by LaceyDresser
My first reading of your work.
I do not want the title I have used to be unknown to you. I am sure the put yellow wherever a #2 is found and red on all #3's color book is still in the market place. This girl on girl work had that feel to it from paragraph one. I picked it up because the wife plays with women story line is a delightful read, sometimes. Not here.
Maybe taking it out of first person and switching to a third person perspective would improve the story, but it needs something I am finding it tough to quantify. It simply plods along without the characters having verve. They are caricatures doing things because without motivation. The author needs to draw me in and not just write a patch work of scenes they think a reader expects. Maybe a married woman with a dissenting opinion of lesbian play between married females would inject life.
Thanks for sharing.
Terrific, absolutely love mature women that love pussy. Nice work, keep them cumming... SS
Great beginning cannot wait to read the future stories about them both and the other housewives in neighborhood
Already looking forward to ch2
....and the chapters after that as well.
I can see my only problem will be keeping track of who’s who with the at least 11 ladies that will be taking part in this lesbian love-fest. Still, there are worse things to worry about! :-)
thanks to my favorite author for another gem. i missed it when you first wrote it because i don't typically look at the Lesbian stories but when chapter 2 popped up where i normally read you i went looking for it and was not disappointed. i agree with the other commenters, this promises to be a stimulating series. Well done
Thanks jtukee, and I hope you enjoy part 2 as much. And the best way not to miss any of my narratives when first published is to "follow" me. Go to my home pay and click on the add to favorites button.
soooo sexy. Nothing sexier than an older women. My addiction. I'm 27, and dont want anything under 40 :)
-xoxo
Great first chapter. Love to read about mature women sharing sex with each other.
Please, many more chapters.
lesbian sex is a real turn-on. this story. cant wait to read more of your outstanding honey stories
Lesbian wives are very hot and so are Lacey and Maureen. Continue with the lesbian wives stories, that was beautifully arranged, very sexy.
Now this is the way two beautiful women should meet, better late than never as I would say. It's just sad that more women never get the chance to experience this intense passionate and intimate orgasm that at least there's women that can seductively treat another woman this awesome pleasure by opening up a whole new world for them.
Very sexy story. Looking forward to reading the collection. Got me very hard!
Lesbian stories usually do nothing for me, but this one got me quite excited. It is very well-written and erotic. I shall read more!
Thanks for writing this Laceydresser, a fast fun, enjoyable and well written intro to the series, looking forward to reading the other many chapters soon