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by rikaaim

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WickedEveWickedEveabout 20 years ago
question

I like this line: "My words stumble, fumble, and falter."

I do have a question about this line: "My spelling leaves me balling."

Do you mean balling as in sex, or did you mean bawling as in crying? Either way works, but bawling makes more sense.

moonlight elfmoonlight elfabout 20 years ago
I know what you mean

I can relate to those fears.I believe that every writer has fears and you express yours beautifully.

impressiveimpressiveabout 20 years ago
Nice work, rika!

I don't know what I expected from your poetry, but this wasn't it. I seldom like rhyming pieces, but this one was interesting. ~Imp

doormousedoormouseabout 20 years ago
Woohooooo

Bravo!!!

Love the deliberate typos. ( I hope they were deliberate lol ;)~~~~~ )

Great job, hon.

sophia janesophia janeabout 20 years ago
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I so relate to this! Great job!

The_FoolThe_Foolabout 20 years ago
I Feel your pain

Writing sucks from the aspect of one's ego. You have some good lines in here. Once again, I would suggest a little paring down and maybe breaking it up into stanzas, strophes or whatever you want to call them. Once again, the hardest part of editing is trying not to wad it up and throw it in the trash can, or at least it is for me.

Bridget69Bridget69about 20 years ago
Very true.

Conveys the doubts and uncertainty all of us writers often have about our ability to produce good material.

eroticdream1120eroticdream1120over 18 years ago
True freedom is a blank piece of paper.

Just let go baby.

AmyfriendAmyfriendabout 18 years ago
There you go...

just let it all out... ranting is good for you, I think.

Intoxcy8meIntoxcy8mealmost 5 years ago
really great work

My passion wants to soar.

My words want to roar.

2 very powerful lines that I really enjoyed

I would like you to know I reread this piece over and over great talent

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