All Comments on 'Mom's Nighttime Surprise Ch. 02'
by guyathotel
- 22 Comments
Good,I wondered whether you would write ch2,you have produced the goods,NOW YOU HAVE A REALLY EROTIC SERIES ON THE GO,well done.I like your style,format, the teasing,look forward to a long series,well another couple of chapters at least.
While I would rather have him doing this with his hot sister, having mom masturbating over and over again makes this a HOT story!
Well you have a really erotic situation in the RV,I wonder whats going on in the tent?This is developing into a classic,and no lurid filth.Very nicely done.
dicks in the literotica stories large is normal--Normal is small. How about pretending that you are mature and give your guys something normal unless there is a purpose in giving them an oversized one--Personally my only experience with a 'big one' was a great disapointment. Give me an educated lover any day
Fantastic story , kept me on edge . Got me hard . Thanks. More please
Loved it! Very descriptive but not too drawn out. Got me all hot. Chapter Two has great possibiliites
Not bad in terms of ideas, but the writing is kind of lame really...Better than the 1st part though, carry on improving :)
First of all, do you write other stories under different usernames? ( i think you do) You are guy writing this story from a womens point of view. (gay?) The writing was lame, and what happened to the other part of your family on this camping trip? To me this was just another attempt of you to write about a guys cock, and of course it had to be huge once again. Come out of the closet! And do yourself and your readers a favor, don't attempt to write a story from a womens point of view.
Dont take any notice of the detractors,this is fantasy time,and you have a good series evolving.The only thing I would say ,and I am sure you have thought about it,dont forget the two in the tent.Some of the most erotic incest stories involve mom with son ,dad with daughter.Keep writing.Who cares how big his cock is,as long at is not of elphantitist proportions.
It would seem that some are only happy if a story is touching on the obscene,this is not it is however, erotic.I really dont care what sexual orientation you are ,as far as I am concerned this is a entertaining tale and its getting better
After his inevitable full sex with his mom ,get the other two involved ,then the whole family can shag themselves to a standstill.As someone has already said this is erotica escapism time,not a tecnical lecture on cock sizes etc.
What a pathetic excuse for erotica! You can't spell, can't punctuate, and can't write.
Leave writing to WRITERS, and stick to your comic book collection!
I have had the dubious pleasure of sexual experience with women who have cunts the size of a railway tunnels,no not a model railway tunnel.It is no wonder that we have to fantasize about HUGE dicks.I notice that the dyke association,and I am not talking about a dutch organisation have their champions.The first time I saw a DUTCH CAP I thought what chance do I stand.To put the matter,to rights unless the woman has a deformed cavernouse sexual cavity ,a dick of 6 inches should suffice for maximum pleasure, with one proviso,the woman must shag back and the man must give his all.Please note one particular women critic.
How someone can mark this down is beyond me,by the analysis of the format they use I have a pattern emerging and have it down to about 8 main lunatics,they all appear to be lesbians.YOU KEEP WRITING and let them go and f=== themselves.This is not a site for English Grammar competitions.
The shit is hitting the fan here with the various comments, isn't it? Just proves the old adage that you can please some of the people some of the time but you can't please all the people all the time, or is it the other way round? Whatever, I wonder if any of the readers who criticise so strongly have ever tried writing themselves, erotic or otherwise? Another old adage springs to mind, people who live in glass houses, etc ... and isn't it strange how a lot of people - not all, I hasten to add - who don't like a story for whatever reason can never criticise intelligently but have to resort to being insulting? I'm not perfect but I do understand the difference between the right way to criticise and the wrong way. These people are entitled to their opinions, of course, but making such inane comments is not the way to do it. Every writer has to start somewhere, after all even Charlotte Bronte was rejected before "Jane Eyre" was accepted and became a big hit in 1847, then her novels the publishers hadn't wanted, "Villette", "The Professor" etc. got into print and were successes as well. So give this guy a break, eh? I've marked it down by 25% in the hope that this will encourage the writer to produce more by ignoring the crude remarks and help him to strive to attaining a 100% rating in future stories.
I started to read some of the other comments but you know, I don't really care. I will say this, as a man writing from a woman's perspective, it's great. I've read a lot of men's submissions and they lack in detail. Seems you have focused on this. Keep at it.
Momma, you're going to see your boy's big fat cock more and more, and you're going to do a helluva lot more than just see it. Already your son's placed his big hard mommy-pleaser on your lips, and you've cum like crazy. What are you going to feel when the lad puts his stiff cock on--and in--the place he came out of? And then I bet you'll just go out of your fucking mind when your boy blows his hot young balls up your warm wet mommy-hole and shoots you full of his baby-batter up where he was once a baby. Lucky mommy.