All Comments on 'A Town Called Lucky: New School Yr.'
by Mogrem
- 6 Comments
This going to be a series? You write good stuff, would love to see him screw his increasing pregnant TA in addition to his students through the school year. You also seemed to imply some threesome with wifey down the line.
Thanks Anon. Yes this is going to be a series. There's a lot going behind closed doors in Lucky and, all being well, we're going to take a pervert's-eye-view trip through the lot of it.
Next part, "A Town Called Lucky: "Mom says girls don't count", is out tomorrow.
You're a good writer and the sex is pretty hot, but it's hard to get into a story when the main character seems to have no redeeming qualities and is thoroughly unlikeable. And the assistant's irresponsible and idiotic behavior - barebacking someone who randomly screws a bunch of school girls - without even a thought for disease, never mind pregnancy, strains credulity, for me anyway. But that's JMO
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I've only just started to apply some structure and thought to character arcs to my Literotica pieces, as this site is an outlet I come to experiment with a few sordid ideas that don't fit into more literary work. Those limits show in everything to date. Some of the stories have plausible characters, some don't, its a dice roll.
A lack of redeeming features is certainly an issue with this series.* It remains to be seen if I can bend that plot curve around enough so that he and Ms Colson develop something resembling plausible characters by the end of the series, even if our MC still isn't redeemable. So far, in the latest story, he has at least started to acknowledge his own position: that of a total bastard.
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* Its not as bad as the Sinbad series though, which I think I might knock on the head unfinished for being too nihilistic altogether; even more so in the parts I haven't published yet.