All Comments on 'Anally Yours Ch. 01 - First Time'

This could have been so much better if you had paid attention to spelling. This smacks of laziness even though the plot idea is acceptable.

This style of writing has no place in erotica - sounds like you are treating the reader as your wife - and I'm male, all very confusing.

Get an editor man, you are all over the place. How did this get past pending without someone throwing it back for corrections.

Story premise ok, if the sex was bit infantile, I’m guessing you’ve never actually fucked anally.

But the writing was awful spoiled it all.