by Carl_Bradford
I'm a massive fan of your work but found the perspective shifting a bit jarring.
neither useful nor valid but I'll give it anyway just in case the autor might think otherwise.
This story makes me sad. It's arouses me a littlebit, but mostly it makes me really really sad. I can't even apoint an element in the story specificly. Just after reading the full 2 and 1/4 pages of this part, I felt sadness more then arousal.
Dear TeeHaa: At the risk of offending, let me point out that not every episode can be "happy, happy, joy, joy." I am not a creative writing expert, but to me, the essence of most storytelling is to create protagonists--hopefully likeable ones with whom the reader will identify--then place those protagonists in jeopardy or adversity so that they have something to overcome. Without that jeopardy/adversity, there's no opportunity for development of plot, character, or relationships. In this case, I've tried to describe a heroine who struggles with her own temptations (towards submissiveness) and poor self-esteem while working towards a guy who is deeply in love with her. This is a five-part story, so it will take a little time to play out. Spoiler alert: the outcome is benign and perhaps even HEA, like most of my efforts.
I hope I didnt offend you. I understand all this intellectually.
I think my feelings and therefore my feedback reflect more of my state of mind then your excellent story.
In times where I am due to corona being somewhat locked up myself... slavestories in general probably just make me sad. I just should take a break from the noncon-section I think.
To come back to the shared universe in better times.
I like it. Many posibilities. Waiting for the hotest of them. I'm sure this will not be anything sad nor sadistic (I hate sadism).