All Comments on 'A Gentle Submission'

This is what we all dream of - a perfect woman. Nicely done.

Perfectly done!

Thank you JakeThorn! Thoughtfully weaved and written, tension running throughout. Superb! Commenter Will527 expresses my sentiments exactly.

That for the positive feedback! Part 2 on its way in a few days.

Very nicely written... Wondering if you are planning a follow up to this as Jane gradually increases her control over Paul

Good premise.

Sex too automatic. And lacking details.

Nothing with her breasts? Why?

Nothing with her ass? Why? She's got him eating her pussy, and following her directions to a "t". Kissing/licking her asshole doesnt occur to her?

And you need an editor/proofreader,

You wrote: "Why don't you get comfortable to?" You meant TOO, not TO.

You wrote: "You're a fast leaner" She praised him. You meant LEARNER, not LEANER. And you needed a period after LEARNER.

Four stars.

Great Start! I am heading right into chapter 2.

Thank you for writing and posting here.

I didn't notice any flaws or omissions, I just enjoyed it. I love how she wasn't mean, she just took the lead and made it easy for him. But she also did not give in to begging. Super hot. Life goals lmao.

If I should be so lucky.

The wait until morning, how could Paul sleep (!)

I loved the story! Maybe this isn’t going to be a popular take, but I don’t quite agree with the commenter who told you to include more specifics and details about her breasts and ass, etc, since it allows the reader to mentally fill in these chunks to their preferences. Sometimes I get too caught up in the specifics when the writer takes the time to describe the person as looking a certain way when my mental image/preference of that character archetype was totally different. I think you described the feeling of finding someone attractive, following them home semi-inebriated quite well. Overall, I enjoyed the level of descriptors you included, and just a tiny bit of proofreading would make it great. 4.5/5! 😄

An excellent start!

Sorry, as soon as she had gotten hers, twice, and then said "not tonight."

I'd have gotten up, grabbed my clothes, told her, "Or any other" let her listen in while I set up a booty call on my cell, then wished her a pleasant rest of her life.

Pussy as a weapon is only as effective as a man allows it to be.

Very engaging, interesting and stimulating story especially right up my alley and desires with no over the top domination of physical beatings and all but more of allure and thus mind and body domination. Simply loved it 🥰

Commenting here after reading the second part. This story is something what I dream of having someday. It would be lovely and nice when it’s personal.

better marry her

Good premise.

But sex was all so mechanical. Rushed. Lacked sooooo many needed details.

She sure should have edged him extensively before allowing his cock anywhere near her pussy.

Three stars.