- Incest/Taboo
- Father Problems
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All Comments on 'Father Problems'
by Ranric
- 29 Comments
I love this story and where it should go. Eloise should slowly become the woman of the house and John's girlfriend. Mike will be the little boy feeling defeated.
Good story. You need to write another chapter where John gets to go all the way with El with Mike watching. After that perhaps Mike could somehow enlarge his cock so that he could completely satisfy El (maybe a potion of some kind). Have John go to rehab, up alcohol and get back in top physical condition. Maybe include some time where John and Mike jointly enjoy El together. John should then get a girlfriend and Mike should make love to her in front of John and El (i.e. return the favor). After that perhaps a few paragraphs where both couples enjoy each other and live happily ever after.
A straight tale with little in 5he way of side facts.
I see the beginning of a very good tale, but it was really marred by grammatical errors, spelling mistakes & homophones.
You are in dire need of an editor.
As the story went on, errors occurred much less often, it they were a distraction.
Keep it up. Get a good editor & you’ll do fine.
Bill S.
Not gonna lie, didn't feel all that bad for Mike when it came out that he was a 25 year old dating an 18 year old who had only turned 18 a couple of months earlier. Sounds like Mikey was a pedo.
I think this is a really great story. You're a skilled writer, and draw the pictures clearly - super descriptions, excellent details. A really expert blend of background story and really hot sex. My favorite parts are the descriptions of John's cock (what an alpha male!) and his son's reactions to watching his dad cuck him with his own girlfriend. Mike's surprise at his own reaction, and the degree to which he gets overwhelmed by the pleasure it gives him, are burning hot.
it's now 8 months after Eloise dumped Mike/it's now 9 months after Eloise dumped Mike/it's now 10 months
after Eloise dumped Mike . it's also been least 6 months that John began date his son's ex girlfriend that's Eloise
. [ couple of the best sex scenes that's happened between John between Eloise become explained
from flashbacks from dreams from daydreams ] ......
extremely close 1 yr everything happened : Carmen's younger
sister Joanie . she just turned 18/she just turned 19 . along overheard Carmen talking on phone
one of her girlfriends about thee absolute best sex ever MIKE's father\Eloise's boyfriend's father\Eloise's ex
boyfriend's father . Joanie tried couple times getting the hot juicy details from her sister . Carmen refused
every time . Joanie decided she gonna have details on it somehow someway . after being told from one of
her friends : check out Carmen's phone like now like immediately . Joanie sets in motion perfect plan doing this
along does while her sister busy : does Joanie finger herself while clothed watching this listening this ,
does Joanie finger herself totally naked watching this listening this , does Joanie finger herself close naked
watching this listening this , does Joanie almost get caught watching listening while fingering herself
whether clothed whether naked , does Joanie make plans steal John away Carmen along fails , does Joanie
make plans steal John away Eloise along succeeds , does Joanie make plans seduce John along Eloise
fails doing , does Joanie make plans seduce John along Eloise succeeds doing . does Carmen ever learn
ever catch John along also Eloise , does Carmen ever learn ever catch John along also Joanie , does Carmen
ever learn ever catch John along also Eloise also Joanie , does Carmen some point join in on action
after catching , does Carmen ever break it off with John after catching . how much of these ideas do get used
part two . how much of these ideas do get used part three
I like the story, could you add some foot fetish? Maybe she gets horny again the next day and teases him under the table during breakfast or something
This stort was fantastic, here's hoping that you write another chapter soon!
Its guys like this mike dude that gives men a bad name and women like the girlfriend that gives women a bad name and you really need to know what kind of story you are writing this is posted under incest but it wasn't incest at
This is one of my favourite stories ever. I love your descriptions of lust and arousal. I’m a wet mess every time I read it. Please continue!
Hot buildup, but not finished. You did a good job of making a girl with daddy issues and an unsatisfied love life. You'd have done better by not making the dad a sl9vely drunk, though.