All Comments on 'The Truth at the End of the Day'
by leapyearguy
- 80 Comments
This is one of the best stories I have read on thia site.
Thought provoking,personable,with plot which shifts and turns but never gets lost, truely impressive. You may get complaints about it not being entertaining enough, but that applies only if you think entertaining only as: "and they lived happily ever after". To the mystery voice which appears randomly to say:"This or that story was mentioned at the authors hang out",well this story should be one if there ever was one that should be mentioned.
You are on my A list.
I enjoyed it. Thanks for a new story line, or at least a good variation! Good job.
I very much enjoyed your story. It felt... real to me.
Thank you.
This is your second story that I must say truly got me enamoured. Very good indeed. Err...if Rob doesn't want his money can I have some? 10% of that would do LOL :)
Thanks for the great plot and writing. Really a great job well done.
only the ending didn't make sense. if he was looking for an honest loving woman who could live without his money, he had found her. didn't matter that she would like to have the money, who wouldn't, but she had proven that she could live without it. him walking away from her didn't make a lot of sense. should have been the one time in his life when he would never accept 'no' for an answer. a fan always.
I loved your story and writing.
I quite taken back by the ending being so abrupt, in Chris walks away, as he normally got what ever he wanted. How can he say he loves her so much and not even try and fight to have her as his mate? That is my only critique or this wonderful, engrossing and flowing story.
Thank you for what is to me a unique and enthralling story.
With utmost respect
PT
two women, two stories, NO CONCLUSION to either! I saw her, we fucked for a while, "bye, honey, I gotta say goodbye!"
and then, "I don't care wht you [readers] think of me, because I'm rich. But it don't matter, as it never brought me happiness anyway."
and then, "I went to a bar and got really drunk and John the forever faithful servant came and drove me home and tucked me in. That's life. I still don't care what you think of it or me. The End."
what the fuck of a story is that?
Made little sense to me. He arranges to get Bill (?) arrested and has warrants taken out on her. He then commits a felony by taking her overseas, then compounds that by leaving her there without documentation - and she ends up getting arrested anyway. What was the point of him doing that? You don't say "I still wanted to spend time with her." You don't have him take some special revenge. He just leaves her. He could have done that at home without breaking the law. Otherwise, well written.
You kept him from getting screwed over so I can handle this ending as well.
Pretty good story, kinda abrupt, but still for what's here its pretty good.
-Risq
-He knew his wife (ex-wife) hated the cold.
-He took her to a cold country, that was their final destination.
-He took all her documentation so she couldn't leave.
-If she tried to leave by getting a new passport, she would be turned in for attempted murder.
-If she doesn't want to go to jail she'll have to "Live" the rest of her life in the frozen climate she hates with no way to return home or to the people she's known and grown-up with
I'd say that's a pretty harsh fate that's not quite as bad, but pretty close as bad, as going to prison. She's free, but she can never leave the country under her own name.
Of course she could get married and leave, but that's a totally different kettle of fish.
-Risq
Unlike the last two commenters I understood the ending of this story...and it was great. She never went to England, nor was she ever arrested. What I read was; she was left in a very cold country with no passport and if she did come home she would be arrested. What better revenge...she hates cold and she is a big city girl, stuck in a small town in Iceland.
I also liked what you did with Chris, she was honest about not being in love with him. Love isn't always a two way street...sometimes it's a one-way road.
You really think out side of the box, or is it some other shape?
Keep the stories coming!!
Congrats Author - a strong effort well conceived and delivered by your talent and diligence.
Your best with more to come we hope!
With Very High Regard
I will give the author high marks for this story being so different But I really did NOT like the story per se.
It was well written and the ploit was a good one but the main character spends every fucking waking moment of his life wallowing in self misry..
he must be a super RICH liberal.... LOL
the reason his possible TRUE love -- the girl in california-- didnt love him is that he has NO redeemable qualities at all.... he fucks well... and that is what their entire relationship was based on . She wanted a friend that fucks well... but she also KNEW from their intimate talks that he is a High tech lazy 21st asshole.
so he thinks he is in LOVE?
BTW is the main character is so disdainful of others and other opinion what bother telling the story?
If all you have around you are asshole whores and gold diggers chances are that is all you will know and marry.
Sad life, sad story and sad ending.
Too bad Chris didn't have feelings for him. His life becomes a wasteland without the one he feels he loves.
Good writing, though!
So much better with a different take on the usual fare we get.
Thanks for your effort.
Oh woe is me...give me your money so that you can be happy.
... the nearby forest, I knew you've never been to Iceland. There are some rare birches near Egilsstadir but hardly one of more than 2 meters in that beautiful and rough country.
Ok,your story is a bit different, but not very logical...
Out of the box, and the ending was not what I expected.
BTW - the charge would have to have been conspiracy to commit murder, not attempted murder. There was no actual attempt, although not through any fault of the conspirators.
I would have liked a little better understanding of why the wife was willing to go through with this. Criminal stupidity can explain a lot, but she was assured a decent amount of money without sticking her neck out, if she wanted out of the marriage - and just how was the lawyer going to make money out of this? She could just tell him to go fly a kite and there wasn't a whole hell of a lot he could do about it. Sure, he could "drop a dime" (it would have to be 25 cents now days) and inform on her, but the chances of her not spilling the beans if he did would be very low. Any lawyer worth his or her salt would know that.
The other hole I saw, was why in the hell was she running between the cars to start with, and why was she apologizing? Just a line or two to explain that maybe she was running away from an abusive boyfriend, an attempted rape, - almost anything rather than just running across the street between cars
All in all though a pretty damn good story.
I guess there are some things that money can't buy - and may actually be an impediment.
I like your writing style ... it flows nice and easy.
Regards, DJ
i see you,but i can't feel you.give me the money.i'll make do.
Happily Ever After worked for the frog, but rarely happens in real life. Great story, thanks.
Has many 4-5 meter birches in Rekyavik itself(think cemetery) as well as some kind of fir tree up near Snafasyokl past Tyngvellir.That's her punishment? I think she could grow to love Iceland, especially if she developed a taste for long legged ice-blue-eyed blond babes and dropping a dime in 2006 cost 50 cents, not a quarter.Now that my need for anal acuity is satisfied,what the hell was the Bullards last task?I think not quite a finished story.Pistolpackinpete
particularly cold.It is warmed by the gulf stream and has thermal warming as well.Not much punishment.
Rob should have tied up the evil cheating gold digging bitch to the top of the Iceland volcano, whatever its called. It should be erupting again soon. Just hopefully not on July 7th, cause I have to go to England that day 8-)
Not at all what I expected - but very well done -
She was too decent to gold dig a decent guy - sheesh -
The poor little rich boy never found a way to stop the Juggernaut..... I admit that I think that I understand his problem. Being born rich must almost be a curse...
In Rob's farewell to Anne, I would have told her "your room and board are paid for in perpetuity with a small monthly stipend for personal care since trying to leave would result in your extradition unless of course you would prefer to take your chances with the legal system. I have even purchased a cemetery plot just up the hill for you Anne. All it will take is to finish the inscription on the tombstone after your death and I paid for that as well. You see I have been looking out for you. Have a nice life Anne."
One he can give his money to, and then he can live in poverty and trust people.
I volunteer - all he has to do is sign it all over to me, and he'll be a happy hobo!
It's probably true,but between poor or rich I will pick rich.
BTW his best quality is that he doesn't take no for an answer,shouldn't he have worked on her?
is the pursuit of happiness worth the despair, hate, sadness, humiliation, anger, rage, betrayal?
chris is a real oddity, she did the one thing no woman could ever do, i.e save rob, by realising her true nature common to all women, but her love, was greater for rob though she never realised it, which allowed her to make a decision i'm certain no woman would ever make,(why?, its genetics, men cheat alot more as the innate need they have to procreate, and women are nurturers so they need to have resources, its wrong to say a woman prefer rich, its not their fault, their nature makes the decision for them)
i cant fathom of a woman, who do the same, yet every woman is chris only if they can fight their nature, the choice is yours, but what ever you choose remember this
"the pursuit of happiness is a misnomer, it means that you are not happy & its okay to run after your dreams to be happy, but i say you already are happy you just haven't realised it, & no amount material possessions can unlock that happiness already inside you, all our feelings good & bad dont come from somewhere, someone or outside, they are all in us & grow as the choices we make, sometimes influences may guide us towards wrong choices, but in the end its upto us to correct the mistakes we feel may have made"
---------------to all the fellow lost souls out there, may you find peace.
jimbo102
Very little except it is a sad story, and even sadder at the end.
Again original and creative.
As has been said, one sad story.
You wrote a very good portrayal of a poor rich guy.
An honest and honorable female - proves this is indeed a work of fiction
Most poignant ending AWARD
GREAT WRITING
THE TEARS HAVE BEGUN TRACKING
This was SHIT!!!!!!! (I skipped my procedure ) my fault. Mostly I skip to the comments first to be sure., but trusted this one :-(.
If I wanted depression I would have simply watched tv. Sorry, I'm done. This could have been a great story, fine ending. I happen to like a happy ending. What a waste of time.
"If you think that money is the answer to all of you woes, think again my friend." No maybe not all your problems, BUT it sure does help A LOT. Not having to struggle day to day? Yeah money helps a lot.
What a terrible thing to be rich. Little different story than what is usually found here. Like my endings more defined, but still enjoyed it.
For once this author had some plot ("Anne" and "Bill" conspiracy) just to screw up everything in the end.
First why not handing "Anne" to the police? It is obvious that any investigator would have questions about "Paris trip" and the "cruise" after that. Because it does not make any sense. But then again one can rationalize that part as ridiculous as it is.
However the ending with "Chris" doing some mumbo-jumbo about not wanting to hurt "Rob" is just plain nonsense. Perhaps if author could elaborate the "Rob" character that is so unattractive to these women, it could make sense but all we know that he is great in sex and has a lot of money. So ... he must have 4 inch nose or a bad case of facial scars? Yes, we know money cannot buy happiness but remotely good looking guy with a decent character could surely attract a middle age woman that is a single mother.
The problem in this story and in leapyearguy's writing in general is ambiguous plots, ambiguous characters, unnecessary psychobabble, and general lack of motivation of his characters. One real bad case of lousy writing.
2 stars from me.
I am sure I’ve never said this about any story here on Literotica, but I’m going to say it now. The ending to this story was downright stupid. Rob knowingly and willingly helped a conspirator in a murder plot flee the country and evade arrest. In the real world there would be a warrant for his arrest waiting for him the minute he set foot back into the country. I don’t mind a little suspension of reality for the sake of a good story, but this ending went way, WAY too far. 1 star.
The end.
Seriously, why did LYG write this story? Catharsis? Had to express depression? Rob is basically the same as his mother, only more alone if possible. Even his dream that Chris actually might have loved him was a lie. Who wants to read garbage like this? Awful.
For dark2donut2 to give this author an actual compliment or even just enjoy the story? Seems to always be a pissy one followed by all bitching but he hangs around anyway. I found it entertaining but sad. To go through all of the things he did and still lose out at the end was not what I was expecting, I doubt anyone else saw it coming either. Signed: BTW
Interesting story, and a bit different.
/pedantic mode on
Pretty much less than a zero chance that Iceland would let her stay there. Non-citizen, wanted for a serious crime. Oh, and you need high-level ID (like, say . . . a passport) and a criminal record certificate issued by the US (that'll be fun, though of course she doesn't have a conviction *yet*) to get residence in any case. She's heading back to the US in short order.
/pedantic mode off
There is fiction and there is reality. In fiction, taking your murderous wife on a tour and leaving her in the back woods of a foreign country is great. In reality, you hand it all over to the cops and stay far, far away from her. I liked that the ending was different. No happy ending for this guy. That was a twist.
Bleak but real. Money, and no kids? This protagonist HATES his parents. Also: "Loyalty and diligence will be rewarded, and poor performance and betrayal deserve severe punishment." A good life mission. Reward excellence, punish its opposite.
Agree with the anon from a month ago... A sequel would do well and give a proper ending.
Just words usually could not explain how wrong Mr8181 is but J-W has it right once again. A nice twist, you couldn't improve on what LYG wrote. Thanks where ever you are!
somewhere east of Omaha
Given the power of great wealth, he can certainly get to the bottom of what's going on with Chris other than having a name made somewhat infamous by its gender ambiguity. The story she's selling doesn't ring true. The Bullards can no doubt refer him to individuals who take on assignments for profit without regard to their legality except as it relates to the amount of profit they require. A careful abduction followed by questioning under a combination of Rohypnol, Versed and Sodium Pentothal should quickly yield the true answers to his questions. She would have no useful memory of the this event. He further actions would depend, of course, on what Chris revealed.
A story well told is one when you close the cover you set there for some time just pondering every aspect of the story, especially the ending. I find this in many of this Authors stories. As a retired Editor in Chief for a publishing company and a Field Editor for a Hunting Magazine stationed in Fairbanks Alaska, I can say with confidence that this Author has more talent than 99% of all Authors here! From the comments half the readers here wouldn't know a good story if it slapped you in the face. Leap Year Guy has some of the bad habits that you can only pick up her, like the dot dot dots and combing of words like motherfucker that is actually Mother Fucker. Almost every author here would greatly benefit by taking classes in English Literature, both High School and College level. I have read tens of thousands of Novels, Novellas, short stories and there are few here that could expand on their stories and have them published, they are that good, just as this Author is, YES, that good. ANON's, get over you self. You'll become a better person, even if you don't want to.
Nice little twist at the end. I thought she was going to jump into his arms and they'd ride off into the sunset.
The "labor history" at the beginning is typical progressive bullshit. But...5
xhristianj Under the bridge.RD. Nowhere.Just a sad bitter troll.Why do you bother?Get a hobby that brings you pleasure as masturbation obviously isn't working for you.
Old Grey Dog.
Mrfriendly8181 - there's a sequel from another author (authorized one). //rosa-blanca.ru/desixxxphoto/s/finding-the-truth-at-the-end
This story is well written and touching. But conceptually super flawed. If his concern is finding a woman who will only want him for big money, then just separate himself from BIG money. Have a decent but modest living style, money's in a trust. Then attract a woman on his own merits if he can without worrying about her motives. Hell, he can even keep her in the dark on the wealth.
Hell, even more radically, go full Warren Buffet and give away most his assets :)
All this suffering is realistic BUT easily solvable on his end.
I could go two ways here. 1) Unrealistic by very well done, or 2) "There us nothing new under the sun" and somewhere, sometime, people have lived out a similar story. I lean toward number 2, and I'm also inclined to believe that even more rare than the scenario having been lived out is the liklihood that such a scenario should be told, much less by such an excelent writer.
As I’ve said, in comments elsewhere, if I wanted reality I would look in the mirror. I read these stories to escape reality and see life work out like I wish mine would.
Fucking lawyers. 80% of LW stories are about fucking lawyers. It's like "LW" is an acronym for "Legal Woes".
Not a satisfying ending. I think you meant gently woke her, but I guess waking her genitally works for Lit
Sad and cynical. A far cry from the twisted humour we know of LYG.
But I did like the term University of Fornication!!
u take a lot of emotion away when someone marries with no love. how dare she betray someone that doesnt really love her lol
Ending could have been better. Chris left out of love and guilt. Years had gone by. Make the daughter his kid. Make it not so depressing.
I wish the ending was more satisfying and clear. Wasn't bad, just some weird motivations and actions.
I love how this story had a sad ending. It made it hit harder. It made it so that Rob (most likely) ended up alone and unfulfilled. Not that he deserved that, on the contrary he deserved happiness, but irl not even finds that happiness or love or soulmate. Sometimes life just ends with a sad, lonely whimper.
Took Anne to Europe and left her in Iceland? Aiding and abetting a fugitive charge on returning?