All Comments on 'Birthday Pool Party Ch. 40'
by WittyUserName
- 44 Comments
Wow Witty! Another awesome 5 star chapter. It was well worth the wait. I cant wait for the Steven, Lexi, Stacey and April foursome. That is bounde to be hot. Ashley is clearly falling for Josh, such a great Ashley POV. Barry is back! What a cliffhanger! I will be waiting on pins and needles for the next chapter. Great work!
So, somewhere in the world there’s a guy who started reading this story around chapter three.
Well, we’re at chapter 40 and I’ll bet he’s still waiting for a birthday pool party.
I don't know who half these people are anymore. No Ian in this one, which is the most likeable guy in this story. Steven gets it all too easy, Ian has to work for it. It's time to wrap this one up - with a pool party, ofcourse.
This story just keeps getting better and better. Glad to hear you're doing better Witty.
The more I read the more I begin to believe that in spite of everything Steven says and does, it's really him that Lexi doesn't trust with Stacey. It's easy to see why by Stacey's description.
Another nice story. Ashley and Josh ought to engage in some “ass to mouth”. That is, he ought to lick / eat her anal cream pie and she ought to suck clean his cock straight out of her butthole.
I am feeling better, thank you!
I'm glad you're excited for the next chapter!
I always love your comments, thank you!
Well, there was a Pool Party in Ch. 6 ;)
The end is getting close. Sorry you didn't enjoy the chapter!
Thanks!
Stacey definitely is a knockout!
Glad you liked the chapter!
Witty, I have to say bravo, hell of a story and you sir are a hell of a storyteller. Just finished reading your whole series. After many hours, reading until my eyes couldn't no more, I was able to finished but I'm not satisfied, I need more, I'm hooked, obsessed with your story. Can't wait until your installment. My suggestion is don't close this series until graduation. Take a break, get you creative juices flowing and start book 2. The college years. Think of all the new girls that can be added to the harem. The only thing is that Steven will definitely need help with all those girls. At this point, Ian and Josh could alleviate Steven dilemma, at the same time take the boys under his wings and teach them how to treat a woman respectfully and satisfy them. What the help they already ok, with having thresholds and the whole slutsister idea. Hope you continue writing and thanks for the hours of entertainment you have given us.
, , , and You readers have great taste and am glad that I'm among kindred spirits.
Joker33. This chapter did a hell of a job moving forward and am glad that it was on the longer side! That foursome will be a sight to behold! I'm glad that Josh and Ashley are finding compatibility. I was afraid that she might find Josh a bit too slow her taste when I look back to Bermuda and the tour guide. I'm not sure about Barry, but will have more to say on that later.
First off, wherever that guy is, he may have been drawn in by a birthday pool party but is hooked on everything that has happened after it. The title isn't a misnomer since this story began with a birthday pool party. This series has happened over the course of months. Wouldn't it be confusing if Witty suddenly changed the series title just because following chapters didn't have pool parties that took place on birthdays? Did you expect the characters to have events like that each chapter? But now that I think of it, that would be a hell of a series! You know how HBO did Room 104, Witty could totally do that with birthday pool parties! A Vrbo with an indoor or secluded pool, sex natatorium, etc. the possibilities have my mind racing!
Ian was in the last one. Ian and Josh are my favorite characters and I really dig how their sexual prowess is getting better each time. I'm hoping that Shawn comes around to rejoin the Three Musketeers. I admit that Steven is kind of bulletproof when it comes to the intimacy department but it makes for very sexy episodes. I admit that April and Sarah are on the new side when it comes to characters, but they contribute to the story in fun and interesting ways. I'm not so keen to wrap things up, not until I know that the story is going to continue.
I agree with your assessment, considering all the reassurance that Steven had to give after Stacey's inadvertent disclosure. I think Lexi's turned a page when it comes to Lexi's trust with Steven when it comes to Stacey considering how the incident with the drunk guy was resolved.
I have a feeling that Ashley is going to get her creampie eaten and Josh is going to get cock cleaned once that threesome happens.
This chapter does not disappoint! I'm curious to know how Sarah will be introduced to the "group thing." She's smart enough to know that she's not the only one that he's fucking, but this chapter's conversation seems that more alone time is in store for the two of them. I was surprised at how April and Lexi hit it off and you did a great job in playing out that situation. I was also intrigued at how you showed that do-right Steven was having weak moments of lust when it came to April. I laughed out loud when I got to the "Hospital Doctors in Love" part. I don't have anything against those shows, but I know a lot of people don't like them because it gives people the idea that all medical workers do is treat patients, then the medical workers go home to fuck each other, and talk about patients. I know that Steven is old school, but country music? Steven didn't strike me as that traditional. His generation was around for Techno and House. He could totally play some tracks for Lexi saying, "We didn't need Swedish House Mafia or Skrillex, we had Danny Tenaglia and Kernkraft 400!" But if it has to be country, I could picture Steven and Aria cruising and teasing each other to Dierks Bentley's "Sideways" or Aria stripping for Steven to Big & Rich's "Save a Horse, Ride a Cowboy" I wonder if Stacey and Lexi will think it's hot or scary if April says she loves Steven whilst in the throes of ecstasy. I'm really digging how Ashley and Josh's romance is blossoming and there are echoes to how Ian and Kayla fuck. I LOVE what you did with Josh's dad and Jennifer! I did a slow sigh of a approval when I read that part. I know they're not main characters, but I really want to know how that agreement played out and what happen after that. I don't mean an abridged account. I'm talking about blow-by-blow. I think it would be really awesome if April's fascination with Planet Trek Wars helps form a speedy connection with Ian and Josh if the three of them happen to end up in front of a TV at the mansion. As for Barry, it's always quite the twist when an antagonist rears his head. I got end of Chapter 31 vibes except things are going good this time. I don't think Barry is going to Jack Torrance the door, but I can't picture April and Stacey opening the door either. When's Kelsey going to make a re-appearance? Brittney? Barry coming back has me thinking if Ken's going to Steven that there are problems with the deal. Will Brenda be able to do anything?
Witty is indeed a hell of a storyteller. Just curious, were you upset that you haven't come across another birthday pool party since the first chapter? Witty has stated that the series will end at graduation. I have no doubt that new girls will be added to the harem. I'd like to know if more guys will be added to the circle. Ian and Josh could help Steven satisfy all those ladies. But the things is, unless Ashley, Kayla, and Stephanie sing Ian and Josh's praises heavily, Nicole, Sarah, Stacey, and April won't go for them since they don't know those two young men like they know Steven, let alone want them like they want Steven. Hazel and Marcia know that they're good guys but I think they'd see that sex with them would be a downgrade from Steven. Most of all, those are guys aren't "built" like Steven. Ian and Josh already treat their ladies with respect. Those guys know how to listen, are good with taking directions, and definitely satisfy their ladies as well. But Steven could definitely help out those guys when it comes to the confidence department. I hope Witty continues writing as well and am very grateful for the stories that he has given all of us!!
Witty: This story is fantastic... Well worth the wait! You tell it like Real Life and I feel the emotions it portrays. I don't write long comments of the story as the others do and they say what I feel about it completely. You are an exceptional writer & I hope it doesn't end too soon. Your main characters are fantastic and mesh together completely. There are a lot of stories on literotica, but yours I look forward to reading exclusively. Good writing!!!
Rj🌹
Thanks for your comment! I am glad you enjoyed the story. Book 1 will likely end with graduation. Then I'll work on the outline and start Book 2.
I'm happy you enjoyed the story! And yeah, country music. It was easy for me, because I like country myself! And I'm younger than Steven in real life ;) The agreement with Josh's dad and Jennifer would be fun to explore further. We'll see what happens!
Thank you! I love your comments. Thanks for continuing to read.
I'm partway through Chapter 41. I am taking a small break to finish a story for Literotica's 25th anniversary project. I'm hoping to finish that soon so I can go back to writing Birthday Pool Party fully.
It hasn't been 7 weeks since Witty gave us an update, more like one week and change.
I never said 7 weeks since the LAST update. I was commenting that after getting chapters 34 thru 39 at a clip of about one every ten days, that since chapter 39 on 9/25, we have received only one update in the roughly fifty days since.....
I'm sorry for taking so long! I wrote a story for Literotica's 25th anniversary contest, which ended up taking a LONG time. I'm back to working on Chapter 41 now.
thanks for the support!
I'm sorry there hasn't been an update in awhile. I wrote a story that ended up being about as long as about four Birthday Pool Party Chapters. The story has been submitted to Literotica for review, and will be in the First Time category. I'm back to working on Birthday Pool Party, but next week is Thanksgiving, so I probably won't get much time to write then. Again, I apologize. Hopefully you like the new story, and it will tide you over!
-Witty
No worries Witty. We should all understand that you do this in your free time. You write what you want according to your schedule, not everyone else's.
LOL! An 88k-word epic? Talk about a "one-off", Witty... :D
Guys, Suzie's out now--and that's a lot of reading while waiting for the next BPP chapter. ;)
I just wanted to give a quick update. I spent most of November writing Suzie's Twenty-Five Acts. If you read it, I hoped you enjoyed it! Anyway, with the holidays, I'm pretty busy. However, the story is not being abandoned! I'm working on Chapter 41 as much as I can. I'm hoping to finish soon. Birthday Pool Party should only have a few more chapters before wrapping up, then I hope to start on Book 2. My plan is to hopefully avoid the mistakes I've made with Birthday Pool Party. Thanks again to everyone who i sreading!
-Witty
Quick update. I'm going on vacation. I won't be back until after New Year's. So, it'll be a little longer for Chapter 41. I really am sorry about the delay. This time of year has been crazy! Have a safe and happy holiday!
-Witty
I recently finished the entire story though 40. I wanted to let you know this was excellent writing. I also think this would be a great story for a series. The character development and the potential for conflict would carry the story beyond the obvious porn appeal.
Is part41 almost ready? Feels like I've been waiting forever to see how relationships are mended, things progress, and Barry gets his due. Hope everything's OK Witty. Haven't heard from you in a long while.
Just checking to see when 41 is coming. A lot of your fans are waiting for more this outstanding 5 star sexual adventure. Cheers.
I am so sorry Chapter 41 is taking so long! I've been really busy with real life. The story has not been abandoned, and I hope to really get back to work on it soon. Thanks for reading!
Hope the story is coming along well as your fans are ready for the next chapter to drop. Cheers
Please don't give up on your story. I know real life takes precedence, and end stories take time to finalize, but you a gifted writer you van do it!
I'm so sorry Chapter 41 is taking so long. I know it's a huge disappointment, and I don't blame anyone for giving up on the story. I just went through and corrected the errors on what I have so far on Chapter 41. Hopefully, I can get back into the swing of things and finish off Book 1 soon. Thanks for reading!
-Witty
Witty, I think most of can understand when life gets in the way of things. Anyone giving up reading a story that has 40 chapters already just because they are tired of waiting for the next chapter obviously wasnt much of a fan to begin with. I feel sorry for you Witty as the author to have all this stress put on you for something that you enjoy doing in your free time and for others to complain about it when you don't even get paid to write is just plain selfish of them. Take all the time you need to tell the story that you want to tell. You are the author and it should be done to your standards and no one else's.
Agree with Joker. The wait feels long because we're so invested in the series; we'll be here when it's ready. For the critics who feel the need to be vocal - don't go away mad, just go away.
I agree with Joker. I've gotten invested in the story and am eager for the next chapter. I'm glad to see you haven't stopped working on 41. Anyone who wants to walk away doesn't truly appreciate the time, emotion and brain power you have put into this epic story. I may have to read it through again so it is fresh in my mind. Thanks Witty
I just realized, given the title "Birthday Pool Party", the obvious end point for the series is the next birthday party, one year later.
Not a bad read so far, looking forward to the rest.
I hope more of the second tier harem members get outside relationships or other graceful exit endings.
Dear Witty, I am a new reader and have binge watched all Forty chapters. Very good story telling. Great imagination and colorful characters. I get lost sometimes when POV changes but can catch on. If you need editing assistance just ask. This may seem picky but I suggest only one thing: review the usage of ' him and her' and when to use 'he and I' otherwise very excellent work. You inspire me to write what is my head and heart.
Fan of thus tale. Folks ate pretty worried about you! 4 months and counting. Were pulling for you to get-er done!
I'm so happy to be able to say this: I submitted Chapter 41 to Literotica. It should go live in a couple of days. I'm sorry again that this took so long. I hope you enjoy it! Thanks for reading!
-Witty