All Comments on 'Billionaire and the Sisters Ch. 48'
by SteveWallace
- 6 Comments
yeah at no point is it hot or erotic for a man to have his girlfriend(s) pregnant by another man.
More and more this group is turning into a hippy commune. In the beginning it was decent because they had a set of friends and everyone brought something or someone to the table. Now it is completely random. And zero seduction or eroticism. Shocking, a woman flashes her pussy to every single guy in a singles bar and she's able to pick up someone. It's also seeming that all the new guys popping Mark's women are all sexually better than Mark. Your protagonist is basically EXACTLY what the original sisters said they never wanted which is Mark as merely the sugar daddy/money for a rolling swingers party. Apparently no one cares about disease either. Just pick up complete randoms and bareback with creampies. You're losing the plot. All eroticism is draining fast
As much as I love this series, it pains me to agree with the comments above. Cutting them lose especially when he is mad at them seems like the wrong direction. Now the the stalker situation is handled, they need to focus on the positive and work on the new house. I also think Mark should by the vacation house they have rented so it is always available to them. The group has gotten big enough, Mark might want to think about reining it in just a bit.
With Elsa supposedly being his "Prime" I hate to see her pickup randoms. Please get back on track with the main characters and primary plot line.
thank you for sharing your stories with us.
As we all know, this if fiction, and fantasy sex at that. It's the author's fantasy, not necessarily ours, and ultimately while this is a sex site he's putting himself out there to a degree. So, we have to respect that and appreciate the efforts of his imagination.
That being said, the will and effort to keep reality suspended over the course of these 48 (!) chapters has really worn me out. For those of us who have been inside polyamorous relationships, just considering the breadth and depth of this fiction renders the stories cartoonish, almost to the point of hearing a laugh track play along. (I can't help but cringe at myself for admitting I'm probably going to play this out to the end.) These characters lack any self control, and the polyamorous will probably chime in here with me that monumental self control is necessary to maintain such a relationship.
Stylistically, I think this whole thing could have been consolidated into a third of the volume with some really tight, critical editing, and broken into chapters of 6 to 8 pages each centering around something relevant. I think it's just too meandering and repetitive.
I'm a huge fan of open relationships, but even those have rules and limitations, and the pure randomness of partnering fits in more with 18/19 yr old college girls just off the leash hitting the frat house for the first time.
You are turning Elsa into the villain. She is constantly getting new dick. Meanwhile you have turned Cindy into nothing but a plot accessory for Elsa. No growth with her character and very little interaction outside of sex with other characters.