All Comments on 'Flying Blind Ch. 02'
by Evil Alpaca
- 17 Comments
One of my faves is back and man am I enjoying this story and it is only the second chapter. Can't wait to see where this goes.
Your character development always mesmerizes me. So Fleshed out its like I could be missing the characters right around me. Great Job as always.
Just got through this chapter, and it's still going strong. I'm looking at this as a birthday present that came a few days late *lol* As someone else said, the character development is quite strong... you've managed to create a thouroughly hateable character in Alvin. Can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter :)
I'm enjoying this immensly. Both the suspense and the sex. And you fit them together so amazingly well.
Thanks for the experience.
Do I have a problem if I'm staying up all hours reading what's essentially (being honest here) a fapfic, as if it were a novel?
I probably do, don't I? Oh well. I sure as hell don't intend to stop. This is GOOD.
Rhetorical question: Why is it that a piece of internet erotica is reading better than roughly half of the genre fiction that's currently on the shelf?
The story is great, but the grammatical mistakes still abound even though it was proofread. Was the draft copy posted by mistake?
This out of all your stories talks about first love and we all (I hope), and we all remember how special that was. I do.... Thank you for sharing always
Rich
I'm not sure if i said that the about first one too, but danm...
This is a frikin novel in its breadth, and i frikin love it!
Oh my god! You write banter better than anyone I've seen! I love it! Fantastic work!
"Still, that's . . . let's see, me, you, Kevin, Anthony, Joanna, Carla, Madison, Sasha, and Billy. That's ten."
That's nine.
5 stars again... adding my errata
who 'shutting up' => should who be whole ?
but I don't his last name => don't know his
friend kick the garment a => kick should be kicked
Heda's arms seem make her feel safe =>seemed to make her
Never mess with master. => the master or a master ?
she could out of this little challenge,
You know if had just raked th
Tight gripping tale ..... Hard to stop for some work or other stuff ...... Fabulous