All Comments on 'In Love With Us Ch. 01'
by Tom_King
- 14 Comments
My wife and I had friends like that, it was great bonding and lasted until they had kids, you did a great job with a realistic description of the first event ( similar in the emotion and vibe ) 5 stars
Part 2, The two women love each other, dump their dumb ass husbands and move on together, find some BBC bulls to whore themselves to, leaving Mike and Tom wondering what just happened.
So, the two women are having an affair and draw their husbands into a 4 some for cover. They are already bring dishonest when the fourth thing they said was they wanted everything in the open and honest. About as good a start as Eve in the Garden.
A bit like reading a sopping list, no emotions, no angst, no misgivings. Obviously the sanctity of marriage means little to these people
Good start, But "Lets be honest with each other" not in this chapter. You have my feedback above.
Wow, two couples, four beautiful sexy people, having Group Sex (there's a category for that), and somehow you made the telling of it tedious and boring. The women were way too cocky and pushy, and the guys were way too timid and uncertain. I guess its the women who wear the pants in these marriages? The dialogue was juvenile, and the whole limp dick setup was dragged out for no point. Oh, so the two slags could tongue fuck each other while the guys were flopping about in the pool? Whatever the wives did was so subtle and obscure that the effect was wasted. Are they lesbians on the side?
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The point of the story is really the best part of the story, so why not get to it? Really, who can suck a dick better? Are they teenagers?
Sailor59 and Anonymous - "part 2". Alternate ending Tom and Mike dump their wives. After Amy cleans the house.
It was the best of times. It will be the worst of times. Thanks for making the chapters short. We all know where this train is going to leave the rails.