All Comments on 'Art Class Modelling Ch. 03'

Awesome story and so much potential for more. Sam, Athena, Emily and Katya stand out most.

Spinoffs galore would be very appreciated. ... While Professor Lynn in the real world would not last the scrutiny of her employers, Those fictitious students and now-devoted readers should be clamoring to find more 'interpersonal' relationships develop as these new personalities and desires continue to develop.

Fascinating tale, good writing and good reading. For me Sam and Athena stand out and I want to hear more of them, but above all the enigmatic Sarah is the character where I feel there is much more to discover and about whom I want to learn more.

I think a spin off, with Lynn and another modeling assignment for Ryan.

His sister, is the surprise model. She heard from her GFs about her brother and his assets and wanted to give him a try. She went to professor Lynn. Maybe add one of the models from this story.

Get Ryan started then bring in his sister or have her wear a mask. Thanks for writing.

Scubasam.👍

I see you finally corrected the striped to stripped. But midway through the story the professor spinned. She should have spun. There are places where you can find people to proofread. I read about them in some prefaces.

Oh, and ma'am has two a's. And to be 100% put an apostrophe between the a's. It is a derivative of madame.

Stunning

Just a bit of proofreading and self-editing advice. If you have a pet of any kind read your story out loud to it. If you can do so in a manner that catches its' attention you'll know your pacing and action to explication ratio are good. Also, by doing so your mind leaves "author mode" and spots where you left out words or made poor/ incorrect choices will be revealed to your ear rather than having your mind fill in what you meant to say. Auto-correct and auto-fill are not your friends and spell check is a blunt tool to find misspellings but will let absurdities go through.

As for story ideas, you could possibly have vignettes with each of the girls. Your challenge will be to keep things fresh rather than rewriting the same story with different names and body part descriptions. "Senior Year Memories" by Aimingtomisbehave33 is such a series though I think he bit off more than he could chew and had trouble coming up with new plot ideas and maintaining his momentum. Maybe Professor Lynn can have an ongoing role of some sort? Perhaps as the scene setter. Does the concept of a harem appeal to you? Check out "Bosom Buddies" and "The Big Tits Club" to see if you would like to try your hand at that. You've potentially inserted a Chekov's gun by remarking that some number of the girls are already in a friend group with Ryan's sister. Do you wish to write incest with the sister? Also up for consideration is whether you want to have any sort of romantic involvement with a particular girl, Ashley comes to mind, or stick to hook ups.

You have talent and proofreading errors aside write good dialogue so you can take this in any number of directions. Take some time, look over some of the series I mentioned, there are others of course but those were/are popular, and see what appeals to you to write about. Even if it's unrelated stand alones. I think you may find that more rewarding than cranking out episodes by request.

Good luck, I look forward to seeing where you go next.

I think it should be his sister. Both alone and with the whole group of friends. I enjoyed this and look forward to the rest of your stories.

Loved the story. Loved the pacing. Can’t wait for more. A new character has to be the sister. But for my personal taste, no incest. There’s plenty of mileage without that.

Good luck with your writing

Thanks to author "TurinTurambar" for this series.

Some thoughts -- in response to what the author has posted about the future of the universe of this series and what other Commenters have said in the discussion of the same subject:

1) I wouldn't call this a matter of "Chekhov's Gun" -- a literary-creation principle in which all elements of a story should eventually be of importance to it before its end... -- but I agree with other Commenters that now that not just 1 or 2 of Ryan's sister's secondary-school friends, but *at least 4* have seen Ryan nude and have (thanks to Julia, Ashley, and Professor Lynn) been sexually aroused by him and have engaged in sexual activities in him, it seems unlikely that Ryan's sister will *not* -- at the least -- hear of her friends' involvement with him, and I would guess that the sister (Megan) will show up in a story somehow or other -- soon.

But the author may not wish to have her have sex with her brothe; she *might* visit the campus and be part of a group sex orgy involving her friends and Ryan -- *without* having sex with him herself (?) -- or may be too taboo-influenced to want to even see her bother naked... -- and just somehow react to what she has heard about him from 1 or more of her old friends.

2) As the author and the analytical Anonymous Commenter of about 2 weeks ago indicated, there are a number of directions which the author may pursue in future -- including Ryan establishing a "harem" including all the freshman students we have so far met, stories involving his future involvement with 1 or more of them at a time, the Senior Year Memories of a small core "harem" supplemented by repeated stories involving particular partners and stories involving new partners, other stories set on the same campus but *not* directly stemming from what has already been seen involving Ryan, Julia, and Professor Lynn, possible exploration of what are now "mysteries" involving Sarah and Sam/Samantha, stories exploring what Sam, Julia, and Ashley feel for Ryan (friendship and/or romance), and (not so much mentioned by others, but appealing to me) exploration of the mutual lust/attraction and the seeming "dominant"/"submissive" dynamic between Professor Lynn and Ryan (which seems to me to be central in this series so far, and deserving of exploration).

3) The 2 new characters who stood out to me in Chapter 3 are Sam (said to have been the only one of Megan's friends to have been a "friend" to him before -- and a former "tomboy" who for reasons now unclear joined Chapter 3's "class", Sarah (who seems to have nearly admitted to having a submissive relationship to Professor Lynn, but who seems to have also had sexual experience with boys and/or men before the events in Chapter 3, and Katya -- who says she knew something of Professor Lynn's past adventures from "older" friends/acquaintances in Ukraine -- and that what she had learned made her eager to be part of the "class" showcasing Ryan and Professor Lynn.

4) I would like to read where Ryan's relationship with Professor Lynn will go, but learning more about Sam and Sarah's mysteries would be interesting to me too.

I hope to see more about this universe from the author soon (I would recommend submission of future chapters to 1 or more editor/s, though).

I hope this has not been too long a post.

Happy Reading,

Ethan in New York City/"nycreader".