by OpenField
But feel the title a little too personal,
The O vowel you use is very good in drawing the long o sound out and fits very nice socially.the rest is beautiful sentiment thanks for sharing.
I like it title and all, I've written poems for my husband and the last two lines are especially good. Thanks for the read.
Agree about the last two lines, they are very nice. I was confused by lines 2-3, though — what is enfolding her long body in chill of down?
Thank you for sharing the poem.
This is an excellent description of aging love in very few, non flowery, words
That was beautiful. Usually in a case of very few words said, the reader is given little material to draw associations from. This was not the case here.
quite quite lovely
contented feel to this
and banked fires can be drawn to flame