read.
Thank you for sharing.
The two spellings of Milena grew more irritating by each switch back and forth. However, this is a wonderful tale, well paced and well developed. Five stars.
dust in my eyes...damn it. Just an awesome story. Now to try and get some sleep finally. I blame you, DreamCloud...for writing a story I couldn't stop reading. Damn fine work. In my opinion you could publish this, with some structural editing and a little finish work. Either way, I'm glad to have been able to read it.
This is the first story written by Dream Cloud that I've read. What an awesome story. I cannot wait to read another.
Nicely written. Congrats on Romantic Story of the Year. I have to say, I did not see it coming, ...the part about the business partner.
A wonderful story to win story of the year. All of your stories are great. I am not upset that you as th author won but I will say iin my personal opinion this is not your best story I love the rehab more but that is onlyy because of personal reasons.
I like hot and hard, but also sweet-another great story, engaging characters...love the emotions and twists you weave in
Think this was perhaps fifth story of yours I really loved...glad there are still more to go....
I know this is rather lengthy for a story, however there is much more to be discovered about the family and the business. Will Tamara's brother do well with the purchasing,how will the families do with the twins and will the American portion of the business have more love in her life? I think you have more to deliver. Thanks for this portion
From "the rehab" to "the mountain", everything you put up is a masterpiece from a master.
You can qualify for a novelist this was the first of your story I've read but it's a start
REGARDS DK
As always, your story was very good with a nice twist at the end. I enjoyed reading your work. More, please. :)
Every story I've read by this author, makes us humans worth having a future.
all I can say is you're a damn fine writer. 5*
Loved this story. I've read everything you've written and you always amaze.
I've now read many of your stories and find them intoxicating. Thank you for adding spice to our lives. Definitely should be published as part of a collection of your short stories.
for another of your amazing stories. It is 8:25 AM and I never got to bed last night. It's all your fault.
I loved reading this. I rarely visit the romance section because it seems so many stories lend themselves to 'dragging', making what should be moments of frisson into 5 or 6 roadbumps of "oh hey, that was nice I guess". You hit these moments right on the dot and bore a true gem.
I don't give 5 stars as "love" to me is something one feels towards wife/spouse/kids or other family-ish relations, not towards concepts/things/stories.
If 6 stars were possible, in my book it would be with the label: "Excellent story, which I will re-read at a later time."
This is Big screen movie quality...
I love the story and the shocks throughout...
His anger over the shoe...
His committing to the fall to ensure her survival...
His anger at his parent's actions...
The violence due to his poor language skills...
His even greater anger at his mother's and Kimberly's deceit...
The surprise of the initial sabotage reveal...
The "how lucky/unlucky can you get" about the second one...
His turning pale when he learned the true target (I picture in the movie the film would have slowed and the sound faded prior to Doug's name so WE wouldn't have heard it)...
Twins...?
And if course, through it all, their love surmounting the language barrier...
Truly amazing...
I just had a REALLY silly thought. Why didn't your very cool protagonist get himself a speaking electronic English-Armenian translator? LOL Super story. Thank you.
As usual a very good story. I was a little disappointed this time though with the number of spelling and grammatical errors. I haven't come across as many in any of your other stories, and I have read quite a few.
Which is amazing because with every story of yours I read I figure there is no way he can top that. The only explanation is that you are getting better with every story but I don't know that much about creative writing to be able to point out how. Your stories are so real and vivid they actually evoke the same emotions as if I was really there. I wonder what Doug is doing right now? Thanks again for the wonderful experience.
I really enjoyed this story immensely and I thank you for sharing it. I have discovered that I am a sucker for stories with romance and a happy ending.
Damn that's a good story. I feel the friend/enemy storyline is unnecessary however. I've read alot of romance novels and stories that seem to hide behind a danger or adventure to propagate story or advance the overly complex plot. Thankfully, it seems you didn't do that. I just felt like the friend/enemy thing is just too out of place. Oh and another thing, I would've liked to know the heroine a bit more. The story is told through the hero's perpective and language barrier prohibits communication I get that but I would've like to know more about the heroine.
Dream Cloud,
You are an excellent writer! This story has lots of great and creative ideas in it. It is half way to a novel and I believe it could be published as such. I know the BIG push is to self-publish right now, mostly for financial concerns (publishing rights and all...), but if the publisher likes it, and it will!, then your book will be read more widely. It's good enough for me to give it 5 stars +. I have read some of your other works, but this is by far the best! I love that the sex was part of the story and never gratuitous. Very romantic and necessary to drive home the love and excitement they had/have for each other. One last point is that you had "the rest of the story" included in your work. Most authors leave us hanging, but you gave us the whole back-story, mid-story and finishing-story. Really, really well done! First rate and my favorite. B/C I don't have a Log on yet, I couldn't favorite here, but trust me: it is!
Congrats!
Christopher from California, also an author
The story is excellent! We just discovered you and your story when someone favorited one of ours. This definitely deserves all 5*s (maybe more). We would like to echo the calls for you to go professional. Then you will be getting paid to have critiques of slight grammatical errors. Good luck publishing or give us more.
Thanks for the fantastic read. MM
I most definitely agree with a prior comment that this story has the substance and depth to be a successful movie.
Yet another great story! You never fail to excite the senses with the mystery and intrigue, the twists and turns, and the PASSION!! Thank you for sharing your talents with us...
A very rich story with twists and turns and characters to love. Thank you so much for a great read! Mike
I am truly thankful I somehow discovered this writer. His talent is unbelievable and others may find words to express how fantastic he is but I'm simply overwhelmed by his stories. They touch me in ways I can't describe. I hope someone discovers these stories and make movies or even made for t.v. movies from them. DreamCloud's amazing talent should be shared with the world.
This was the best story ever shared here. Thank you for sharing your talent!
If I had the bucks, I would finance this myself. Wonderful story.
A great story . A nice twist with the murderous partner ,and the
duplicitous ex-girlfriend.
Thank you for continuing to contribute here. You're one of the very best, and this story lives up to your previous work in every way.
Wonderful storytelling, characters, and detail. I have traveled quite a lot in Europe and Asia, a bit like this gentleman herein. Like him, I have often found that people in less modern circumstances often display more humanity and more connectedness to family and community than we Westerners manage in our busy, self-absorbed, and anomic lives. 70% of communication is nonverbal, so they say; but most people will never understand this unless they travel in other countries and attempt to interact and exchange stories with persons who do not share a language with them. Your story does a lovely job of showing how this works, especially when there are two stranded persons depending on each other. I loved the Russian red herring which masked any foreshadowing about his partner's duplicity. Really well conceived and presented. Thanks for your generosity in sharing this wonderful tale with us.
Such a wonderful and beautiful story! One of Literotica's best! I loved the characters, especially Tamara! Please write more stories about them! Ty!
Great imagery, complete characters.........worth the time to read and enjoy.
Thank you for sharing your stories with us.
Brujay
Thank you for yet another wonderful story.
I can't wait for the next..
... but finishing this story was well worth it. Publishable. And a thank you to darussian, below, whose endorsement drew me in.
This is easily the best story I've read on this site. And don't take that lightly, I've read hundreds, certainly everything on the top lists and all their threads. Very few have been great and certainly not as good as this.
Я не могу написать по Армянскому, но может быть по Русски как нибудь пройдёт. Спасибо за отличную книгу и, к сожалению, я только могу дать пять, но серьёзно хочется дать десять звёзд.
i lost track of the time......this story was very immersive.
loved it, especially how they overcame the language barrier.
definitely 5 stars
You could build a novel around this, that I would buy, or just publish a book of your favorite stories, that I would also buy. Keep going, you could be great
Another wonderful story, DC always the best....
Keep writing, we are always waiting for your new submission...
This is a thoroughly engrossing story especially how two people of different nationalities and cultures joined in such great happiness. Reminds me of John Lennon's song "Imagine" that if people could meet two at a time maybe the hatred in the world would be no more. As for the "editing issue", its the story that moves us and if we are forgiving we easily move through the few mistakes here and there. They do not take away from the context of the story! A beautiful story written in a very poignant way! Superb job and 5 stars for sure! Keep the stories coming.
Five Stars from me and very well-deserved. Thanks for the story.
I gave it 5 stars but I would have given it 10 stars if it were available or 15 if the editing had been better.
I thoroughly enjoyed the story, but I agree with the other commenters who said that the editing could be better. For example, you repeatedly referred to Azerbaijan as Azerbaijani. The letter "I" on the end of the word changes it from a proper place name to an adjective. It is just like referring to America as American, or England as English, as in "Tomorrow I'm flying to English". The only place it was correct, was where you identified the pilot as Azerbaijani. Still, it was an excellent story.
Correction for chapter two and three, maybe others:
Ramon - Ramen
it is a pretty unfortunate misspelling, makes me think that some guy named Ramon has been darned unlucky ;-)
OK, I'm a sucker for a good tale. Everything was right with this one. Damn it, why not have a happy ending.
Thanks.
Excellent, well constructed story with highly believable characters - I was hooked from the start.
Great story again. The only thingto make it better would be telling Mikhail that he was not responsible for the original crash, to ease the guilt he carries.
and felt like it was close to home, living in Eastern Europe. Armenia is not close to me geographically, but you are there, describing it so well I can feel it while reading. To pick up Armenia of all places... all the girls from there were simply beautiful.
I have to subscribe to your work, period. You know I was browsing through your stories and would just go "yep, he kicked ass here", "wow, that one was superb", "kicked ass here as well...". Was really happy to see this new submission and did not delay reading it, although I had a tough day and feel like sleeping is a must.
Thank you for all the good feels :-)
or you could have titled it, "Don't Wear Cartoon-Duck Panties." It's a good story--not your best, but better than most. Even saying that, I still gave it five stars.
Your story telling is wonderful. I could easily see this made into a movie. What a beautiful love story.
First story in two years to prompt a comment! Think about expanding this story, very well done, lots of room to build out the characters.
But a good cry is sometimes wonderful too!
DC, thank you for once again providing us with a great story. It is now 1 AM on the day after it came out (I check your page daily for new ones) and there were already 32 comments before me. I hope that tells you how many people appreciate your contributions... this one no less than the others.
I always enjoy your writing
thank you and keep up the good work
This story is right up there with this author's stories titled "The Rehab," and "The Promise." Actually this story might be even better. It is certainly entertaining. With a well written complex plot, and cast of characters.
This is the first time that I have commented on a story. It was wonderful, thoughtful and heart warming. Thank you
Thank You Again For Sharing Your Talents With Us DreamCloud...
I never dreamed I would ever read a "Romance" story. But, after a year as a Lit member and a big fan of your work , as well as that of a select few other writers, I have to accept that I am what I vehemently denied so many years ago; a "SOFTY".
This is a beautiful story, as your fans have come to expect, perfectly paced, with excellent scene and character development. I would have to reread all of your earlier submissions to be sure but I believe you have outdone yourself with this one.
FIVE STARS. Wish it could be TEN.
I do see an opening for a sequel. Just a thought.
Thank you so much for sharing this story. The writing is wonderful and the story heart warming. It's like a gift every time I read one.
Agree with some of the other comments about needing more than a smattering of editing, but a minor distraction given the quality of the tale. Bravo.
It is a real privilege to be able to read your work for free. Thank you.
Simply the need to praise you for yet another terrific story. You're one of the very best on this site. Please, please keep writing.
You are an incredible writer! I have loved every story you've written!! Keep up the incredible work!
Your writing and the stories continues to grow and never stops astounding me. Truly a great story and wonderful characters.
Your stories are SOOOOOOO much better than ones I've purchased on iBooks.
It was a wonderful story. I couldn't wait to finish it. It really drew me in and the plot twist was unexpected and delightful. Keep up with your writing. I can't wait to read the next story.
So enjoy your stories...really liked this one...another favorite!
I had to read it in one sitting. Fantastic story!
Wow... You write the best stories. Thank yuo for sharing your knowlegde. I loved it